What I wrote before was fine, but why did I just change to cultivating immortality later on? What system is gone, what happened to the way of heaven? Is this a way of cultivating immortality under the guise of a fox demon? Seriously, if you write like this, you might as well just write about the cultivator. There are very few fighting scenes between fox monsters, so most of the scenes you write are about the fight. Really, if it doesn't work, just cut out the cultivator, otherwise some allies will scold you.
What I wrote before was fine, but why did I just change to cultivating immortality later on? What system is gone, what happened to the way of heaven? Is this a way of cultivating immortality under the guise of a fox demon? Seriously, if you write like this, you might as well just write about the cultivator. There are very few fighting scenes between fox monsters, so most of the scenes you write are about the fight. Really, if it doesn't work, just cut out the cultivator, otherwise some allies will scold you.