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Reader comments
I don't like the style,
It's another sand dollar plot where the origin of the protagonist is mysterious and hidden from the readers. I would like to ask why the protagonist gives all his resources to the heroine? Is this a female channel? The classic protagonist's cheating is not as strong as the heroine's and the protagonist's family. What was your idea of writing about the protagonist's weak family? The protagonist's father watched the protagonist being murdered by his brother? There was no punishment at all afterwards. The protagonist still didn't sever ties with his family? Still licking his face and staying in his family? Hasn't the protagonist's father cut off the protagonist's pocket money? Why don't you leave the family and take revenge? This author is really a turtle man. The classic system is a toy given to the protagonist by the protagonist or others. Many people in classic novels know the origin of the protagonist, but readers do not. The author of the classic sand dollar likes to write some very mysterious plots about the protagonist's past and future.
What does the author say? It's not that the writing is bad, it's just that the backend is too complicated. It would be very boring for readers to lay out so much at the first point in the early stage, really. The previous ones are all good, especially these two commands seem to be separated from the main line. If it is not good to write these two as the main plot, you can read it yourself if you are the real author. Do you think it is smooth? In particular, even if the second paragraph is written as the main plot, it will be okay, but in the second paragraph, the main plot is intermittent and you have not completed the main plot. It will be very uncomfortable to read it like this.
I don't like the style,
It's another sand dollar plot where the origin of the protagonist is mysterious and hidden from the readers. I would like to ask why the protagonist gives all his resources to the heroine? Is this a female channel? The classic protagonist's cheating is not as strong as the heroine's and the protagonist's family. What was your idea of writing about the protagonist's weak family? The protagonist's father watched the protagonist being murdered by his brother? There was no punishment at all afterwards. The protagonist still didn't sever ties with his family? Still licking his face and staying in his family? Hasn't the protagonist's father cut off the protagonist's pocket money? Why don't you leave the family and take revenge? This author is really a turtle man. The classic system is a toy given to the protagonist by the protagonist or others. Many people in classic novels know the origin of the protagonist, but readers do not. The author of the classic sand dollar likes to write some very mysterious plots about the protagonist's past and future.
What does the author say? It's not that the writing is bad, it's just that the backend is too complicated. It would be very boring for readers to lay out so much at the first point in the early stage, really. The previous ones are all good, especially these two commands seem to be separated from the main line. If it is not good to write these two as the main plot, you can read it yourself if you are the real author. Do you think it is smooth? In particular, even if the second paragraph is written as the main plot, it will be okay, but in the second paragraph, the main plot is intermittent and you have not completed the main plot. It will be very uncomfortable to read it like this.