(Funa-ryu, devil fruit ability user)
"Hey! Barras! It's your turn. What is your dream?"
"It's Blast... I... Let's achieve true justice for this world."
The tall and strong young man spoke. His upper body was naked, revealing his strong muscles. He was only wearing a navy justice coat without the epaulettes symbolizing military rank.
"Before that, I will supervise you criminals."
After saying that, the young man put his heels on the wine barrel.
…
This is the story of a "Fallen Marine" joining the Straw Hats.
Reader comments
The character portrayal is okay. The protagonist has his own thoughts and is not superior to others just because of his status as a time traveler. Although his strength is strong, he is not outrageous. He does not steal Luffy's scene. The other fans of the ship take away Luffy's scene. It feels like you are the boss of the Straw Hat Pirates, and Luffy has no sense of existence. Also, the writing is a bit fast, and many details are not included. The author can also add a little bit of his own plot, and does not have to follow the original version exactly.
The plot is smooth, the characters are well-rounded, and it's good to watch! I just hope there is no female protagonist. Like the author, the protagonist is written in a big way. The protagonist should be pursuing true justice, so it is best not to have emotional drama. In fact, the most difficult thing to write is the emotional drama. If it is not written well, it will make people feel awkward and easy to be criticized! Personally, I think it should be cp-free and can be mixed with daily life on the ship (personal suggestion). Isn't friendship better than love? [Sending a heart] [Sending a heart] I hope there is no emotional line [Blowing a kiss] [Blowing a kiss] [Blowing a kiss]
The author saw that the cover of this book is Sakaski, and the protagonist's name is also 4 characters. Combined with the above mentioned son of O'Hara's participant, I would like to ask the author if the father of the protagonist is Sakaski...😂😂
The subject matter is good and the content is great.
I'm very curious about how to deal with deserters in the war. Just like the original work, a deserter goes to question the general who is at the forefront of the war.
Yes, the protagonist joined the navy before, but was well protected. He didn't see the darkness above, but when he saw the ships holding the slaves. Despite the hardship, he still faltered, causing his strength to regress.
It's so beautiful. The protagonist's character is one of the rare ones that I like very much. He has his own understanding of justice and is a gentle yet firm man. I love him so much!
There is nothing worth complaining about in the plot except for Cornish. I feel that she will be difficult to deal with. After all, it is difficult for Bay alone to gain a foothold in the later stage or even in the new world, and it is difficult in terms of combat power and positioning.
I really like the scene where Akainu and the protagonist meet in Alabasta. Sakaski's insistence on absolute justice contrasts with Blaster's justice. Not arresting him directly is Lao Sa's last insistence. He should want to see if Blaster can stick to his own justice. The arrangement of the Demon-Slaying Order later is also very reasonable.
If it can continue to be maintained, it will undoubtedly be a good book. I am really looking forward to the battle at the top hahahaha
Is there a female protagonist? It's pretty good-looking, and the character creation is pretty good. Although it's a bit rough overall, there's no particularly OOC behavior, and the article is fairly fluent. The only drawback is that the number of words is too small. Please update it quickly. Thank you to the author.
It's not procrastination, it's not procrastination, it's not procrastination, it's really beautiful to say important things three times. It's the first time I've seen this kind of subject. I originally thought that there would be a shortage of books about "Pirates" [Crying] There are too few good ones. How about the author updating them five times a day [laughing]
good-looking[note]
It's pretty good. I wanted to write a novel about Akainu's son, and then the war on the top called him father, and then Akainu said I'm not your father, and the two started fighting.
Then there is the woman with an extra empty island. I feel like the one with an empty island is like a burden.
It's good-looking, better than expected. Although it's about following the ship, it's very good-looking. The only drawback is that the male protagonist's reason for firmly choosing to follow the ship when he only knows Luffy as the protagonist is a bit weak [star], but the coherent plot and good writing make up for this [hold]. I wish the author success in his studies and a new chapter soon [sneaky laugh]
This book is very different from Tomato's pirate novels of the same type. The whole book is a top choice in terms of writing style and setting. The whole book is biased towards the original plot. It may be a little green and rough for the plot, but overall it fits the fan plot in my mind. After all, Who would refuse Akainu's son to come on board? Trying not to change the ending of the original work and adding original characters is actually quite a challenge. However, there is one obvious shortcoming, that is, it is too short. I hope the author will read my comments and make hundreds of updates a day [laughing and crying] [laughing and crying]
I have read so many fan fictions, and this one is one of the few that can give me the feeling of watching the original One Piece when I was a kid. The strength of the protagonist is also well controlled. The most important thing is that there is no system. Although there may be some bloodline theory, the protagonist's strength is all cultivated by himself.
