Extending the Life of the First Emperor by Thirty Years Is None of Your Business, Yi Xiaochuan.

Author, author, how can you be so short? [Laughing evilly] Lu Su is gone, so am I. Goodbye

I like this book very much. It made me understand a lot of things. Great support for the author!

Personally, I think the writing is pretty good, and the author himself seems to be a very thoughtful person [Like] [Like] It was too outrageous later on. I thought it was okay in the early stage, but it collapsed?

How to say it? After reading a few chapters, I feel it's a bit watery, but the writing is still very good. There is also a time-travel story about cultivating immortals. It's convenient for the heroine. You can have a harem of 2 to 3 people. Anyway, within five people is best. In addition, you can simplify some things. Don't be so watery later on. The system can also be more powerful. After all, you are already a system writer. Some things in your outline are a bit wordy, or you can write a little extra to talk about this with readers in the extra. Some of the sentences are not fluent. I don't know if you are a novice or a veteran. This is a problem. Some parts are not very smooth to read, and when encountering things, sometimes you have to be a little cruel. You can be good, but not too bad, and not too much. After all, the characters have to live by themselves. I hope I hope to write better and better in the future. I seldom write this kind of thing. The main reason is that I read it very well, but some sentences don't make sense, or they are too wordy. I can be more concise in terms of etiquette, or write it correctly. I hope the author can read it, because this is what we book friends want. If you have suggestions, we will give you feedback. I hope the author can also listen to the suggestions and create a good book to read [laughing] [laughing] [laughing]

I don't know how to evaluate it, but those who are short on books can take a look. I hope they can cut out 60% of the inner drama of the protagonist. I feel that the plot is a bit slow and there are too many inner dramas, but it is still interesting.

Brother, wow, brother, wow, my sister is now number one on the monthly list, and she is also number one on the overall list. Brother, brother, please pay attention to me😭 Happy sister, brother~ If the brother doesn't want to care about his sister, just say so. Why should he treat his sister like this? It seems that the sister is being sentimental. That's right. The brother is weak and needs more rest. The sister is so clinging to the brother. It's the sister's fault. It hurts the brother's body. The sister is also very distressed. But no matter how much the sister's heart hurts, the brother must also take care of the sister. Do you think that's right? Brother ~ @219

They are all very good, and the writing is very smooth and normal. Come on, the author just has an emotional problem with Lu Shu and the protagonist. I hope it is just a friendship and not in-depth communication. I hope the protagonist can become an immortal and achieve enlightenment. Or later ascend to the throne and conquer all realms. Anyway, just don't have anything to do with Lu Su.

Yes, it has some truths about life. Generally speaking, so does the protagonist. The writing is very good. I feel that everyone lives for it. It can make you feel some of the truths of the book and understand some of life. So come on, please continue to work hard, and please don't care about my evaluation. Please be yourself.

Yi Xiaochuan's shame as a time traveler, neither the people who loved him nor his lover could be saved

Thanks to the author, listening to your words is better than reading ten years of books. You have a very profound view on life, and it is particularly reasonable. There are some profound influences that inspire me. No matter right or wrong, no matter how far-reaching it is, it is all human nature and it is the will of God.

It's five stars for the time being, and the mastermind behind it hasn't come out yet. I don't know if it will turn into Zhutianwen or Xiuxianwen in the future. And there are probably very few Gao Yao scenes. It is estimated that the early climax of the novel will be the death of Yi Xiaochuan, or the revelation of the mastermind behind the scenes. Considering the protagonist's golden finger and the incorporation of modern knowledge into the setting, there is a high probability that the game will enter the astronomical world in the mid-term, and the myth will become a copy and a rest stop. (After all, there is a damaged version of the Lingquan small space) The author welcomes corrections

The protagonist of this book has too many inner activities, which can easily make people upset, and many of them are imposed by the author on the protagonist, giving people a very stiff feeling. Everything else is okay, please give it a try, author.

The greatest pursuit that a philosophical ordinary person can embody. The concept of this book. But the only outstanding point is the protagonist's strength. But if there is no power. The problem cannot be changed. So you can't change the problem without power

It's really good. History is mixed with some truths, some life insights, and some wise sayings. The characterization is also very three-dimensional. The protagonist's interpersonal relationships are also handled very well. But I feel that there is a bit of a lack of main line and no climax? Although the main plot should be for the prosperity of Qin, it seems that there are no small goals in the short term, and they are not mentioned. How to fight? Mainly because I haven't watched this anime.

It is different from the novels I read before about traveling through the Qin Dynasty. The pace is slow and steady, a bit Buddhist, and there is a lot of commentary in it. The protagonist witnesses history and also tries to make up for some regrets. The narrative is mixed with a little touch. I can feel that the author has rich accumulation of words and it is very comfortable to read.

The road to immortality is closed, can you try to open up other cultivation systems? The human body is a great treasure, and you don't necessarily need spiritual energy to gain strength.

After beating Meng Tian, ​​Yi Xiaochuan came over, but he didn't beat Yi Xiaochuan to death. It felt so bad╯╰

The author is a thoughtful and connotative author, come on!

I would like to sincerely express my opinions and suggestions. The book is a good book and the ideas are great, but it contains too much of my own reflections. People's ideas are different. Please use less personal reflections so that the novel will not be cumbersome and lengthy. Also, since you have traveled through time, you can be more courageous. After all, everyone is very hardworking in the real world, so the novel should be more enjoyable.

This must be a malicious negative review. It's a very good book.

How to say it? Well, actually, the writing is okay, not bad, but I am a little timid in doing things. In fact, you can open up a path, called the way of literature,

If you have a correct outlook on things, it is okay to include private goods, and I agree with the author's point of view. But this is not other literature, this is novels that need to adapt to the market of Xiaobaiwen (I am a Xiaobaiwen reader)

The plot is not bad, but I feel that there are too many explanations interspersed, which affects the reading experience a bit. I hope to strengthen the plot advancement.

This is the first time I read a novel that I really like. I don't want other novels to either fly all the way or suppress first and then grow! In short, if you can read this book with a calm and calm mind, you will find it very exciting.

There are Qi Refiners, and it's scary if you have a group of them! The emperor is just an ant to them. Even if there is great cause and effect, the emperor will be killed!

I feel like my writing is pretty good. Why is my score so low? Could it be that there are trolls trying to lower the score?

Update quickly, update quickly, and then write a story about traveling across all realms. And the author, how old are you now?

Very good, not brainless, educated

Extending the life of the First Emperor by thirty years is none of your business, Yi Xiaochuan. Chapter 63 A stone of food is sometimes not food Finished reading, [Like][Like][Like]

The book does contain the author's concepts and thoughts, and his views are quite upright.