Gamifying the World, but Forgetting to Generate Players

The early stage is good, there are no logical flaws, but the middle and late stages are a bit boring. Considering it's a free Tomato book, I'll give it five stars. The actual level is probably barely four stars in my mind. It is worth watching, but it is not a five-star masterpiece. The advantage is that the setting is very detailed and novel, the logic is flawless, and the step-by-step plot in the front is eye-catching. However, as the pace of the plot is getting faster and faster later, the protagonist is busy with a large number of dungeons and piles of values, and there is almost no detailed plot development. The story is too boring, and the protagonist himself does not have a three-dimensional and full personality and pursuits, so it can hardly be called a masterpiece... At least there were some detailed descriptions of the plot in the early stage. After the protagonist started to switch between multiple identities, it became a simple copy and opened so many vests without any scruples. As a result, the main content was seriously scattered and the protagonist's action trajectory became fragmented and confusing. The author was obviously unable to grasp this complex narrative structure, which made the entire story progress quickly and boring. The content was not elaborated and could only be piled up... It's a pity. If it can maintain the previous rhythm, this book will be a masterpiece if not a masterpiece. To be honest, the further you look back, the more boring you become...

Treasure Story, the pace is a bit slow at the beginning, but becomes smoother and smoother later on. Although the title of the article is "Breaking the World", it is not a mindless article. Instead, it exudes a righteous air of knowing the world without being worldly. The author has a high level of cultural literacy.

It is really one of the rare masterpieces in Tomato. The logic is smooth and the character description is very good. Because I didn't look at the name carefully several times, the more I looked at it, the more I liked it. I can only say that it is highly recommended [like] [like]

Not mediocre, but too dull. As I kept up with the update progress, I found that the protagonist did not have any strong emotional fluctuations, and the journey was smooth. There were no bad things, and there were no people plotting against him. Of course, you can also explain that there are no emotional fluctuations because the protagonist has always been in the perspective of the game. There are no bad things and no people plotting against him. You can also say that people in this world are generally more idealistic, high-quality, and more intelligent. But as a novel, there still need to be some stories with strong emotional fluctuations and impressive memories as readers' memory points. Although the author's writing style is very good and his knowledge is rich, but as I read it, I felt that I was using the writing style and knowledge reserve of a top scholar to write an advanced version of a running account composition. I am not here to write a black book, but to raise some issues that I have seen with the author. Whether I can see it and adopt it all depends on fate.

At first I thought the title of the book was very abstract, and it felt like a mindless piece of writing. But the actual content is very interesting, all the characters' actions are logical, there are basically no loopholes, and the writing style is very good, not the kind of pure and simple novel. For example, everyone will understand. For example, if there is a plot paragraph that violates logic, in a normal Tomato novel, everyone will basically question the plot here, but in this novel, many people guess whether the author has any deep meaning in writing this way. The summary is that it is a cool article but not brainless. Don't be fooled by the name. You can tell from the first chapter that it is different from that kind of assembly line article.

It's a good read. The content is very solid and detailed. I read it for a long time before I got to Chapter 20. It's very engaging and interesting. The supporting characters described so far all have normal intelligence, and the protagonists also have their own interests. I'm surprised to see a novel with this kind of writing on Tomato. The protagonist's strength has been constantly suppressed. If it were a normal person, he would have already maxed out his skills. The protagonist's skills are all provided by others. The author seems to particularly like to use this feeling of middle-level combat power being involved in many parties. In the past few dozen chapters, the upper limit of combat power has not moved at all, and it is all about cultivating the body and mixing forces.

It can be seen from the characterization of the small characters that the author has great writing skills. At the same time, he has abandoned the tediousness of traditional online games and focused on simplicity. Moreover, the plot progresses smoothly and logically, so you won't feel uncomfortable watching it. It really beats 99% of the works, with a bit of serious literature.

