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You are a Huangquan player, and what you want to do is to patrol the battlefield of the National Games. After seeing various monsters, you only need to do it without hesitation, with overwhelming force, slash with three knives and a big slash with one knives, and finally breathe a sigh of relief, almost soiling your sleeves again!

Judging from the current content, this book is a book that can be collected. It is recommended that the author not change the background and character design of Huang Quan now, otherwise it will easily lose a large number of people who fell into the trap due to the early stage, and the gain outweighs the loss. Then, you must learn to write Kawen. Raising readers' expectations. Although lags are disgusting, for new articles with no traffic base, it is the easiest way to retain readers. After writing 100,000 words, it's almost time to get to the point. At this time, you can also increase traffic for your book. Because I am the kind of person who doesn't like gender change, I didn't dare to read the first chapter. I suggest the author not to mention his previous gender when writing later, but write with his current identity, otherwise it will be really easy to cause drama. I just discovered that you are also the author of the book "Reincarnation as Kafka". I would like to give you some advice based on that book. 1. If the setting of this book is still that the protagonist is himself, then it is not recommended to have a greater emotional connection with aborigines other than Fu Xuan. 2. The improvement of role-playing value should be reflected in some small actions, rather than deliberate performance, or inexplicable. Even if it is inexplicable, there should be some pre-performance, such as thinking of something, being affected by something, and the behavior begins to change. 3. If you want to connect the protagonist with other Bengtie characters, there should be some foreshadowing in the previous text, so that it will not appear obtrusive. For example, who wants to rescue her and chase her, posing a life threat to her, or the protagonist flashes some debts she owes in the memory. In short, there must be some connections, it can be not many, but it cannot be absent. 4. Then there are the habits of the protagonist in life. Just like in Chapter 16, she said she has to put on makeup. In such a situation, the following explanation can be written as she does it subconsciously. Don't deliberately emphasize that it is just to improve the role value. If it happens too many times, it will feel inconsistent with the character, and the whole article will almost start to collapse. (Note: All premise is that the identity of the protagonist is himself) The author's first country destiny novel, I think the reasons for its collapse are: 1. The contrast between before and after is huge, 2. The interest relationship does not fit the character, 3. The ending is inexplicable, and the identity changes This is only the most important thing. The secondary thing is that the writing style is ordinary, which is normal. After reading several books with very good endings, I felt that the ending of that book could be changed to an ending that leaves a lot of room for imagination. There is no need to hang myself on one ending. This is the most important suggestion that I have put together from two books. I will add more later.

Write so little? Who do you look down on? Write ten pages a day! [Cool][Cool][Cool]

Chapter 8, I can see the level of this book, it's pretty good

Nice. Why is the title so similar to the one next door?

I have a friend who was so angry that the author was too slow to update. He cried and fussed, so pitiful, so the author should update quickly!

Great support, author. As long as the quality is good, I don't care about the word count.

The character structure of Huangquan is a bit crumbling, and the middle chapters have no highlights. If there are too many character dialogues, it will be a bit ink. Please write more about the main story. Also, please update quickly

Very nice! ! I hope the author will continue to update! ! ! [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart]

Ahhhhh! Nice! Renew! ! ! ! Huang Quan's character is not OOC at all!

It's nice, but the author is too short.

Good-looking, love to watch, enjoy watching [Chigua]

Your sword is "nothing", and you drew the sword again in front of you. [What] [What] [What] I don't want to say more. [Cover face][cover face][cover face]

The author's writing is really great. I like reading it.

The exam composition is written in the same vein as your book [laughter] "Special Color" tells the story of Huang Quan who lost her memory after killing the god and ending the dungeon. She only had black, white, gray and red colors in her eyes, but in the end she found that she could see the colors of the person she trusted, Fu Xuan, and decided to follow Fu Xuan [smile] The teacher gave me points [laughing evilly]

Good health, good health, good health

It has a lot of potential, as long as it doesn't suck in the later stages.

This book has great potential. If I continue to write it, the lowest rating will be 8.5. 9.8 Is not a dream. It suits me very well. Unfortunately, not many people are reading it.

The description is awesome and beautiful. I would love to see the author continue to update!!!

Task completed, please review

Isn't Fu Xuan too tonic?

The author is great, I hope the ending of this book is the knife. After all, she will be alone in the end with nothingness.

How shameless! The writing is very good! Come on ୧⍢⃝୨

Good looking, good looking, good looking

Except the author is too lazy and some things are pretty good

So far, there are no poisonous points, which is very good.

Fast forward to the plot of Tie Tie. I don't have diabetes, but I like to eat sweets.

Fine. Compared with other books, it is good. Can be raised

The best national luck in Huangquan so far [Like]

Super nice. And the plot is also very enjoyable.