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It feels okay, but the narrative is a bit straightforward and the description of some plots is too exaggerated. For example, when talking about the appearance of the heroine, where the heroine appears, the reaction of the people around her will be included, and the identity of the heroine will be told through their words. There were also several plots that helped several people. There was a paragraph at that time that said: What she didn't know was that her inadvertent actions would bring her in the future... I can't remember the specifics, but that's the general meaning. I feel like it's a bit cliche here. For me, there are no big surprises. There are very few novels in Tomato that have some flaws but not major problems, especially since I see that there are no plots that make people enlarge their breasts and make them extremely angry. It's mediocre, the writing is a bit rough, and there aren't many bad points, so you can just make do with it (it's really good in Tomato, and it doesn't add plot just for the sake of anger). Come on, the author will practice his writing again, travel, relax, and find some inspiration, and he will make great progress. This book can be used as a writing practice for novices, and the author's next book should be much better. This book is pretty good for novices [Love] There are also some places where the context is not coherent enough and smooth. The author is inexperienced and wants to add a little bit of good content description, but the article is not harmonious enough. The article is okay and it would be better if the author could change these small details. The author can also specially revise it after writing the draft plot, which should be much better. For other kids, it's better to read Chapter 5 first. Everyone's taste is different. Maybe it's a big deal for some people or it suits their interests and they think it's good? [Sending Hearts]

I was so happy to see it! [Laughs] This is a really cool article! [Anger] What a great heroine! But I have to save it for another look, it's really too little [crying]

Beautiful😊I like the heroine very much

The plot is okay, the heroine is very good, but the writing is a bit clumsy. It can be seen that the author wants to write words with ancient meanings. However, this kind of writing needs to be concise and clear. Some words are too cumbersome and it will appear cliched. In addition, many sentences are not fluent. Also, do not use commas randomly. Many whole sentences are cut into two paragraphs by commas, which makes the reading very incoherent. There are also some problems with the rhythm of the plot. The parts that should be described in detail are not detailed. The plot that can be mentioned in one stroke is described with cumbersome words and sentences. Come on, author, I hope your writing will improve (you can try to write more concisely and clearly in one sentence) and it will get better and better.

It's good-looking. The original male and female protagonists of this book did not win the competition like in the original book. It is more logical. In some books, the original male and female protagonists have a strong halo, so the opportunity must belong to the original male and female protagonists. It's beautiful and I love reading it. I hope to write more about Jun Shi's feelings when he realized his sword intention [Blow Kiss]

Currently, I see a female majoring in ruthless swordsmanship. She has no CP, is rational, calm and hard-working. Although the plot is a bit flat, it is progressing well. However, the writing style may need to be improved. Repeated words often appear repeatedly in the text, and the same meaning is mentioned repeatedly. There are obvious language problems in many places, and the connection in some places is unnatural. In addition, I feel that since the heroine's efforts are highlighted, there is no need to spend so much time on her appearance. The previous chapter has been describing how beautiful the heroine is (and less so later), but the focus of the whole text seems to be on the heroine's efforts, so too much description of appearance is a bit superfluous. But the above are all minor flaws, and the readability is still very strong. It is a normal effort to cultivate immortal writing!

Very beautiful [send my heart][send my heart][send my heart], the author gives you a lot of support

There is no plot where she is obviously a genius but has to pretend to be a pig to eat a tiger, or hide her cultivation, or she is so beautiful and recognizable that she has to disguise herself. The heroine has brains and strength, which made me feel happy. However, there are many typos in the book, and the fighting scenes do not feel that passion. ? However, the overall character of the heroine is still very good. The disciples inside and outside the sect are also different from other books. They have brains and judgment and will not switch sides just because of a word from White Lotus. I hope the author will make more updates! Pay more attention to typos and~

It's very interesting. I've read a lot of love literature and I feel that this kind of growth-type strong woman is very comfortable. The heroine is very sensible and strategic, and super sunny. This is my favorite type. I hope the author will write more, because I am interested in it for three minutes, and I may stop reading it after a long time.

Haha, I discovered a good book, so cheers! I suggest you have a good rest. 5 Updates a day is enough. Don't interrupt for no reason! Don't interrupt for no reason! Don't interrupt for no reason! Don't interrupt for no reason! I love you so much! ! Come on [air kiss] [air kiss] [air kiss] [air kiss]