The author of this book really makes me love and hate him. What I love is that his setting is very novel and unconventional. It can even be said that he deconstructs the game-type online articles, and his ideas are also clear. What I hate is that after the excitement and freshness in the early stage has passed, in the middle stage, it starts to procrastinate a lot and repeat descriptions, just like playing a game and constantly brushing up on repeated materials. If it's a simple game, the protagonist will go around worshiping him all day long. As a super Yuan person, the main plot is not even clear. This is not a game like Luan Keqiyuan. You should let us know what the protagonist is going to do. He just pretends to be cool all day long. Use a clone to show off, use a puppet to show off, and see that the purpose of the protagonist is even missing, and it is not clear how strong the protagonist is. It all depends on the opponent. Anyway, I hope the author can come back, and I also hope that your creations will get better and better, and your literary thoughts will flow like a fountain.

It's very good. It's an eight-point score if it doesn't have any poisonous points in Tomato. There are no poisonous points in this book. There is no heroine. The supporting characters are intelligent and the villains are normal. The setting is good and the writing style is good. The interweaving of vernacular and classical Chinese has a good look. Moreover, the skill introduction of the wearer makes the whole book look high-end.

Good, good, good, not like a book that could be published by Tomato. It is well organized and logical. It tells the story of a young boy who traveled to a strange world and grew up step by step. The best thing is that there is no rush to explain the world, all the clues are integrated into the story, and the protagonist slowly discovers it.

As far as the current chapter is concerned, the writing is very good, the IQ is online, and the writing style is passable, but please don't give up at the beginning. The writing is really good. The encouragement mechanism of Tomato is really problematic. Many good novels written in the early stage will basically start to be brainless in the middle, and will start to fail.

Advantages: 1. The characters are relatively three-dimensional, and even small characters have their own interests to pursue. 2. The protagonist knows how to deal with the world and knows how to advance and retreat. Bosses will promote subordinates instead of mindlessly suppressing them. 3. Abandoned some traditional upgrade models. The protagonist itself has no level, but has three attributes of spirit, energy and spirit and various skills. It not only controls the protagonist's upgrade speed, but also makes the protagonist's progress obvious. Very comfortable to watch. Expectations: 1. I hope the author can control the overall progress and write longer. After all, the author's previous books were not very long. (If it's more than 2 million words, please [send your heart]) 2. Stable updates to ensure quality. Save more manuscripts and break out regularly.

It's a pretty good work. I've read the previous chapters to evaluate it. Don't be misled by the title. The writing is good and the plot is well connected. It's not a novice novel. A slight shortcoming is that the psychological changes and inner drama of the protagonist after joining the army are slightly less written. In the author's writing style, he is handsome, but he seems to have changed. As for what happens next, I will review it later. Already fell asleep watching

The writing is online, the knowledge is rich, the logic is reasonable, and the setting is interesting. The setting is a bit like the Gu Huo Bird type. The characters have good IQs, are not toxic, and the pace is lively and refreshing. The world background design is connotative, regular and deep. It's really the best book I've ever read on Tomato Please recommend works of the same type and level

The first hundred chapters are very well written. Whether it is setting or character creation, what impressed me most is the county magistrate. He saw the protagonist's high spirits and chose to support the protagonist instead of forcing him to stay. In the later military field, thanks to the strong atmosphere of Wei Guo, the protagonist grew up without much hindrance, but in the middle period, he fell into a common problem of game writing. , The friends created in the early stage appear less and less, and they start to grind dungeons and open clones. It can be seen that the author wants to make up for this through the plot of the dungeon, and it also starts to lead to the battle between the two heavens. However, this kind of repetition will wear down the patience of the readers. This can only be avoided later when the level is higher and the NPCs encountered are also smarter, and the magic dialect is very interesting. The problem is also here, dragon head, pig belly and phoenix tail, this is how the composition is written, but this is a novel, and every chapter is read by people. Those who can't stand it in the middle period just leave. If you skip the middle period and read the later part, the relationship between the characters will be a bit unclear, and because of the reason of getting stronger, the NPCs in the front appear less, and the main plot is the battle between the two heavens. It is only in the middle period that it starts to say that the early period is just to become stronger, but it is understandable that it has no effect if the strength is not strong. In summary, the work can be rated as a masterpiece. The setting is novel, the characters are well created in the early stage, and the rhythm is moderate. However, repetition in the middle period affects the perception. In the later stage, the world view is unfolded. The confrontation between the heavens and the secret world is very interesting. The author has rich cultural reserves and has a lot of traditional cultural knowledge. The writing style of classical Chinese will be a little stressful, but it is not a big problem. Moreover, the author will write short poems from time to time, which is still in line with the plot and has a good look and feel.

