After Transforming, I Set Out to Become an Immortal

Give yourself a good review 😏 This is my first time writing about Xianxia, please forgive me 🤦

For a newcomer, the writing is okay, but the details are still insufficient. There are too few dialogues, emotions, and psychological descriptions of the characters. The novel is not a bookkeeping, nor is it a history book. I hope the author can enrich his ability to describe details. Keep working hard, and he will become a great writer soon.

How can there be such a good thing? If I want both immortality and a girlfriend, how can there be so many good things? After you hide, your girlfriend may not be able to hide. This is the problem, so don't engage in CP. What if you have a deep love for your girlfriend and then go crazy while practicing and destroy your path?

It's very nice to watch. There's nothing in it. It has a good understanding of the realm. I like to watch this kind of thing. It has a little understanding of the realm and its laws. It's not the same as the public.

It looks good. Is it a boy changing into a girl? I never noticed it 🤦

I finally found a more orthodox fairy tale novel. Heaven, earth, humans, gods and ghosts, the five immortals, Among them, the Celestial Immortal, the Golden Immortal, and the Daluo Golden Immortal are explained better and are in the same realm. Give me some encouragement, The writing on spiritual practice is not detailed enough. The female leader has been practicing for just one year, and there is no famous teacher and no system. Swordsmanship, talismans, thunder, Taoism, everything is mastered, isn't it a bit too fast? At least it will last ten years. . . Subduing demons and slaying demons is rather abrupt. After all, I am just starting out, and it seems that I suddenly have to sacrifice myself for others to complete the task of slaying demons? , At least describe the psychological construction in detail, determined to save the common people? Or when the road is rough, your conscience remains intact? There are also a lot of common sense mistakes. When giving a jade token, when someone gets the news of her father's death, the heroine has to discuss it with someone. Isn't she disrespectful? Inside the ruined temple, I just met someone and asked him the purpose of his trip? In ancient times, it was taboo to ask strangers about the purpose of the trip. Do you understand? Is there some problem in daily communication? The heroine is obviously very beautiful, but why doesn't she show it to the people she meets? It's like meeting a passerby. . . Also, is the heroine a cultivator or a Taoist? The force value is very confusing, right? Cultivation route, using magic weapons, flying swords, and fighting. It can be regarded as the inner alchemy sect, the fairy tale novel When building roads, we use talismans, five thunders to rectify the law, dog blood, donkey hoofs, and demons to subjugate and eliminate demons. This belongs to the talisman sect and is a Taoist text. The author didn't give a clear explanation at all, and it all came together very abruptly. Moreover, it seems that cultivating immortals is omnipotent. People have been practicing martial arts for decades, wandering around the world for decades, and have countless battles. The female protagonist has been cultivating immortals for a year, and she was defeated easily... This. , It can't be justified no matter what. The cultivator of immortality is very good, he can even kill people instantly with a flying sword and a spell,,,, but he has been practicing martial arts for decades, why should he still lose to the heroine in a martial arts competition?

The author writes with care, the writing style is delicate and has a fairy spirit. This level is rare in Tomato. If it can be maintained in the later period, it will be a masterpiece.

It's very well written, keep it up [Adore]👍👍

Can the author explain the world view? Isn't this the prehistoric era? Are there any more than Daluo Jinxian?

It's very beautiful, but it's a little lacking, not enough to look good.