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It can be seen that the description of the relationship between the two male protagonists is slightly deliberate, resulting in the individual characters not being very prominent. 1. Bai Nuo's character traits are not very convincing. Most of them rely on the words of other players to express them side by side. However, I have not seen any obvious examples. Readers should be able to feel it through more things. If it were me, I might write that Bai Nuo cut off his arm in the face of danger to show his decisiveness. Write about Bai Nuo cheating other players in the game copy to show his ruthlessness. At the same time, it is not a good thing to be too afraid of Bai Nuo from the words of other players. It will easily cause visual fatigue and some disbelief. I would replace it with someone who is dissatisfied and build a team to specifically snipe and kill Bai Nuo, making these supporting characters brave and resourceful. In the end, Bai Nuo went one better and pretended to kill everyone, which could better establish Bai Nuo's image. If Bai Nuo was a cold and ruthless person, I would also express it by saying that he seldom spoke, had a cold look in his eyes, sneered, and was elusive and uncertain. 2 If the author wants to write about two protagonists, then the emotions between the protagonists must be described in detail. It is easy to see that the author's description is a bit awkward, and the atmosphere between the two is somewhat inexplicable. First of all, since Bai Nuo wants to take advantage of the protagonist, why does he have to rescue the protagonist many times? If you want to say that he has an agenda, the scene described is too misleading to the audience. As the saying goes, "yin and yang separate at dusk." Don't make the boundary line blurry. You should make the character's personality more distinct and prominent! Some plots should be discarded appropriately. If it were me, I would write a Bai Nuo with a worse character. When the protagonist is in trouble, he would look on and add the emoticon "sneer". At this time, the protagonist can unite various forces and solve the problem on his own, such as the above-mentioned group of people who want to build a team to kill Bai Nuo. There is also the fact that Bai Nuo has a plot against the protagonist, which is very childish. In my opinion, there is really nothing to plot against the protagonist. He has neither a strong physique nor tenacious perseverance and will, and his intelligence is average. Since you want to write a good relationship between the two protagonists, there must be a turning point. As the saying goes, hateful people must be pitiful. If I described a vicious Bai Nuo above, it should be able to better reflect his inner pain and sadness. Slowly revealing his cold character, underneath is a painful heart. And I arranged a special scene to temporarily suppress his strength and let him be caused by the crisis. As Wan Fu pointed out, he once faced the absolute danger of death. At this time, the opportunity to decide Bai Nuo's life and death was given to the protagonist. When writing the protagonist, I couldn't help but feel weak. My heart was extremely complicated. I understood Bai Nuo's pain and left Bai Nuo with a way to survive. Doesn't this describe the turning point of their emotions? 3 About the identity of the child I hope that the child identity can be removed as soon as possible and become an adult body, otherwise it will not be conducive to the expression of emotions. And I personally don't like children very much. 4 The author can separate the two protagonists. Sometimes distance creates beauty. After the two have a certain amount of experience and then form a lone wolf partner, the effect of emotional progress will be better. At the same time, when the protagonist is alone, his character and wisdom can be better reflected, and it also prevents readers from visual fatigue.

Love watching, more to come Having said that, Ji Yan really didn't have anything to do with the child, right? Bai Nuo should have known about it? Is the white-haired man who killed Ji Yan at the beginning related to Bai Nuo? I quite like this one, it feels different from the previous one Wait, shit, I came in without even reading the introduction carefully. Is this a double male protagonist? Ah? Combined with the protagonist's name, have the left and right characters been decided for us? [Exploration]

You have the ability to open a new book, and you have the ability to update it. Since Xiao Nuozi's book, I have liked every book written by Yu. However, since Xiao Nuozi's book, every time after the first ten chapters, it was dropped!

No, this article is my favorite article since I was raised. . [Almost crying] It really smells really good, it really smells really good, it really smells really good.... [I'm almost crying] [I'm almost crying] I beg you. . . Don't give up, don't give up, don't give up. . . [Crying][Crying][Crying] It doesn't matter if you go slower or anything. . . . I can accept your weekly updates and monthly updates. . . ! ! ! [Sending Hearts][Sending Hearts]Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I beg you. This one is really good. . . I beg you not to give up. . I really can't read novels written by others! . . If the abandoned article is reopened, I will cultivate it for the 17th time [face covering] [OK] (let's take it slow and don't give up [send heart]

Yu Zuo's books are still as enjoyable as before.

