Pupil

At present, the data is very clear. In the introduction, you may need to change it. I thought it was progressive at first, but after looking at it, the left and right eyes evolved into the last two, and the one in the false orifice. I also thought it was incremental, not choosing one. I hope it can be maintained in the future. Come on, come on!

It's very interesting. The writing style is a bit immature, but that doesn't stop it from being novel and meaningful. The author can try to adjust the order of the paragraphs and delete some fragments appropriately to see if the data will look better.

Overall, it is a book worth reading. The setting is novel, I haven't seen any exaggerated combat power so far, and the character creation is okay, but occasionally the image of the male protagonist will be a little fragmented. There are some minor flaws in the details and writing, but they are within the acceptable range. I haven't seen any special highlights so far, and there are a lot of things about the world that haven't been revealed yet. Let's give the author a five-star encouragement. (PS: Sometimes the foreshadowing is too blunt. In some places, it is better to gently walk through it than to give readers a God's perspective)

From what I can tell, this is probably the author's first novel. It's not bad. Just a brief encouragement. Although I haven't read too much yet, let me say it first. Looking at some of the problems I feel so far, it is probably that the age is indeed relatively young. The author may think that 18 is a bit late. I personally think that 15 or 16 will be better. 12 Is indeed a bit young. Secondly, it can be seen that the author wants to describe the text like an anime or a movie, from transitions to sentence breaks or scene descriptions. It's possible, and I also want to give readers a better experience. Then, when the protagonist is talking and thinking, it will be a little too long. Having these "battles" in language is actually good and will give the reader more feeling, but if it is too long, it will be boring, and readers are definitely not going to read word by word all the time. There will be times when they read quickly, so it feels like it should not be too long and can be reduced a little. The setting is pretty good and there are still a lot of pitfalls that I'll probably write about later, but there are some pitfalls or settings that haven't been filled in yet, such as the part where the training camp was attacked by heretics. I can actually understand what's going on, but I think it's okay to talk about it. All in all, I personally think it's pretty good. I hope the author will continue to work hard and continue writing. I still don't want this book to be interrupted or finished hastily.

I think it's well written. Please rate it and let the author know that he is no longer a stand-alone player.

The background setting is quite good, but the character of the protagonist is a bit self-contradictory. Sometimes the words are lost in mid-sentence, and the location changes are not coherent enough. The next chapter always suddenly cuts to someone else's perspective, and I look forward to perfection.

The book is very good, but I don't understand why the rating is so low. If I have to mention the shortcomings, it is not finished yet. It would definitely be a pleasure to read it in one go. There is also the episode about the assassination of the governor. Although the final result is okay, the process is very strange and motionless. Well, the older generation must be calm. It's finished. There's a lot more to come that I haven't written yet. I'm still looking forward to it. But after reading the summary, Xu Yuan is the only one left in the end (what a waste). It's so painful. Maybe everyone doesn't like this. Come on, author😭 If you can, make up for the remaining two volumes. I won't keep books anymore.

It's comfortable and comfortable. I don't know if it can be completed smoothly. It feels similar to Zhanshen, but different. It is deeper than Zhanshen. The previous story line is similar. If it can be unfolded smoothly, it will be better than most nine-point "good books" with less than 300 chapters. The current novel writing environment is too bad, so don't die suddenly.

This is the first time I take the initiative to comment on a book, and I also looked for the review entrance. I feel that it is quite good so far. I feel that I am grasping some parts, which makes me want to continue reading [Blow kiss]

Average, but with a rating of 6 points, the author can write more than 1 million words. The author is purely generating electricity.