What's Wrong with This Immortal?

I quite like it. It's unique. I thought it was a clichéd plot, but the content is quite eye-catching. (I feel very good)

The plot of traditional immortality and Japanese-style youthful characters are wonderfully combined in the author's writing. This novel does not have the murderous and violent atmosphere of common fairy tale novels, but its evolutionary direction is not the popular comedy style and weird style or the indifferent "fairy spirit", but the Japanese youth flavor represented by "introversion and social fear". The seemingly unrelated two have a magical chemical reaction in the author's writing, and reinterprets the traditional path of upgrading and fighting monsters in cultivating immortals from the perspective of "social terror", which gave me a great sense of novelty. Of course, there are still shortcomings, and that's precisely where it's innovative - it's not "powerful" enough. The author has mastered the two avenues of cultivating immortality and becoming light, and is about to master them and find his own avenue, but he is still missing the mark. First, he dealt with all the criticized aspects of traditional immortality cultivation, including the slap in the face, sect comparisons, and being surrounded by villains. For example, the playboy Mr. Lu is a sultry lolita control, the cold and powerful enemy Nangong is kind-hearted, and the woman who usually belittles the protagonist is actually a good sister. However, this innovation is not thorough enough, and you can still see entry-level assessments that make people feel that the logic is unclear. It is common that only a few people such as the protagonist can cross-level, and other people mark which level is the same and so on. Secondly, he used the character of social fear to create the protagonist and establish interpersonal relationships in a Japanese youth style, which made me read it easily, freely, and novelly. The strong and cheerful second male lead, the third male lead who is cold on the outside and warm on the inside, the female protagonist who is considerate, and another female protagonist who is equally shy and kind, the protagonist group of the Japanese campus has moved to the screen of the world of immortality. It's a pity that this step is only half taken, and it seems to be a trick. I think the author should deepen this characteristic and follow his own unique path.

It's quite good-looking, the writing is good, and the characters are relatively vivid. If I have to say, there are some shortcomings. 1: Realm is written very slowly. In the first chapter, it is said that the protagonist is about to build a foundation. Over one hundred and fifty chapters later, the protagonist is still in the early stage of foundation building. I still want to see what kind of personality his inner demon has. 2: I always feel that the protagonist's attack methods are average, that is, he believes that strong power can produce miracles, and aura seems to be free. Since the protagonist has such a high level of understanding, we can let him learn more, at least let him fight less wildly. Look at Nangong Haotian, I think he is very powerful, and he can also learn one or two of the Four Arts of Immortality. I think the formations and elixirs are quite good, in line with the protagonist's personality, and they can bring a sense of security to the protagonist. Three: Regarding the protagonist's master, it's not that he is bad, but he should at least give the protagonist something to save his life, including a flash talisman, at least he can escape. Finally, I wish the author's books will get better and better results.

It's beautiful, the characters are really vivid, and there's no brainless coding. I hope I can keep writing [currently in progress] [please update]🌷

It is a very good novel about cultivating immortals. It is a rare decent sect in the world. There are no weird and inexplicable intrigues, no use of any means to improve strength, socialism, inexplicable sect competitions, and treating mortals as nothing. To cultivate immortality, you must also cultivate your mind. Whether it is Taoism or Buddhism, (except for some cults) they will not say, "Everything can be discarded for the sake of cultivation." So what is the difference between practicing this way and a demonic cult? As the ancients said, destroy human desires and preserve heaven's principles. Only by cultivating your mind will you be able to stop messing around and making the world a mess when your abilities are strong. The male protagonist is a person with very upright views. Apart from some minor shortcomings (such as liking to get naked and fight with enemies), he is really good. Here is the original article about the male protagonist who likes to get naked and fight with others. "There is no one else around right now, there is only you, a demon who is about to die. Even if I take off my clothes and fight you, what will the impact be? To me, you demons are like a tree hole, which allows me to let myself go occasionally." The following is a personal complaint about some novels about cultivating immortals. They are black mud, so read with caution. The more he talked, the angrier he became, criticizing some current immortality novels by name. What does it mean to write decently? If you go out into the wild and see people, you will rob them. If you cultivate immortality, you will be very cruel. If you have resources, you will rob them. Why did 20 or so high-level combatants die for an advanced little herb? High-end combat power is like cabbage, right? For the sake of a small herbal medicine of the same realm, friends of more than 40 years turned against each other. I know some people will say after reading this, "Oh, this society is like this, very cruel." I am going to talk about something about the great road here, as the ancients said. "In the course of the Great Dao, the world is for the common good, select the worthy and capable, maintain trust and cultivate harmony. Therefore, we do not only kiss our relatives, we do not only give birth to our children, so that the old will have their end, the strong will be useful, the young will have their own growth, the humble, the widowed, the lonely, the disabled, and the disabled will all be supported. Men will have their share, and women will have their return." Which sentence tells you that you will use any means to cultivate immortality? Those who write evil cultivators and think they are decent people, 🍋$. You can't just talk about socialism when you're strong. The classics on cultivating immortals don't teach morality, right? I doubt those authors, let alone the Taoist classics, I doubt they have even read the Tao Te Ching, and just rely on playing mmo to get rid of it. What is written is not the world of immortal cultivation at all, it is clearly the world of evil cultivation.