It looks very comfortable. There aren't many such comfortable stories in Tomato. It's not the kind of cool novel. The characters are well-developed and the supporting characters have their own ideas. They don't just try to please the protagonist or compete with the protagonist [OK]. The plot rhythm is also well grasped, not too fast or too slow.

Overall, it was pretty good. The protagonist's madness in the early stage looked good, and it was also great to expand the world view from the perspective of the protagonist. The writing is clear and logical. However, the part about the military camp may be because of too much emphasis on writing (it reads too literate, but it can be read clearly with a little thought), so it is too bland and has no mood to read on. Just like my life, three o'clock and one line every day, like ants on a piece of driftwood, even if there is an accident, I can't leave this piece of driftwood. Generally speaking, the writing style can be logical and clear, but it is too bland in the middle period. If you are willing to calm down and read it carefully, it is still very good.

I have read dozens of chapters so far, and I have become addicted to it, unable to extricate myself. The writing is fluent, reasonable, and has its own style of vernacular writing. Good! Thriving! I've read more than 100 chapters, and here's my quick review. The plot is a bit repetitive and complicated. It's completely different from what I felt when I read it earlier. To put it simply, it starts high and goes low. Later (at least to the chapter I'm reading), the plot is repetitive, with no ups and downs, no ups and downs, just average.

At least from the first thirty chapters, it sounds like a good novel that is pleasing to the eyes and ears. If it can keep people from skipping chapters, this novel is very, very good. Okay, I was too careless. The first thirty chapters are pleasing to the eye, but the rest are difficult to listen to.

It's not bad. I saw the latest part. The protagonist did not choose Yu Zhong because of the reward from the Wei State. Instead, he went around other countries to use different vests to collect benefits in order to become stronger. This is good. Originally, it would be enough if the time traveler did not rebel. It would be boring to keep working for others stupidly. Now that I'm past the age where I love reading about loyal kings and serving the country, it's better to be selfish. The writing is pretty good, but it's too slow to start officially contacting the career change in heaven after reading a few hundred of them. In addition, your book is a long article, and the progress itself is slow. I'll save it first and wait until there are more updates [laughing]

The writing style is very good and cultured, there are no bad jokes, and there is no desire to lust after beautiful women. There is no pornographic talk, no ambiguity, and you focus on your career. There are no messy seductive heroines and emotional lines. Sisters who like it can feel free to join it.

Not to mention anything else, none of the characters in the book are stupid, they are all extremely smart, and all of them are full of human sophistication, which makes people unknowingly understand the human sophistication in the workplace, family and circle of friends, as well as the causes and consequences of their various behaviors. The plot is also very smooth, and there is no plot that makes people feel unnatural or anti-human. But I'm even more curious about how the author, who understands the world so well, can write it into the book so that readers can unconsciously learn to understand the world and what it does in real life. But it is true that compared to those educational books that point out the correct answers and ask you to change yourself, and it is your own fault if you don't change, the author's way of writing knowledge into interesting stories, so that readers can unconsciously learn new things, is more suitable for most people. Maybe some people who understand this think that these are low-end common sense, but people who don't understand will never know these low-end common sense if no one tells them. And the plot is pretty good too

I have read half of it so far. The subject matter is quite novel, the writing is good, and the details are very good. The small drawback is that the protagonist drops too many props when he completes the book. Many of them are passed over in one stroke, and not many are actually written and used. As a result, the props obtained later do not have the same sense of rarity as before. I read it again. This setting is really worthy of five stars. The details of the author's writing are also good, but I couldn't stand it until the 300th chapter. It felt like there was no outline. The protagonist was running around here and there without paying attention to improving his own strength. He opened a small account everywhere to do branch plots. It was very boring to watch.

