The Dragon Girl of Young Songs

My suggestion: Don't repeat, write redundantly, XXX said: "...", This mode is outdated, and it is really not recommended to write like this. Use more modifiers of appearance, demeanor, and tone to embellish the characters, and try not to pile up names with redundant repetitions (that is, don't say a very short sentence about XXX, and then say "XXX" below). It is best to use the technique of starting from the bottom to write the dialogue pattern. (For example: beginning: "...", Beginning of the next line: XXX+modifier+(person)) (Very easy to change, workload...) My feeling after reading it now: It gives people the feeling that this is a novice author, but after reading a few chapters later, you will find that the author is still of a certain level. (My first reaction was that AL ghostwrote it, and then copied it without thinking). If this model is not changed, it will be difficult to retain readers. It will give people the feeling that they read it in one second and read it out in the next second. There is no sense of involvement and the feeling of reading is very shallow. For a bookworm like me, it is no different from being fed poison. (I tried listening to books, and I can only say that the listening party next door has exploded) My rating: The book has great potential. (Fun fact: For bookworms, this is a death sentence.) Gossip: I was originally going to post a paragraph review, but as a result... (My hand slipped, and I wrote a bunch of words, all in white, and my mentality almost exploded. (So, the tone and everything else changed)) Five stars for encouragement. [Cover face]