Demon Illustrated Book, I Became Stronger by Collecting It!

The content is pretty good, and the writing is pretty good, but I feel like the biggest problem is that I accepted that little apprentice, and there is still no positive feedback. The main thing that affects the senses the most is that in just three days, the little apprentice has already started asking the master to help her with things. In less than a week, the protagonist has already identified her as his anchor in this world. It's too fast. It's getting more and more abstract, so I recommend you not to read it.

I have just finished reading the first big chapter at the beginning, which is the end of the Three Immortals Empress chapter, and I will come here to give some suggestions. First of all, the author has a good idea. Nowadays, there are really fewer and fewer "folklore" immortality themes. Many immortality themes have been transferred to mortals. On the contrary, the "ambitious" themes rooted in the world, the government and the public are the most rare and valuable, so I have to give the author praise for this aspect. What follows is my opinion, which is quite superficial. If it is wrong, please correct me. First of all, recognition must be given. You can feel that the author's ideas are excellent, but you can also feel that the writing power and experience are slightly insufficient. Generally speaking, a story is people-centered. Only people-centered stories can ensure that the plot can be "accepted". However, if people are put aside and only focus on the development of the story, then there will be a flaw of putting the cart before the horse, which will affect the shaping of the character. (This problem is very prominent in the story of the Three Immortals. The protagonist goes up the mountain to watch the ceremony. This incident itself is the "whim of the protagonist". In other words, the protagonist's going up the mountain does not have the absolute character of the plot and is a dispensable situation. At this time, the subsequent plot is very important. It must be reflected in the subsequent plot that "it is necessary for the protagonist to go up the mountain. Although it was not found at the beginning, it was found later", so as to make the plot connection smooth enough.) (However, after the protagonist went up the mountain, the above problem was not filled, but a new problem appeared: the protagonist's purpose was blurred. The protagonist got different information from different people. This writing technique is very good! This is a very typical Rashomon technique, which emphasizes a different perspective and different information, which leads the protagonist into The temple asks the Three Immortals, but in this section, a new problem arises, that is, the purpose is unclear. When the protagonist encounters obstruction and resistance from many people one after another, he uses a completely unreasonable violent method to force everyone. This is a very bad strategy, because you are not a reckless person, and you are not a demonic person at the same time. You are a Taoist priest, and what you are looking for is the purpose of the Three Immortals. How can you fight for your life without knowing the other party's position and purpose? You fight with them in anger, and then forcefully go through the plot. This way of advancing the plot is like an RPG game. I don't know who I am, so I am going to kill each other. Shouldn't it be? It should be a tool to advance the plot, but should become a moderator of the plot. Therefore, at the end of this big chapter, the protagonist's character collapsed. On the one hand, he neither gave a better solution nor showed his attitude as the protagonist. Instead, he continued the plot with a feeling of futility. This is the last thing that can happen in the novel) Therefore, in summary, the author should pay more attention to the protagonist. A writer may have many ideas to write about, but when crossing a river, he must take off his shoes. He must first stabilize the character before the plot can run smoothly. This is my suggestion. I typed a lot, and they were all based on my feelings. I said more and less, and I hope that the author will not be in a bad mood. Of course, these statements of mine have many flaws. I hope the author will bear with me, and I also hope that the author will get better and better.

It's pretty good-looking, but, the apprentice I picked up is really a poisonous person. Also, I think monsters are monsters, and there is no need to be merciful.

It was fine at first, until the protagonist asked the three demons, and then it was like a different person. People basically run away from there

It is a rare good book that has no distinction between realms and only talks about the level of morality and conduct. Moreover, the character of the protagonist is very suitable for me. So far, there are not too many bad points. The overall story is very comfortable and smooth to read. For those of you who are still watching, I really can't stand it anymore. It's changed too much from the previous one. Alas, when the update is finished, or when it feels better, please let me know, and I'll come back and take a look. It's becoming more and more CAODAN, fantasy becomes science fiction? , Just do it

I think it's okay. Many people say it's poisonous to be a disciple. I feel okay. After all, it's the protagonist who saves the first person. It's okay if he has a little more kindness. It's a small poison, and it's not very poisonous. Maybe it's because I have high poison resistance. [Cover face]

The theme of Disha is about earth evil. After reading Chapter 101, I gave it a five-star review. The opening poem is interesting. The story, scenes, characters, and logic are all very good. The update is too slow, and the wine festival was even castrated. If you imitate him, you will definitely fall into the trap.

