Traveled through time and became Nase Tabin? And such good things? What time is it now? What! Nase is going offline! What should I do with my Family? What about the golden finger that travels through the basics? What should I do? Wait online. Urgent!
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It's well written, but it's better to divide it into more paragraphs. The text shouldn't be too dense. At the same time, the plot is too tight. Slow down and don't be too hasty, otherwise you won't be able to write for long.
It's well written, but it's better to divide it into more paragraphs. The text shouldn't be too dense. At the same time, the plot is too tight. Slow down and don't be too hasty, otherwise you won't be able to write for long.