It looks good. The author is well-established, so he is probably not written by a newcomer. The main protagonist has always been very energetic, strong at the beginning, and even stronger at the end! ! I have never been a waste, and I have always been very strong [admiration] [like]. And every battle feels very interesting. The protagonist has never been looked down upon by anyone or treated as a waste. He is always known as the strongest! Being challenged by another strongest. There is a feeling of strong confrontation. And I feel like the villain in the book is the challenger [laughs evilly], and the protagonist is the final boss! ! ! That's why I saw the reminder page from the beginning. There is really a kind of spell to return to the sky and the earth. I am the strongest, and I feel like Gojo Satoru (not the 2.5 Satoru kind). Anyway, it is highly recommended. I don't want to read trash counterattack articles anymore, and the routine template Long Ao Tianwen is not good either. This kind of genius novel, but there are also routines of character flaws, because the author has a good writing skills, maybe, anyway, I feel that the writing is pretty good~ At present, I think the two best paragraphs (containing some spoilers) are the protagonist's facial features glowing with white light, and the whole body is exposed. With a sword and a palm, the two geniuses are fighting with all their strength, but they are easily blocked, and then one person knocks the two geniuses to the ground (I don't know if the author has seen Under One Person~) There are also a lot of twists and turns in the section about the weak sea in all directions. As a reader, I really couldn't guess who I would fight in the end. From this section, I felt that the author's writing style must have written several books, and he should be an old author [Thinking] and the section about the black bear spirit replacing the old city master for 40 years also made people feel that it burned the IQ and was worthy of praise. At this point, it is almost the same [makes a face]. Having said so much, I just hope that the author can see that there are readers who are following the reading seriously, and hope that the author can keep writing, because some readers are really looking forward to the next story [Blowing Kiss]. By the way, I will fight with the Taoist immortal Nangong. When will it come? I'm impatient, I've already [attacked hard] Author, come on [Like]

It's very interesting. About half way through it, I suddenly thought, if the protagonist had inner demons, wouldn't the inner demons immediately commit suicide and return to their true form out of fear of society? It's interesting to think about it

This book is generally very good. The plot is not rigid. I don't know why the rating is so low.

The writing style is also better than 99% of the authors I have read, and it is also one of the few novels with three correct views.

In addition to being slower and having no shortcomings (personal taste), I see many shining points: 1. The appearance rate of the system is not high - 2. The protagonist is constantly improving (personality changes are gradual) - 3. The protagonist has a good personality and occasionally has a vicious tongue (straight man) - 4. The atmosphere of the sect where the protagonist lives is similar to the "Cultivation Chat Group" group chat, and the protagonist's friends are all a group of lovely people - 5. I want to knock the protagonist and Nangong Haotian [smile]

After reading the whole article, I think it is very good, the writing is very good, the characterization is very good, the plot setting is very good, the combat setting is very good, and the funny setting is also very good [angry] [angry] [angry] It would be better if you can add some highlight moments of other characters (⸝⸝⸝ᵒ̴̶̷̥́ ⌑ ᵒ̴̶̷̣̥̀⸝⸝⸝) Everyone is very welcome to read this book. Don't read it with a score of 8.5. It's just a bunch of little kids who want to read Long Aotian. They are here to harm other novels. Fight against the injustice for the author and look at the characters. The portrayal is obviously very good. I always felt that I was very smart. I wrote about it and expressed this opinion. In short, I just can't stand the protagonist. The writing is obviously very good. In short, the last two words, support! [Like]

The writing style is relatively ancient. But the level is already above average for early normal writing. And it can also be seen that the author is very careful about this book, rather than writing casually. The current Tomato is an absolutely high-quality article. Strong recommendation

I've been watching it for a day, and overall there are some minor flaws. Actually, it's not bad. It's pretty much what I want to say. To me, the plot to become a disciple was a minor minor flaw. Later I looked at this as a joke, and then there were indeed too many descriptions of female characters. Although the protagonist, I'm afraid, is not ambiguous about any female character, but as far as I can see, Nangong, Senior Sister, and Xiao Longnu all vaguely describe their feelings for the protagonist.