I read more than two hundred chapters in one go, and the bookworm of more than ten years couldn't stop reading. The author is really 6. The structure is reasonable and the plot is compact. The most important thing is that he is very picky about readers. Only when he understands the sun, moon and stars, the yin and yang of heaven and earth, the Five Elements and Bagua, Qimen Dunjia, Plum Blossoms Easy to Count, Ziwei Dou Shu, Twenty-Eight Constellations... Can he read it more vividly and have to believe it.

Good luck, a gamified world. Wild monsters and copies will be refreshed. The plot develops steadily and the world view slowly unfolds. "Demons without intelligence will not die, but people with intelligence will have a short life." Monsters may gain intelligence after killing people, and then they will yearn for human life and start to be afraid of death. "People fight with people, people fight with monsters, monsters fight with people, monsters fight with monsters." Monsters with intelligence will either sneak into the world, cooperate with people, or join the court, or even attack other copies.

Comment after reading Chapter 180 Medium quality grass jelly It is a fantasy novel with a very complete world view. At the same time, the character creation routines are used very skillfully, and the interaction between the characters is just right. Overall, the logic is clear, the motivation is clear, and the tactics are not brainless. The dungeon world and the main world are brilliant through the blending of items and plots. The overall rhythm is reasonable and the plot is brilliant. The plot structure is clear, and the plot is too natural. The mixed various dungeon items may not be to some people's taste. Some plots and minor supporting characters deliberately created to serve the main line may be a bit abrupt (I am picky about good works), but the overall look and feel is still very good, and you can put it directly on the bookshelf. Personal subjective rating of five stars Follow the entry-level bookworm Smoked Fish to take you to read online articles [Blow a kiss]

This book has a novel setting and broad imagination. The author's writing power and skills can be seen from the introduction of the world view and various martial arts. But there are indeed several problems that are difficult to ignore while reading along. The first is the issue of character creation. The protagonist Zhou Yuan was very distinct in his early days in the village. He was affectionate and righteous at the same time, but also a bit chivalrous and ruffian. But after leaving the village and joining the army, the protagonist became a being who could only speak polite words to various people. The author also lacked various psychological descriptions and shaping of Zhou Yuan. It is really difficult to feel that Zhou Yuan is a flesh-and-blood character. The same is true for other character creations. Each character feels similar and has no characteristics. Then there is the description of character dialogue, which is often presented in long paragraphs of dialogue, without the expressions and movements of the characters when speaking, as if they are just talking. At the same time, the person who said this paragraph is often not written, or the person who said it is not mentioned until a large paragraph of dialogue is written. Not only is the scene empty, but it sometimes also causes trouble in reading. Finally, there is a lack of excitement in upgrading. The protagonist acquires various skills, and readers know that he has improved. However, the author has never specifically stated what level he has reached and how many levels of monsters he can fight. This is actually a huge lack of excitement, and will also cause a certain degree of collapse in combat power and trouble for readers. At the same time, I think it is a bit strange that since we are all players, there are no levels. In summary, the book starts out amazingly, but as the writing progresses, there are also problems with the lack of characterization and the lack of excitement to attract readers to continue reading. You can take a look. Of course, I have read this book carefully. The above are all my personal opinions. If you don't like it, please don't criticize it.

I just read this book, I like it, it's so much fun The plot before Caiximen was pretty good, but what comes next? The plot jumps around a lot, stacking up a bunch of titles, as if the plot only serves the titles. The subsequent plot development is too boring, and the meaning of the main plot is unclear.

This book is also on the rankings next door. There is no brainless villain or bloody plot. The protagonist himself has a very high emotional intelligence. If you have read too many brainless and slap-in-the-face stories, you will find this book a wash 🧠

It seems that many people feel that it becomes more and more boring later on, but I feel more and more happy as I watch it. The turning point almost started when Zhou Yuan entered the Caixi Sect and then entered Yuntian. It felt like the story of a commoner who gradually struggled from the bottom to the upstart of the empire suddenly shifted to the world of cultivating immortals. This period is indeed a bit foggy, but as Tan Yue's story deepens, the exciting points of Zili and Luohu's incarnations of monsters and evil spirits unfold from different perspectives, and Youyuan Ren's status in the Taoist sect rises step by step. The three-pronged approach is very satisfying for me. Personally, I like Luo Hu's evil perspective. I follow updates every day and support the author!