End! At! It's an official match! ! ! Brother Nuo Zixue, I'm going to brush up and I'll be back in a while. Maybe I miss them too much. Watching Bai Nuo and Yan'er now feels like watching Brother Xue and Xiao Nuozi. Their personalities are obviously different, but they are bound to be partners in inevitable accidents in thriller games, and their personalities are also mean. The characters of Ji and Qin Nuo are gradually getting closer. They have a moral bottom line but there is not much left. Bai Nuo's happy person's back is destined to be a big accident. Why would Bai Nuo take in a child? Why did Ji Yan enter the game as a child? Stay tuned! ! Please update me! ! ! Really love your book!

Please don't stop updating. You are consuming your fans like this. I can't live without you. I really like your writing, plot, and characters. Please [cry][cry][cry]

It's very interesting. I like the interaction between the two protagonists very much. The image of the ghost is also very complete. It's beautiful. I like it. I hope Yusaku will not put it away anymore! ! ! And when will Ji Yan become an adult again! ! !

No brainer 5 stars, worth it

Yu Zuo finally changed his mind and started writing serious novels

Come on Yu Zuo! You write one and I read oneＯ(≧▽≦)Ｏ

@ It's been thirteen days, I come here to take a look every day, for fear that I haven't seen the update. Do you know how I spent these thirteen days? ? ! Please update soon. I really like this book. Don't give up. [Cry][Cry]

The quality is as high as ever. I really like this book. The writing is more mature than the previous ones. Please don't stop updating. I beg you on my knees. It's really beautiful and I really like it. Your book is the only one that appeals to me. Author, don't stop updating [crying][crying][crying][crying][crying][crying]

It's great. I started reading it when the author wrote "Frightened Raising". Now this book's IQ details and character creation are still online🌹

Please give me some strength and keep updating. Please, don't be the same as the previous books. I came from Xuenuo [crying] [crying] [crying]

Don't break, don't break, don't break, I beg you, author, I finally found such a good book, don't break, please, please [cry][cry][cry] Lao Nuo next door has already realized his mistake and corrected it. I will see when you change it. I will always watch you, always watch you [smile][smile][smile]

Very very beautiful! I hope this time I can finish it seriously! Bai Nuo always likes to act violently, and he knows what will happen but deliberately doesn't say anything, but Ji Yan can always sneak in some details and guess it. He has a super brain (?) In short, Ji Yan's baby is awesome! I'm really looking forward to the next plot!

It's very well written. Come on, author, don't run away [Thoughts]

Ooooooooooooooooooooooo why did you break it? . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . [Cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry]

Why does such a beautiful book have such a low rating? It's really scary to read it at night. It's really beautiful. It's rare to see such an attractive character. It's just that the author updates it too slowly. I hope the author updates it faster? Really beautiful😁

It's really beautiful, and the setting is also very novel. I hope you won't abandon the article like before.

Good-looking, love to watch, watch more Please Yu Zuo, please don't stop updating ah ah ah ah ah ah, I really like this book [smile][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry][cry]

The rose has gone and a hundred flowers have bloomed. Please update, Yuzuo, my life will be over without your book, please update quickly! ! ! @ Yuzuo @yuzuo @yuzuo

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, please say goodbye to me eunuch! Please!

The author will update soon. 😭 Yanzi Yanzi, how can I live without you?

Good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking

Every book by Yu Zuoda pokes me, please don't stop updating [I'm about to cry]

It's good-looking, but not many people see it.

Good/! ! ! I'm so scared [sending my heart] [sending my heart] Woo hoo hoo, hurry up and update! ! Ahhhhh already! There has been no update for almost 10 days [crying][crying]

Super exciting and beautiful. I like this kind of little crazy guy the best. I love Xiaobai so much. Xiaobai is so aloof and arrogant. I like it so much.