[Wild Imagination] + [A Touch of Angst] + [Power Fantasy] + [System] + [Genshin Impact]
The Fifth Descender, Ling Yu.
From the moment Ling Yu transmigrated, the story of Teyvat was sent spiraling in a new direction.
“Why? Why did I have to come to this world!”
With the Abyss invading, the ancient gods reviving, the ley lines in chaos, and creations of gold on the loose, Teyvat was left in ruins.
Corpses lay everywhere. Thick blood shrouded the world, while the flesh and blood of those he once knew drifted through the air.
Grave after grave, built from heaps of black sludge, denied the dead even the peace of rest.
And Ling Yu relived this nightmare for a hundred years… until he grew numb, until death and parting no longer stirred any feeling in him.
Only then did this cycle of reincarnation slowly reach its end…
Ling Yu: “Xiao… are you crying?”
“But why?”
Ling Yu: “No! Don’t, don’t go again! Why? Can you hear me?”
“Keqing, Shenhe, everyone… please, won’t you listen to me…?”
“Hahaha, I see! So I’m already dead?”
“So even souls can be hurt…”
Yoimiya: “I’m so scared. Ling Yu, Lumine, please don’t leave me. I… don’t want to lose anyone important to me again…”
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Focalors: “I’m sorry, Furina. You’ve worked so hard for five hundred years.”
Raiden Makoto: “Ei, still haven’t learned how to cook? Then leave it to me.”
Yae Miko: “Ling Yu’s smile hides too many emotions. I’m afraid I’ll never get used to it.”
Your book is indeed okay, but the concepts of past and present lives and the concept of time are a bit unstable. The most important thing is time. You could write about your future self and leave some clues to your present self, but you didn't write it. Really, you can write it like this, it's better if you write it like this