If You Want to Reach Immortality, Why Don't You Call Me a Protector?

Is anyone there? Hope for more criticism! I beg you, readers! Tomato changed the rating mechanism before, and part of it will be based on retention, resulting in an initial rating of only 6.5. I have been a little disappointed these days, so I am rushing to catch up to 200,000 words in three updates to see if the title test can save it. Alas, the writing is really bad. Please tell me what you think is inappropriate.

At least the text is written in order and reads smoothly. There is a lot of language and psychological description. It is recommended to put some effort into environmental description to make the content richer and more natural. Although it is a third-person God's perspective, different characters must be used to describe different content, and the character's perspective can be polished. I think the sealed memory is a very important part of this novel. It is related to the plot development and the characterization of the protagonist Yin Feng. I suggest the author be careful when writing about this aspect, otherwise he can just write a salty fish chapter.

Author Da Da. Is there a big sword in the male and female plot behind it? A small knife is fine, but can you not ask for a big knife? I've been looking at a lot of knives lately. I hope the emotions between the male and female protagonists in the back will be sweeter. Please, thank you, the author.

It's good to read, but the content is still too little. I discovered this book too early 😉

So far, there are generally no big problems. There are a few that are logically unreasonable, but they are not major problems. The book is good but too short. Changing it to three updates a day, even if the average word count is 2,300-2,500, would be good. It would keep many people chasing the book! The author must confirm the identity of the donkey in the production team and make more explosions and more [laughing evilly]! Special 5 stars for encouragement

It's nice to see, but I don't know why there are so few people there and it's not popular. I have read many such good but lukewarm books recently, and the result is obvious, many of them have been lost. Although I really want the author to keep writing this book, the author also has to live, so he hopes to write a little bit. It's really good. I won't give up reading it. Good luck to the author [note]

It's pretty good, as long as the author doesn't become a eunuch

The setting is okay, I feel like the author calmed down and practiced again. This is a good book. It's just that sometimes the plot develops too randomly, and very small reasons lead to very complicated results. The logic is relatively poor, as if these things happened entirely for the development of the plot, and it feels like the characters cannot be portrayed well, and what I want to say cannot be expressed. I hope the author will work harder and write another good book, or wait for some time to settle down and rewrite this one, maybe the effect will be better.

It's a very good book. The characters in it are very emotional, but it's a pity. If this book was read by more people earlier, it would still have a rating of more than nine points.

Each chapter is around 2,800, but around 2,500 is still a bit low, and the plot is pretty good.

It feels okay, I personally like this kind of thing

This book is pretty good, but it's too short [Chigua]

It's pretty good. There's nothing bad about it. If anything, the protagonist hasn't started to improve his strength yet.

Will the author re-write this book in the future? I really like this kind of subject [eating melon]

The heroine is very cute, full marks

It looks good, keep up the good work.

Still very good

Not bad. At least I like the content. Give me a blade.

Very good, the characters are described in three dimensions, and the heroine is also very vivid. I don't know how much more vivid it is than those harem stories. I don't know why it is not popular.

The story is cleverly conceived. Now that I've cut it, I'm looking forward to the next one.

A five-star review, I don't need much, if it can be stable and completed, I will definitely give it a try [Love]

It looks good, I quite like it. Good luck to the author.

My child, you are invincible, so beautiful [Thinking]

Has the author changed his mind? I used to catch up to about 40 chapters in Yuyang City. I had to take care of myself first. Why is it that the plot is different now that I'm back? I'm already dizzy.

Good author. Will the heroine awaken the memories of previous lives later?

I feel like the protagonist's blocking of spiritual power at the end was a bit too much foreshadowing [face covering] The book is very nice and sweet.

I personally think it looks good, but why is the rating so low? [Eat melon]

The writing is really good, but there is no one around. It is recommended not to abuse the protagonist. No one likes to look at the knife now. If there is a sign of a knife, just abandon it. Give me more sugar.

I've read more than 20 chapters. It's well written and the male protagonist's character is okay. After reading the first volume, I discovered that the male protagonist has actually been in love for a long time. This counts as taking 96 detours and finally coming back.

Overall, this book is not very good, but I still give it four stars. However, the structure of the article is pretty good.