[If you don't meet the Star God in the early stage, you will be almost invincible, and you will gradually become stronger in the later stage]
Silver Wolf: What an unpredictable guy. We are both star core hunters, but we have a more mysterious past and unfathomable strength than I imagined. When fighting side by side with him, you can clearly feel his powerful aura, and every move he makes seems to contain profound meaning. He is like a mystery in this endless universe. I am very curious about what kind of power and story is hidden behind that mysterious identity. And you will undoubtedly be the most powerful partner of our star core hunters and the most unpredictable existence.
Kafka: He was truly a unique being. He is so gentle to everyone on weekdays, as if he can melt all the ice, but once the safety of his companions is involved, he will instantly turn into the most fierce guardian. His determination to kill the threat is both amazing and reassuring. His strength is obvious to all, which gives him enough capital to protect us. He is like a strong fortress, gentleness and strength are wonderfully blended in you. With him around, our actions seem to have more confidence and security.
Sam: "He is so powerful that it makes people feel at ease. His unfathomable strength seems to be able to solve all problems. And he is so versatile and even good at cooking. It is really fascinating. He once saved my life. From that moment on, he is a unique existence in my heart. I like him, not only because of these, but also because he is who he is, that is extremely special.
Reader comments
This article... I don't say it out of conscience. I have only read Chapter 14, but I can already make some suggestions for this article.
First, it is too redundant and does not differentiate between priorities: there is no need to spend so many words and so much pen and ink describing a meaningless thing. It will not contribute to the main plot. There is no need to forcefully add that paragraph, such as the paragraph where you wash the dishes. , You just need to write about how to wash the bowl. You don't need to describe in detail how to wash the bowl, and the part about making a violin for Kafka. Just tell me that you made this violin. I don't make a violin, so why do you tell me how to make a violin? There is also a picture where you want to choose a gift for Kafka, and then you read out a whole recipe [sweat] or maybe you have too much repetitive language. For example, the pictures where Kafka just came, I will tell you about love and care, ideals and beliefs, just these few I have listened to the words no less than 10 times. Also, your main line is not strong. It is either the main line of the railway or a line of your own story. The whole story you wrote is very scattered. There is no clear line [smile], which makes people feel very, very boring.
Second, the language is too rigid: Although your main line is not strong, at a glance, do you think the writing is not bad? If you look closely, there are big problems. For example, the language mentioned above is too repetitive. When I was listening to the book, I even thought that I accidentally rewind the time for him. The meaning is exactly the same. You just changed the time, changed the personal name, or changed a few words. , It's even said by the same person, you can say this sentence back and forth several times [pinch] Also, the character's language is very stiff, giving people a sense of déjà vu generated by AI [sweat] It's just too stereotyped, the words he uses in dialogue are almost indistinguishable from AI
At present, I have read Chapter 14 and haven't read the rest. These are some suggestions I made in the first 14 chapters. I hope the author can change them.
Give yourself a five-star review [laughing evilly]
Well, I sew everything [laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly]
This article... I don't say it out of conscience. I have only read Chapter 14, but I can already make some suggestions for this article. First, it is too redundant and does not differentiate between priorities: there is no need to spend so many words and so much pen and ink describing a meaningless thing. It will not contribute to the main plot. There is no need to forcefully add that paragraph, such as the paragraph where you wash the dishes. , You just need to write about how to wash the bowl. You don't need to describe in detail how to wash the bowl, and the part about making a violin for Kafka. Just tell me that you made this violin. I don't make a violin, so why do you tell me how to make a violin? There is also a picture where you want to choose a gift for Kafka, and then you read out a whole recipe [sweat] or maybe you have too much repetitive language. For example, the pictures where Kafka just came, I will tell you about love and care, ideals and beliefs, just these few I have listened to the words no less than 10 times. Also, your main line is not strong. It is either the main line of the railway or a line of your own story. The whole story you wrote is very scattered. There is no clear line [smile], which makes people feel very, very boring. Second, the language is too rigid: Although your main line is not strong, at a glance, do you think the writing is not bad? If you look closely, there are big problems. For example, the language mentioned above is too repetitive. When I was listening to the book, I even thought that I accidentally rewind the time for him. The meaning is exactly the same. You just changed the time, changed the personal name, or changed a few words. , It's even said by the same person, you can say this sentence back and forth several times [pinch] Also, the character's language is very stiff, giving people a sense of déjà vu generated by AI [sweat] It's just too stereotyped, the words he uses in dialogue are almost indistinguishable from AI At present, I have read Chapter 14 and haven't read the rest. These are some suggestions I made in the first 14 chapters. I hope the author can change them.
Give yourself a five-star review [laughing evilly]
Well, I sew everything [laughing evilly][laughing evilly][laughing evilly]
Come on, author.