Jobless: Starting with Rudy's Little Sister

I still feel pretty good about it. I say it again here, and I don't want to repeat it later. There are private settings, there are private settings, and there are private settings. If you think it is unreasonable, or it is too big, please explain it to the author based on the original work, because I haven't finished reading it yet, so I get on the bus first and pay for it later. Lily, mind wandering in by mistake. As for the plot, it will gradually deviate from the main line later on. The main reason is that the author has not finished reading it and has not figured out the relationship between the characters and the story timeline. Being strong is mainly reflected in the talent in the early stage, and not being invincible is reflected in the inability to do some things, and there will be setbacks, which are reflected in all aspects. As for the emotional line, to be honest, the author has no idea, because the author has not talked about it, so comments are welcome in this aspect. Of course, pay attention to your words. Words are the first sharp sword to hurt people. The author is currently a freshman, with academic pressure and various activities. He is busy writing new chapters. I did not ask for gifts or reminders for updates, so it was purely for love. There is really no need for such a free novel. Swearing won't solve the problem. You have to tell me where to correct it, so that I can make progress and you can see what you want. Finally, I'll let it go. Anyway, only a hundred people will read it a day, but I will continue to follow the novel. Mainly because I like the novel Jobless Reincarnation more. I can say that I love it. When the enthusiasm is gone, it will probably be the day it ends. Everyone who has not traveled to another world must use your true skills and work hard to survive.

There is no big poisonous point, but Irene's strength is too high, and there is no clear explanation why she suddenly mastered the advanced fire system. (It would not be an exaggeration to say that she has high understanding. In that world, humans who relied on understanding to master advanced magic are equivalent to relying on understanding to study independently to pass the graduate school today.) I hope that the setting of Irene without memory will be changed to (memory is defective, forgetting many things), which will be much better ( Then rely on modern people's thinking to reason about the learning of magic in this world. For example, rely on thinking reasoning to figure out how to quickly master magic in this world, and then rely on understanding to master intermediate magic. However, there is a bottleneck that cannot break through to the upper level. Please add more details, which will make the viewing experience much more comfortable). Because Irene's behavior, views and ideas are the same as those of normal people, not like a person with amnesia who comes to a strange world. The settings of the private settings were not explained clearly. The leaning position in the back was awkward. In the original text, I didn't know which characters could lean down (leaning over would easily overturn and the look was really not good. It was suggested that the character should be changed to a character who suffered internal injuries and head trauma in a battle. As a result, the originally confused memory began to become clearer. The setting of leaning over was changed by thinking of things in the past life to influence Irene's behavior. Details will be added.) Later, there was also a plan to impart knowledge in dreams, which was a bit outrageous. (If you need to increase Eileen's combat power, you can write that the human god paid attention to Eileen and gave Eileen suggestions to let Eileen get the magic eye or a magic book, or some cursed magic props, such as a spear similar to Laplace's curse. This can improve Eileen's combat power without affecting the perception. ) The writing style is not excellent. You can excerpt some good sentences and add some small details of the characters' expressions. The environment of the jobless world is very beautiful. You can use more writing to describe the background. The overall evaluation is seven points. I think it can reach nine points after modification and improvement. ☺️There are too few books about jobless books. Four stars are given to encourage the author. I haven't read the updated content yet, the comments are not detailed enough, and my free time is very fragmented, so I will forget some plots. So I will comment again after I read all the updated content. I don't read on this account, so please ignore it when reading.

It's a very good book. Although I haven't read many books, I think this is a good one. I feel that the author wants to write more and can write a lot. I feel that the heroine has a lot of foreshadowing. But I saw the last chapter written by the author. I believe you will write better in the future. When you finish the next book, can you make a sequel or have a formal ending? 🤔 I still want to see the heroine's wedding [I understand] Finally, come on, I hope the author can create a better and more perfect book!

I am full of disgust for people's so-called happiness. As a result, he had to push the characters he had devoted his efforts into the creation into the abyss of tragedy. "—— Xu Yuanxuan

This kind of narrative is quite good (mainly to give five stars)

In my opinion, the writing is quite good. It doesn't matter to me whether it follows the original work or not. Just think it's good. Don't care too much about other people's comments. After all, you wrote the novel yourself.

The writing direction is good, mainly from the female perspective.

The author has ideas, but his writing style needs to be improved

OK overall

Ah, it's over