Comprehensive Comics*****

After reading it, the writing is pretty good. The plot is based on the template of having a girlfriend at home, so this is not a big problem. However, it is recommended that the author paint the characters, the environment and the character's demeanor in depth. The mistakes that TV series comics often make are that the plot is too fast, the characters are not fleshed out enough, and TV series intervene too much, resulting in the last batch of female protagonists being too bloated. TV series are actually not bad dramas. Love, after all, the main plot is open-book. What is missing is how to deeply portray the individual female protagonists in a certain favorite comic and even restore 120% of the emotions. This involves the environment, tone, demeanor, clothing, dialogue between the male and female protagonists, supporting roles and a specific plot. The climax and other in-depth characterizations, otherwise it is just a series of miscellaneous accounts and various bad female protagonists, without foreshadowing and in-depth characterization. In the end, 90% of the readers who read it felt that they were the women who became the male protagonists for no reason. Anyway, the feeling is as simple as drinking water. Be sure to post it Only by making in-depth depictions based on reality and revising some of the novels' ambiguities can we have a chance to attract people's attention. After all, no matter what series of novels, people read them because of their ambiguities. For example, this is a big reason why anime or live-action remakes of novels are so popular. The Tachibana sisters are actually very popular in the Japanese series, and the plot is also very complete. We can focus on writing about these two people. We really don't need too many female protagonists. After all, you are not a fairy, and if you can't handle so many women, it will become a waste of time. I hope the author will consider this comment sincerely. Others are very good. Perhaps what I mean by in-depth characterization can be given as an example: the adoption of the Orange sisters during the funeral in Chapter 5. The funeral should be sad and painful. In the setting, the two parents have just passed away. There is a younger sister in high school and an older sister who has just graduated from college. According to reality, they are actually children. , Facing a sudden blow, the mood and mind should be desperate, painful, empty-eyed, and even the feeling of being forced into desperation, but in the portrayal, it is just an understatement and excessive. As the older sister, Hina can still answer and deal with Ryu rationally. Sister Yi's question here is actually a bit unrealistic. Logically, this paragraph should reflect the sad and heavy atmosphere and environment, and then depict the perspective of the protagonist or the perspective of the Orange sisters to write down the inner world of activities, with relatives and friends around. After commenting and comforting friends and others, and finally writing down the protagonist's feelings during the scene, the scene will be very profound, and the heroine's character and characterization will also be revealed. In this way, the overall sense will be more vivid than understatement and an overly scrawled sentence.

Looking at the comments, many people are talking about what happened between the hero and Hanabi in the first few chapters. So I want to tell the readers who come to read in the future that if they can accept the first three chapters, then there will basically be no problems later [crying] Thank you everyone🙏 I've entered the dark room, and I've changed a lot of content. If there are new book friends who feel it's not smooth when reading it, please understand! [Cry][cry] Thank you everyone, I hope you can release it soon. [Almost crying]

Although, it's been 16 years since time traveled, and it feels like the protagonist's family is not very wealthy? At least there should be a certain route. A complete harem relationship is not impossible. At least there must be some financial foundation.

A very good novel, worth reading. The author is very good both in terms of writing and characters. I am reading it. The plot of the fan novel is okay, but the characters are not very good. But this book is really good. The author continues to work hard and update it.

This book is really beautiful. When I first wrote it, I wondered if the original author had gone to China to write it.

Very good. Worth a look

Good-looking, good-looking, the male protagonist's name is well received. Now the relationship with each female protagonist feels like a co-op unlocked relationship, but each total does not exceed 4 stars. When can we see the relationship between a certain female protagonist and the male protagonist reach nine stars. When else will there be a male protagonist named Ren Amamiya [laughing evilly]

Author, if the protagonist doesn't have a system, he might be beaten to death

The first few chapters aren't great, and the details don't stand up to scrutiny, but I quite like the emotional arc later on.

It's okay, but the male protagonist in the first few chapters is written not as if he has traveled through time, but as if he is a local. This book has been on the bookshelf for a few days. Why doesn't the author update it?

It's okay, but will there be too many female leads, appearing one after another [face covering]

The writing style is okay, it reminds me of how outrageous it was to watch the scumbag Ben Wan and his family have a girlfriend, I hope there will be a perfect ending [face covering]

Awesome 👍 Keep writing!

It's not enough, Kuyaxi

Sweeping graves, offering incense, and summoning spirits

Seedlings, results unknown, hope to keep blooming

It feels very interesting and the subject matter is novel. I haven't read a novel chapter by chapter like this for a long time.

Apart from being a little short, it's pretty good-looking. It depends on how the author writes it. Then, I hope the progress of drawing comics for the main character can be accelerated. I want to see a punch of fire [laughter]

A comprehensive comic with a relatively novel setting

It's so pretty. Why was it banned?

All I can say is that I want others to read this book

It feels like the protagonist might become a character like Brother Cheng

This is one of the few good comics books on Tomato. I haven't seen any typos yet. Maybe I didn't read carefully and skipped it. If you are interested, you can read it.

I never give five stars to good works. (I have watched the comments on Chapter 48 so far) I think the writing so far is still very good.

To win the Easter match

The article is very good. Come on, author, don't stop. [Like]

It's very, very beautiful. The smell is very strong and I like it. Please don't cut it in half.

It's very comfortable to read, and I'm very eager to read. I hope the author can read fifty chapters a day.

Why don't you create a group and put the original version in, otherwise the newcomers will be confused.

No, the update has been discontinued. Bai Kaixin found a good book. I beg you brothers to get some from the bottom of the box.