Poor Spiritual Roots? I Became an Immortal Through Dual Cultivation

There are many contradictions 1. You wrote before that he is a very cautious person, but after you met Lin Qingyue, the two of you seemed to have only experienced life and death once, and you just had some good feelings. You used your secret method to exchange him for a foundation-building pill. Isn't this quite telling her that you have a treasure? Isn't this too hasty? 2. The Lin family is based on your treasure. You don't seem to write it very prominently, but you just mention it in one stroke. It doesn't reflect the Lin family's dedication to the treasure at all. There is no ups and downs. Also, when you write that the Lin family wants to win over you, you only write about it in one stroke. There are no ups and downs at all. You don't write clearly why the Lin family wants to win over you. You just write that you are not simple, and then it's gone. 3. Another thing is that when you were in the sect competition, you participated in a sect competition, and your results did not attract much attention at all. You just won the sect competition once, so why do so many people know that you have treasures on you? What is the point of knowing that you have treasures, just because you won the competition once? And when you made a large sum of money, you didn't show many of your secrets, right? You also showed it in one stroke here 4. Then there is the emotional line. You and Lin Qingyue suddenly became like that. Don't you think it's very abrupt? It's just inexplicable. There is no foreshadowing in the front, and you don't have any explanation in the back. It's inexplicable that they are together. It's an inexplicable dual cultivation. 5. Also, when you wrote about your two swords, the Yin and Yang swords, didn't you realize that what you wrote was just standing still? When you upgraded for the first time, it was already a primary magic weapon. When you got the materials for the second time to upgrade, you wrote it as an ordinary weapon again. The two swords were upgraded by you to the Yin and Yang swords. Then you wrote that the foundation stage came into play, the golden elixir stage was developed into sword pills, and the Nascent Soul stage was used to practice the life magic weapon. What became your trump card? You seem to have written this sentence four or five times, which makes you look very verbose. Generally speaking, my thinking is not very rigorous. You are not careful about the places that should be detailed, but you describe in detail the places that should be touched upon in one stroke.

Make a sound, after! ! ! Who taught you to write like this?