Female-Dominant World + Multiple Heroines + Yandere + No System + Love Rival Showdowns + The Men Chase Their Wives to Win Them Back
A slow-burn yandere story. They’ll all gradually turn into yanderes, so rest assured, fathers!
(I know why you’re here.)
Luo Yuwei, who secretly hides her junior brother’s intimate clothing.
Ye Ningshuang, who uses the Peering Immortal Mirror to spy on her disciple all day long.
Xie Linger, who seems gentle but secretly raises snake gu, all so she can use it on Lin Mo and make him fall hopelessly in love with her.
Ye Ningshuang: “Enough, Mo’er. Your master can’t hold back any longer.”
Luo Yuwei: “You’re being naughty, Junior Brother. I’ll just break your legs.”
Xie Linger: “Don’t be afraid, Senior Brother Lin. Let this little snake bite you, and you’ll fall in love with me…”
Now that I have read the latest chapter, I can only describe it as okay. However, this is my first time writing a book and it still deserves encouragement. It's okay. There are many female protagonists, so you have to eat it. There are no details. You can describe it a little bit, otherwise it will be too dry. The bad thing is that chaos is chaos in every sense of the word. It does look uncomfortable at the front, but it gets better at the back. But the character creation is not good, the description is too deliberate. The heroine who has appeared so far has no "wisdom" and cannot think with her brain, and the character is very dull. There are also some scenes that are not well described. Strong people can be offended by individuals. Please pay more attention to it. The description of strength is difficult to describe in one sentence. You can't tell the difference. Maybe it focuses on emotions, so I didn't write this aspect well. Also, even if it is a female-dominated world, if the heroine is confirmed, the heroine's single-mindedness must be highlighted, that is, she will only like the male protagonist and no one else (I don't know what everyone thinks of this, I just suggest it). The shaping of the male protagonist, hey, I didn't see anything about it. Apart from being handsome, there is no reflection. Moreover, there is no description of how handsome he is. It is impossible for the female protagonist to fall in love just because he is handsome. Although the development of feelings between the previous female protagonists and the male protagonist is described, it is too ordinary. , There are no highlights. I hope that the female protagonist in the back can be different and can shape the personality of the male protagonist. This will look better. Of course, I hope that I can use my brain for the male protagonist. At present, I feel that when something happens, the male protagonist will only ask, panic, and not think. 🤔 In general, there are indeed many problems, and there are still many areas that can be improved. Some areas can be seen as improved, but some are still very poor. More efforts should be made in character creation to reflect the charm and characteristics of different characters. I hope it will be better in the future, come on!
The hero should not become stronger. It's fine to just be played like this. I want to see the wife of the leader of the Snake Sect being raped, and the male protagonist has to be played in order to save his master. Drive more discreetly. I'm afraid you will be banned.
Good love means good-looking, then the male protagonist accepts them all @
It's pretty cool, come on. 😏😏
Finally a good book
I'm such a soybean, what I wrote is so shameless, but it's a pity that I was locked up 😢😢😢
Very well written and beautiful
Well written, I give you a big thumbs up