After Time Travel, She Became the Ascetic Zhongli Bai Yueguang

My evaluation language may be more direct and sharp, and it is limited to expressing my personal opinions, so don't read it if you are a blind person. The book is really good-looking and not particularly novel, but it is indeed very imaginative and the plot is very good. However, the writing is not enough and it is lost in the crowd. Some of the characterizations are too blunt. Many emotional turning points feel like they passed in a flash, and the emotions are not expressed delicately. This is a shortcoming. Another very important point is that the grasp of the characters is not clear enough. In other words, his characters are all OOC. I think it is really serious OOC and there are many plot points that directly violate what he said in the plot. Take that as an example, he seems to have said it, right? In order to avoid everyone being the most senior person in Fengdan, he cannot openly show his partiality towards others. (Not the original sentence, I don't remember it very clearly, and I can't completely reproduce it, but that's the meaning anyway) The character portrayal is relatively delicate, but the character is too OOC, which makes it very uncomfortable for me to watch. In the original work, you said that Zhongli was very arrogant when he was young, but his arrogance was not depicted. And the subsequent scenes didn't reflect his composure. It's not that he didn't have it at all, but it wasn't enough. And so on, a lot. It feels like I'm wearing the skin of Genshin Impact, because so far, I haven't seen any of the characters that match the size of the original Ooc. But the idea is okay, and so are many of the details. If it's a beginner's work, it's pretty good. All in all, there is a lot of room for improvement. If you ask me, if this article was not a fanfic, and the plot, characters, background, etc. Were all original, the score would be higher. Overall, it's mid-to-higher, with a lot of room for improvement. Four stars count as encouragement. I watched it in one sitting. To be honest, some of the plots really made me angry. I didn't mean anything else. I just told those guys not to go too far. Thank you^ω^ There are advantages and disadvantages

It's beautiful, and I love the content. When I first saw the name and cover, I thought it was a single male protagonist, but after reading it, I found that I fell in love with this book! ! ! Really, I like the heroine's temperament, and most of them are my favorite characters (it's just a bit surprising that there is a wild dragon) There is just too little content. I want to watch it every day, but it is not enough. Speaking of which, the last few pictures outside the screen are a bit lacking...[Grievance]

Absolutely, it can stand out among Genshin Impact fanfics, not only for its novel plot, but also for its character creation. Those who haven't seen it will be at a big disadvantage! [Aggrieved] [I'm about to cry] Can you please give me more updates? I love watching them [Please give me more updates]

How should I put it? Although it is similar to the formula of a fairy tale that I read before, the author has a great imagination. Hehe (ºº ), it's good to read.

Come on, great author

Hello, I am the mother of a child with this account. The child was diagnosed with severe depression the day before yesterday. The child is very happy after reading your article. The doctor said it can relieve depression. So it's not too much to trouble you to read thousands of chapters a day [shy][send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart] Jiang Tian waited for Shengwang for 6 years, Luo Binghe waited for Shen Qingqiu for 5 years, Xue Yang waited for Xiao Xingchen for 8 years, Lan Wangji waited for Wei Wuxian for 13 years, Ye Hua waited for Bai Qian for 300 years, Sun Wukong waited for Tang Seng for 500 years, Huacheng waited for Xie Lian for 800 years, and Xie Wen waited for Wenshi for 1,000 years. Feng Qingxue waited for Baili Tu Su for 900 years, Long Kui waited for Long Yang for 1,000 years, Bai Niangzi waited for Xu Xian for 1,000 years, Yi Xiaochuan waited for Yu Shu for 2,000 years, Su Jiuer waited for Feng Xi for 3,000 years, Xiyao waited for Feipeng for thousands of years, and Zixuan waited for Changqing for three lives and three lives. And I have been waiting for your update. One day, one day, one month, a frail young girl was lying beside the bed, with a slight smile on her lips. Her outstretched hand trembled slightly, and tears shone in the corners of her eyes. The hoarse voice murmured: "Don't forget to update and kick me..."

I really love it, and there are so many people. It is estimated that there will be a long time to come. I hope that the updates will not be interrupted. I hope that the subsequent plot development will lessen the abuse of the female protagonist, and abuse the male protagonists if they want to.

It's really nice. Give me an update. [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

Super recommended [Like] Very beautiful [Send heart] Very sweet [Smirk] No knife at all [You taste it carefully] The author writes very delicately [Cry] Super beautiful [Already planted] It's really good, don't lie to you [Blow a kiss] The ending is also very good [Blow a kiss] [Like]

This book is really great, but why do you update it in the middle of the night every day? Not only updates in the middle of the night, but also on time every day after 0:00 and 2:00

I like this book very much, but I was a little bit disappointed when it was finished. I felt that my wife hadn't finished it yet, and I was secretly looking forward to it. Will she write a sequel to the movie version in the future? All in all, I give this article five stars, it's very interesting.

Although I haven't read this novel chapter by chapter, I can only say that the ending is acceptable. I think this novel is quite interesting, and the plot development is also good. Although I have read this type of novel, but I personally prefer Genshin Impact, so I still like this novel very much. In short, keep up the good work! I hope every one of your books will be well received. ( ﹡ˆOˆ﹡ )

It's nice to watch, and it will hit you unexpectedly after a slight sweetness. You will almost be numbed by the knife. The ending has a branch line and is sweet but also has a razor edge. Sometimes it will intersperse some stories of small secret realms (almost parallel worlds). There are many regrets that make people sigh. It is systematic but not too abrupt.

Why the rating is not high. It's really super beautiful. . If you can't accept any pair of CPs, you can just skip and watch the others. When I read this book two years ago, I spent almost all my time reading it. Unfortunately, it is finished now and there is no follow-up...

It looks good, I just recommend updating it more [blowing kiss][blowing kiss][laugh]

~O('▽')oIt's beautiful! Very nice!

Good-looking, good-looking is good-lookingヾ(✿ﾟ▽ﾟ)ノ

Beautiful, I like it very much

It's so good, I finished reading it in one sitting

Not bad, let's see what you think

It's really beautiful. I hope I don't have a knife.

It looks good. I feel like the male character in it is a bit yandere. I was caught off guard when it ended...

It's pretty good-looking, but I think the process of getting through the level could be a little simpler.

Beautiful [Blowing Kiss] I haven't found a book that suits me as well as this one for a long time.

The author's writing is really wonderful, flowing and written in one go.

Hey, it looks good. It's updated every day but it's not enough to watch. The copy is so successful that I want to watch it.

Very beautiful. Recommended

This is a novel that I have been following since I first read it. I get up every morning to see if there are any updates, but now there are no updates. Woooooooooooooooooooooooooo

The author's writing is so beautiful that I read it in one sitting. I hope there will be more chapters.

Ayato has always been a difficult thing for me to understand. Although this article has many wonderful things, what I always remember is Ayato's copy...