[He's practically invincible if he doesn't encounter a Star God early on. He gradually gets stronger later.]
Silver Wolf: What a hard-to-read guy. We're both Stellaron Hunters, yet his past is more mysterious than I imagined, and his strength is unfathomable. Fighting alongside him, you can clearly feel his powerful presence. Every move he makes seems to carry a deeper meaning. He's like a mystery in this endless universe. I'm curious what kind of power and story lie behind that mysterious identity. Someone like you would undoubtedly be the strongest ally among the Stellaron Hunters, and the most inscrutable of us all.
Kafka: He's truly one of a kind. He's so gentle with everyone in everyday life, as if he could melt any ice, but the moment a companion's safety is at stake, he becomes the fiercest of protectors. His determination to kill anyone who threatens us is both astonishing and reassuring. His strength is there for all to see, giving him every reason to protect us. He's like an impregnable fortress, with gentleness and toughness wonderfully united in him. With him around, we feel much more confident and secure in our missions.
Sam: “He's so strong that it's reassuring. His unfathomable strength seems capable of solving any problem. And he's so capable at everything, even cooking. He's simply captivating. He once saved my life, and from that moment on, he became someone utterly unique in my heart. I like him not only for those things, but because he's simply himself, someone truly special
This article... I don't say it out of conscience. I have only read Chapter 14, but I can already make some suggestions for this article. First, it is too redundant and does not distinguish between priorities: you don't need to spend so many words and so much pen and ink to describe a meaningless thing. It will not contribute to the main plot. There is no need to forcefully add that paragraph, such as the paragraph where you wash the dishes. , You just need to write about how to wash the bowl. You don't need to describe in detail how to wash the bowl, and the part about making a violin for Kafka. Just tell me that you made this violin. I don't make a violin, so why do you tell me how to make a violin? There is another one where you want to choose a gift for Kafka, and then you read out a whole recipe [sweat] or maybe you have too much repetitive language. For example, in the few pictures where Kafka just came, I will tell you about love and care, ideals and beliefs, that's it. I have listened to a few words no less than 10 times, and your main line is not strong. It is either the main line of the railway or a line of your own story. The whole story you wrote is very scattered, without a clear line 🙂 It makes people feel very, very boring. Second, the language is too rigid: Although your main line is not strong, at a glance, do you think the writing is not bad? If you look closely, there are big problems. For example, the language mentioned above is too repetitive. When I was listening to the book, I even thought that I accidentally passed the time back to him. The meaning is exactly the same. You just changed the time, changed the personal name, or changed a few words. , It's even said by the same person, you can say this sentence back and forth several times [pinch] Also, the character's language is very stiff, giving people a sense of déjà vu generated by AI [sweat] It's just too stereotyped, the words he uses in dialogue are almost indistinguishable from AI At present, I have read Chapter 14 and haven't read the rest. These are some suggestions I made in the first 14 chapters. I hope the author can change them.
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