As technology becomes more and more developed, people rely on the convenience brought by technology, but ignore physical exercise. A game that allows you to exercise by playing the game contains various martial arts. What is unexpected is that Cheng Yang's martial arts can bring the game to reality.
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It's obvious that you are a novice author. It's not easy for a newbie. I'll give you a five-star review!
After reading a few pictures, I would like to share my thoughts. I hope it will be helpful to you.
What is certain about this book is that if you pounce, there will be no chance.
Of course, I haven't written a book, I've just read a lot, and what I say may not be correct.
Tell me why:
①Person brings confusion, and it is the first person.
②As a refreshing article, there are no refreshing points in the front, and the hooks are not obvious enough, so it is difficult to retain people.
③Problems in writing, the simplistic parts are too simplistic
For example: Aunt Xie asked me to find a dog, but the task process was skipped directly.
You can write:
Cheng Yang regretted it after receiving the mission. What kind of useless mission was this? Not only is there no prompt, there is no direction guide, where can I find it?
Cheng Yang pondered for a long time, but had no good idea, so he had no choice but to ask around one by one.
Grandpa, village chief, have you ever seen Aunt Xie's son?
The village chief shook his head and said, Aunt Xie asked you to come, right?
Well! This is also a poor woman. Her husband is gone without telling her (a foreshadowing), and her son is also lost. Since the son was lost, her mental state has become more and more abnormal. Now she has reached the bottom of her madness. She asks everyone she meets if she has seen her son, and begs others to help her find him.
Cheng Yang:......
The NPCs who posted the quest have gone crazy. Do you still want to do this quest?
Others have leveled up quickly, but he is still wandering around the novice village. If someone else completes this first, he will lose his wife and lose his troops.
But looking at the only one behind the mission, Cheng Yang really couldn't bear to give up...
Then the task is completed based on reasoning/chance, and other player tasks show that the task has been completed.
Other players responded by making up their own.
The protagonist obtains half of the Nine Yang Divine Art, the Nine Yin Manual, and the Yi Jin Jing, all of which are top martial arts.
Aunt Zhang went crazy and gave away her husband's belongings, and then took the foreshadowing of her dead husband.
For example: Her husband got a skill by chance, and then was targeted by others. They fought all the way. In the end, half of the skill was lost, and he was seriously injured and dying. He went to live in seclusion in Novice Village to avoid the enemy. However, after the enemy got the other half of the skill, his skill greatly increased and his influence became larger. It was not safe here.
Trigger the next stage of the mission, revenge, which leads to the other half of martial arts.
Settings are possible, but I suggest you read your novel from the beginning instead of just writing it all the time.
It's obvious that you are a novice author. It's not easy for a newbie. I'll give you a five-star review! After reading a few pictures, I would like to share my thoughts. I hope it will be helpful to you. What is certain about this book is that if you pounce, there will be no chance. Of course, I haven't written a book, I've just read a lot, and what I say may not be correct. Tell me why: ①Person brings confusion, and it is the first person. ②As a refreshing article, there are no refreshing points in the front, and the hooks are not obvious enough, so it is difficult to retain people. ③Problems in writing, the simplistic parts are too simplistic For example: Aunt Xie asked me to find a dog, but the task process was skipped directly. You can write: Cheng Yang regretted it after receiving the mission. What kind of useless mission was this? Not only is there no prompt, there is no direction guide, where can I find it? Cheng Yang pondered for a long time, but had no good idea, so he had no choice but to ask around one by one. Grandpa, village chief, have you ever seen Aunt Xie's son? The village chief shook his head and said, Aunt Xie asked you to come, right? Well! This is also a poor woman. Her husband is gone without telling her (a foreshadowing), and her son is also lost. Since the son was lost, her mental state has become more and more abnormal. Now she has reached the bottom of her madness. She asks everyone she meets if she has seen her son, and begs others to help her find him. Cheng Yang:...... The NPCs who posted the quest have gone crazy. Do you still want to do this quest? Others have leveled up quickly, but he is still wandering around the novice village. If someone else completes this first, he will lose his wife and lose his troops. But looking at the only one behind the mission, Cheng Yang really couldn't bear to give up... Then the task is completed based on reasoning/chance, and other player tasks show that the task has been completed. Other players responded by making up their own. The protagonist obtains half of the Nine Yang Divine Art, the Nine Yin Manual, and the Yi Jin Jing, all of which are top martial arts. Aunt Zhang went crazy and gave away her husband's belongings, and then took the foreshadowing of her dead husband. For example: Her husband got a skill by chance, and then was targeted by others. They fought all the way. In the end, half of the skill was lost, and he was seriously injured and dying. He went to live in seclusion in Novice Village to avoid the enemy. However, after the enemy got the other half of the skill, his skill greatly increased and his influence became larger. It was not safe here. Trigger the next stage of the mission, revenge, which leads to the other half of martial arts. Settings are possible, but I suggest you read your novel from the beginning instead of just writing it all the time.