The old blind man in Qingyun Town said that I was extraordinary, and the master said that my talent was average, but the old blind man said that the master was also extraordinary. My name is Chen Li, and I could only chop firewood with the precious sword given by the master. Until one day, the master left, and I met three people when I went down the mountain...
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What I wrote above is okay, let's just put it this way, as well as the part about rescuing the Purple Air Sect, and the part in the ghost market that really broke my defense for me. If it weren't for the halo of the protagonist, in reality, the protagonist would have been dead a long time ago. There are two big guys, and you, who is at the first stage of Qi training, can escape from their hands. It feels like a bargain. The protagonist gives me the feeling that he is either smart, not a genius, nor is he young and ignorant, but he is just showing off. Having experienced so much, you still act out of your own free will, just like playing Elden's Circle. People are climbing up one step at a time, but you just cheat, and there is no experience at all. There is also teaching swordsmanship. If you don't teach the basic moves, it is like starting to build a house without laying the foundation. Also, it is not explained clearly that the protagonist is literate, and why the butler only saves the protagonist. Even in ancient times, a normal bastard had no status. The status must be higher than that of a servant and the living conditions are better. It is also explained why the protagonist encounters the big boss after escaping. In ancient times, this kind of thing was usually handled by subordinates. In short, there are many problems, and the author needs to slowly correct them. The author wants to write a good protagonist and a good story. My suggestion is to first read more history books, why successful people succeed, and shape the character and value of the characters well. Next, read philosophy books, and then various literary works and cultural knowledge. When writing a book, you must start from human nature, think and proceed from the perspective of human nature. Not everyone is mentally retarded and cannot achieve great things if they are too brainless. Finally, I hope the author can write better and better!
Another point is that if the author writes a cool article, just pretend that I didn't say it. If not, focus on the story, not the person.
What I wrote above is okay, let's just put it this way, as well as the part about rescuing the Purple Air Sect, and the part in the ghost market that really broke my defense for me. If it weren't for the halo of the protagonist, in reality, the protagonist would have been dead a long time ago. There are two big guys, and you, who is at the first stage of Qi training, can escape from their hands. It feels like a bargain. The protagonist gives me the feeling that he is either smart, not a genius, nor is he young and ignorant, but he is just showing off. Having experienced so much, you still act out of your own free will, just like playing Elden's Circle. People are climbing up one step at a time, but you just cheat, and there is no experience at all. There is also teaching swordsmanship. If you don't teach the basic moves, it is like starting to build a house without laying the foundation. Also, it is not explained clearly that the protagonist is literate, and why the butler only saves the protagonist. Even in ancient times, a normal bastard had no status. The status must be higher than that of a servant and the living conditions are better. It is also explained why the protagonist encounters the big boss after escaping. In ancient times, this kind of thing was usually handled by subordinates. In short, there are many problems, and the author needs to slowly correct them. The author wants to write a good protagonist and a good story. My suggestion is to first read more history books, why successful people succeed, and shape the character and value of the characters well. Next, read philosophy books, and then various literary works and cultural knowledge. When writing a book, you must start from human nature, think and proceed from the perspective of human nature. Not everyone is mentally retarded and cannot achieve great things if they are too brainless. Finally, I hope the author can write better and better! Another point is that if the author writes a cool article, just pretend that I didn't say it. If not, focus on the story, not the person.