This is one of the fantasy genres that I have been watching for a long time in recent times. The protagonist is a particularly evil being, but he is quite sociophobic, that is, he has flaws in his character, so he may do things that we think he shouldn't do, but flaws make his character more three-dimensional. And there are no villains who are mindless looking for trouble. The two people who enter the inner sect with the protagonist also have their own flaws, but they have spent ten years polishing their characters in the outer sect. It can be said that Nangong Haotian is relatively strong in every aspect (referring to character and strength), but he currently has less actual combat, so he was inexperienced and lost the first time he fought the protagonist. However, Nangong Haotian himself doesn't care about winning or losing, and he has some sympathy with the protagonist. It can be said that Nangong Haotian is the traditional protagonist who is comprehensive and indifferent with five spiritual roots. Of course, there is no such setting as the Son of Luck in this book, which explicitly mentions luck or the like. All in all, it's pretty good, and the characters have distinct personalities. [Smile]

To be honest, I personally have never read such a novel. The righteous way of the Immortal Sect is really the righteous way of the Immortal Sect, and there are only a few people with evil thoughts. Moreover, you can also see the changes in the protagonist's personality, becoming more cheerful and less fearful step by step. What did I say before? There are some poisonous spots, the further back you go, the better it looks. It's really a good novel. Come on, author, the writing will be better later on. It won't be a big problem to get a score of 9.4 Or above.

It's unexpectedly good. The descriptions of both the protagonist and the supporting characters are lifelike, making people laugh without losing their grace. No man, I can see this on Tomato. This is no longer food. Even if it is put on other platforms, it will still be a fairy tale.

It's very, very good, and worth reading even for old bookworms. How to say it? The chalk may still be a bit lacking, but this description is actually quite relaxing. For people who are busy in life and work and are not satisfied, it is okay to take a look at it. At least it can relax a little~

It's quite good-looking. Compared with other ordinary fairy tales, the characters in it are more complete, a little more interesting, and more relaxed. I don't think the protagonist is surrounded by enemies. I recommend it. It's really good-looking.

So far, it is very good. It can be regarded as a book that truly writes about the heart and character of social terror. However, the comment area is not very clean. It is recommended to block it.

The writing style is not bad, coupled with the vague feeling of inspiration, people will never expect what will unfold in the next chapter!

Both the details and the plot are excellent. There are so many slap-in-the-face plots in Tomato novels, but this novel made me not disgusted at all. On the contrary, I read GC. The character descriptions, psychological descriptions, etc. Are all first-class in Tomato novels. There are just too few and I haven't enjoyed it.

Five-star support. The rhythm of the writing is reasonable, and the emotions are gradual and natural. It is already outstanding. Although the protagonist's talent is incredible, it has little to do with the system. I personally prefer this kind of system where the protagonist occupies the majority and is just a minor support. It can even continue without system articles. Finally, I hope the author can update Kouya stably

The pace of this book is neither rushed nor slow, and the plot is very interesting. The most important thing is that the characters written by the author are three-dimensional, not a flat model. You can see the growth and changes of the characters, which is an advantage that many Tomato novels do not have. I hope the author will keep up the good work.

It's really good-looking, the male protagonist is socially anxious and has a lot of friends. The male protagonist is a particularly awesome genius. He also received special attention from the sect and focused on training. There is no cliche plot about Long Aotian being slapped in the face. And the plot is very logical. The best book about cultivating immortality in Tomato that I have ever read! ! !

It looks great. I love watching it. [Send my heart] [Send my heart] It's a pity that I don't know why it's not popular.

Not bad, not bad. It's a pity that the update was interrupted for a while, otherwise the score would be higher, and 9.0 Is not impossible. Why did this book die last year [face covering]

The author's writing is good, and there's nothing toxic about it so far. The protagonist's sociophobic character is similar to my social disorder, and the portrayal is pretty good. It would be nice if the author updated it faster [Blow kiss]

It's a quick update, I can't sleep at night, the characters are rich, and it's one of the most comfortable books I've ever read.

Yes, the characters are well drawn, and the storyline is well developed, especially the description of the protagonist's social fear, which is neither exaggerated nor artificial. The protagonist's character fits the plot very well, so there is no big problem. Of course, the advantage... Is that he is not poisonous, at least I can't see it. So far, in Chapter 98, I haven't seen any big holes, so I can take a look [eat melon]

I really like this kind of protagonist who has flaws and is not a hexagon. The supporting characters and the development of the story are also great. It's a pity that the author doesn't write it anymore.