Is the exploding fruit similar to mr.5? [What]
When I saw Cornis, the sudden addition of a crew member without combat capabilities felt a bit abrupt. In addition, including Brooke and Jinbe, the total number was 11, which was one more than the ten crew members Luffy originally wanted. [Rolls eyes] [Rolls eyes]
Will the protagonist confront Akainu with swords?
Please give me a heroine😌I feel like if I have a heroine, it will turn into a stallion novel, and then it will become a harem novel here. I can't imagine having a harem on Luffy's ship.
I like Xiao Wang very much, and of course I also like the protagonist created by the author now. It feels like a passionate drama.
I feel that I and Robin-chan are more suitable as partners in revolutionary struggle. I beg the protagonist and the people around the protagonist not to fall in love. Brain tutorial
🙏
Is there a female protagonist? I hope it will be a single heroine Robin [smile]
I love reading it. Other authors say that they are great at writing books and update quickly. In fact, they are all in vain. Click on the author's homepage to teach you how to recognize yourself.
It feels ok, so far it seems ok. I read the popular book reviews and then read the novel. They all said that your one has a blocking point, so I went to read it and found it a bit strange. I gritted my teeth and said I must give it to that one. After Nami's adoptive mother's revenge, Luffy said a few words and then sat down. In the comment section of the book I read, you said that you were thinking about whether Nami was worth joining the Straw Hats. At this point, I felt very strange. Why would the Navy think about the daughter of his best friend joining the Pirates? And judging from the character of the protagonist, you probably wouldn't have such an idea. Anyway, I'll take another look. If it's good, I'll add that star [face covering]
It looked pretty good at first [laughs], but I have a question about whether the protagonist is proficient in the Six Styles, and his explosive fruit should be able to explode the air under his feet to achieve the conditions for flight [Thinking]
This is a rare good grass. Please leave a review. Don't let it die young.
Really good, not the kind that becomes invincible in the first few chapters
I really like this type of protagonist
Overall it seems okay
It's quite interesting to write, all that's left is to grasp the rhythm.
Talking about justice in the world of pirates is nonsense. It is like the rebels in troubled times. They will also commit crimes. What can be done? Kill them all?
Ace can die, but the location and reasons remain the same, and it is almost a replica of the original version. As the protagonist of an important event, his experience remains unchanged.
Follow quickly, follow quickly, it's not enough.
If you want to read the fanfic One Piece with brains, look for this novel. If you don't have brains and enjoy it, just take a detour.
I have a good outlook on life, I like it
A very good book
Why is the score so low? ? ? Isn't it pretty? [Cool]
It's okay, come on, Oli will give you [eat melon]
It's a good-looking bag, use my coke's personality to vouch for it
The character portrayal is okay. The protagonist has his own thoughts and is not superior to others just because of his status as a time traveler. Although his strength is strong, he is not outrageous. He does not steal Luffy's scene. The other fans of the ship take away Luffy's scene. It feels like you are the boss of the Straw Hat Pirates, and Luffy has no sense of existence. Also, the writing is a bit fast, and many details are not included. The author can also add a little bit of his own plot, and does not have to follow the original version exactly.
The plot is smooth, the characters are well-rounded, and it's good to watch! I just hope there is no female protagonist. Like the author, the protagonist is written in a big way. The protagonist should be pursuing true justice, so it is best not to have emotional drama. In fact, the most difficult thing to write is the emotional drama. If it is not written well, it will make people feel awkward and easy to be criticized! Personally, I think it should be cp-free and can be mixed with daily life on the ship (personal suggestion). Isn't friendship better than love? [Sending a heart] [Sending a heart] I hope there is no emotional line [Blowing a kiss] [Blowing a kiss] [Blowing a kiss]
The author saw that the cover of this book is Sakaski, and the protagonist's name is also 4 characters. Combined with the above mentioned son of O'Hara's participant, I would like to ask the author if the father of the protagonist is Sakaski...😂😂 The subject matter is good and the content is great.
I'm very curious about how to deal with deserters in the war. Just like the original work, a deserter goes to question the general who is at the forefront of the war.
Yes, the protagonist joined the navy before, but was well protected. He didn't see the darkness above, but when he saw the ships holding the slaves. Despite the hardship, he still faltered, causing his strength to regress.
It's so beautiful. The protagonist's character is one of the rare ones that I like very much. He has his own understanding of justice and is a gentle yet firm man. I love him so much! There is nothing worth complaining about in the plot except for Cornish. I feel that she will be difficult to deal with. After all, it is difficult for Bay alone to gain a foothold in the later stage or even in the new world, and it is difficult in terms of combat power and positioning. I really like the scene where Akainu and the protagonist meet in Alabasta. Sakaski's insistence on absolute justice contrasts with Blaster's justice. Not arresting him directly is Lao Sa's last insistence. He should want to see if Blaster can stick to his own justice. The arrangement of the Demon-Slaying Order later is also very reasonable. If it can continue to be maintained, it will undoubtedly be a good book. I am really looking forward to the battle at the top hahahaha
Is there a female protagonist? It's pretty good-looking, and the character creation is pretty good. Although it's a bit rough overall, there's no particularly OOC behavior, and the article is fairly fluent. The only drawback is that the number of words is too small. Please update it quickly. Thank you to the author.