Tell a story. There used to be a village that worshiped a wild god. They knew that the wild god was a demon. But every year, two boys and girls are sacrificed. Suddenly one year there is a severe drought, and not a blade of grass grows for hundreds of miles. The small village was indeed safe and sound. Suddenly one day a Taoist priest came to get rid of the demons. After the Taoist priest left, he ate one child within a month. After half a year, only the bones of the village were left.

It's very nice and has a sense of instant vision. Although they are from the same series, they each have their own characteristics.

It's very good to watch, although it's not as good as the Seventy-Two Transformations of Disha, but it can still be compared and compared. The only thing I personally think is not good is that there is an apprentice. For me, I can't stand the leader next door. It's because of the inexplicable emotional scenes. I hope the author writes less (っ- ‸ - ς)

I can't comment on it. Just looking at the writing level, it's pretty good. Talking too much about some of the things in it would be a slap in the face to some people. However, society is developing, and some things can't be accomplished in one go. We still need to work hard.

How many chapters are left until we return to modern times? We can also bring some modern food and items back to ancient times [laughter] No more energy. . .

This subject matter actually feels a bit like the Seventy-Two Changes of Disha. The writing is quite good. I hope it won't stop updating [laughter]

It's a good book. It's really interesting to read. I'd also like to ask if there are any other books similar to this type? It's not enough to see, and it's too little. It's so comfortable to see someone who has the strength to travel around the world.

Okay, but there are too few, and I finished reading it in a few hours [laughs awkwardly]

It looks good, but the score is low. I don't know if it's because of the title of the book. No one clicked in to read it. I swiped it two or three times at the beginning. When I saw the title, I swiped it and clicked in to take a look. Hey, I have to eat.

The author is not very good at description, and some of the settings are not done well, but few people pay attention to these small details. I don't know if it is a bit stuck when writing, and some parts are not read smoothly. Some descriptions of things are not written well, and the meaning is reversed. But I still give it five stars. Although it is not as good as Di Sha, it is more updated than him.

The Last Dynasty and Group Portraits are quite well written. The reason for the low rating is probably because the protagonist traveled back and forth from ancient times to modern times and persuaded many people to quit.

The description of the characters is very good, there is no conflict, and the demons in it are not all evil, and the people are not all good. There is no right or wrong. Only different positions cause fights. I can only say that this book is very good, at least I like to read it.

The first time the protagonist wears it is the late Han Dynasty, and the second time is the late Qin and early Han Dynasty.

Come on, author, keep writing. Write according to your own inner thoughts. When you're done, read the book reviews and find out what readers don't like. Make some revisions and start a second book. Then write a revised version of this book and write a new book. Not to mention the popularity, there is still a lot of improvement.

To be honest, it's really good. It depends on how it develops in the future. Don't accept more disciples. Don't listen to the following saying that traveling through modern times is meaningless. Update quickly.

Write according to your own ideas, and then depending on the situation, you will favor certain camps. Depending on your ability, you can write books for which readers. It is good to have dreams, but the writing style and artistic conception may not be in place and the audience is not large.

Your writing techniques, logical structure, and epic narrative level, without being wordy, and able to express what you want to express, can definitely be the starting point for a great master! ! ! Come on! Don't give up! On the platform of online articles, you have surpassed 90% of authors!

The writing is very good, but I feel less energetic after returning to reality [face covering] It feels like I have restarted the game and have nothing but equipment.

It's been a long time since I've seen a book with such content. I haven't been reading it for a long time. As of now, the protagonist is a Taoist priest who wields a sword to the end of the world. He has chivalry, selfishness, flesh and blood, and spirituality.

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The writing is good, with some shortcomings. Five stars presented. Also, is there a female protagonist? [Laughing evilly][laughing evilly]

5 Stars. Except for the forced entry into the Three Immortals Temple at the beginning, which was not handled very well, everything else is good. There are not many better books on Tomato. A little bit toxic, acceptable. I have a lot of bad reviews.

The content is rich and logical. The author writes a poem to intersperse each chapter. It is very literary. The golden crow scorches the earth and desolates the land, and the people are devastated. Suddenly, a sword was raised on the main road, and it was difficult to quell the disaster and save all directions. It's just that there are too few updates, and the donkeys in the production team don't dare to take such a break. [Angry][angry]