It's not procrastination, it's not procrastination, it's not procrastination, it's really beautiful to say important things three times. It's the first time I've seen this kind of subject. I originally thought that there would be a shortage of books about "Pirates" [Crying] There are too few good ones. How about the author updating them five times a day [laughing] good-looking[note]
It's pretty good. I wanted to write a novel about Akainu's son, and then the war on the top called him father, and then Akainu said I'm not your father, and the two started fighting. Then there is the woman with an extra empty island. I feel like the one with an empty island is like a burden.
It's good-looking, better than expected. Although it's about following the ship, it's very good-looking. The only drawback is that the male protagonist's reason for firmly choosing to follow the ship when he only knows Luffy as the protagonist is a bit weak [star], but the coherent plot and good writing make up for this [hold]. I wish the author success in his studies and a new chapter soon [sneaky laugh]
This book is very different from Tomato's pirate novels of the same type. The whole book is a top choice in terms of writing style and setting. The whole book is biased towards the original plot. It may be a little green and rough for the plot, but overall it fits the fan plot in my mind. After all, Who would refuse Akainu's son to come on board? Trying not to change the ending of the original work and adding original characters is actually quite a challenge. However, there is one obvious shortcoming, that is, it is too short. I hope the author will read my comments and make hundreds of updates a day [laughing and crying] [laughing and crying]
I have read so many fan fictions, and this one is one of the few that can give me the feeling of watching the original One Piece when I was a kid. The strength of the protagonist is also well controlled. The most important thing is that there is no system. Although there may be some bloodline theory, the protagonist's strength is all cultivated by himself.
Is the exploding fruit similar to mr.5? [What] When I saw Cornis, the sudden addition of a crew member without combat capabilities felt a bit abrupt. In addition, including Brooke and Jinbe, the total number was 11, which was one more than the ten crew members Luffy originally wanted. [Rolls eyes] [Rolls eyes]
Will the protagonist confront Akainu with swords?
Please give me a heroine😌I feel like if I have a heroine, it will turn into a stallion novel, and then it will become a harem novel here. I can't imagine having a harem on Luffy's ship. I like Xiao Wang very much, and of course I also like the protagonist created by the author now. It feels like a passionate drama. I feel that I and Robin-chan are more suitable as partners in revolutionary struggle. I beg the protagonist and the people around the protagonist not to fall in love. Brain tutorial 🙏
Is there a female protagonist? I hope it will be a single heroine Robin [smile]
I love reading it. Other authors say that they are great at writing books and update quickly. In fact, they are all in vain. Click on the author's homepage to teach you how to recognize yourself.
It feels ok, so far it seems ok. I read the popular book reviews and then read the novel. They all said that your one has a blocking point, so I went to read it and found it a bit strange. I gritted my teeth and said I must give it to that one. After Nami's adoptive mother's revenge, Luffy said a few words and then sat down. In the comment section of the book I read, you said that you were thinking about whether Nami was worth joining the Straw Hats. At this point, I felt very strange. Why would the Navy think about the daughter of his best friend joining the Pirates? And judging from the character of the protagonist, you probably wouldn't have such an idea. Anyway, I'll take another look. If it's good, I'll add that star [face covering]
It looked pretty good at first [laughs], but I have a question about whether the protagonist is proficient in the Six Styles, and his explosive fruit should be able to explode the air under his feet to achieve the conditions for flight [Thinking]
This is a rare good grass. Please leave a review. Don't let it die young.
Really good, not the kind that becomes invincible in the first few chapters
I really like this type of protagonist
Overall it seems okay
It's quite interesting to write, all that's left is to grasp the rhythm. Talking about justice in the world of pirates is nonsense. It is like the rebels in troubled times. They will also commit crimes. What can be done? Kill them all? Ace can die, but the location and reasons remain the same, and it is almost a replica of the original version. As the protagonist of an important event, his experience remains unchanged.
Follow quickly, follow quickly, it's not enough. If you want to read the fanfic One Piece with brains, look for this novel. If you don't have brains and enjoy it, just take a detour.
I have a good outlook on life, I like it
A very good book
Why is the score so low? ? ? Isn't it pretty? [Cool]
It's okay, come on, Oli will give you [eat melon]
It's a good-looking bag, use my coke's personality to vouch for it