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Overall, it looks okay, but the character of the protagonist feels too honest to me, and has no independent opinion, making him seem too useless. The author can try to make the protagonist improve his strength, make him more confident and mature. Give two reference suggestions: The score of a book is actually related to the cover. If it weren't for the prefix DNF, I wouldn't even click on the book. (The absence of a cover often means that this is a new author, and it is difficult for new authors to write an attractive story) Therefore, it is recommended that the author spend a few dollars to get a cover. Generally, there are people who will do the cover in the contracted author group, so there is no need to save a few dollars. At present, the plot is a bit too bland, with no conflict and no pretentiousness. The only enjoyable part is meeting various girls from the adventure group. In addition, it is difficult to achieve results for a niche fandom like DNF. Therefore, the author can actually join a [player] group, and for these players, the continent of Arad is a strange magical world, and the protagonist's ball of yarn can act as an NPC organization. Use these player groups to promote the plot and create excitement and conflict. Of course, the above are just a few suggestions based on what I personally want to see. [Learned]

You can properly resettle the apostle, such as Di Ruigi, give it a desolate and uninhabited territory or send it back to its hometown. After all, it doesn't really want to hurt others. And Rost, sending it back to the sea or back to its hometown is a good way. There is no need to fight.

It doesn't take much to add a sense of presence to the protagonist. In addition, you can also add some memories and feelings of the protagonist in the dialogue or plot of the supporting characters, as well as interactions with the heroines. It would be better.

This is the first time I have seen this subject. Come on, author, I am very optimistic about you, you will definitely become popular🔥

The writing is immature, but the concept is great and worth reading.

There is a feeling of Kan Niang Wenxun's return flow.

At present, the protagonist's strength is worrying, but if it is a slow-burning novel, it may be more comfortable to read later because of this? A little bit of progress, like a traditional growth novel that I haven't read in a long time. However, now that the rating is so low, can the author persevere? Come on duck

The writing is not bad. Although I have never played dnf, I can still read it. But! I came here for my wife, where is my wife? ! Where is my wife? ! Where is my wife? ! (Angry)

The writing is okay. The style of writing is similar to that of searching for a lost ship girl. I guess it has some reference. It seems to be okay so far. I just don't want to be a monster in the future.

Now I especially like to read Xun Hui Liu novels, and I have already finished the one by Kan Ni.

It's a bit like the feeling of déjà vu when watching Naruto's Memoirs, [Petrified]

Come on, keep writing. Let's improve the protagonist's strength. In a world where great power belongs to oneself, don't be too free and equal.

This kind of novel is so rare, come on!

The writing is good, the character interactions and daily life of the adventure group, and the main plot has been advancing.

Very good, the writing is good and there are no narrative flaws. Worth reading.

Unfortunately, my large size has a steel basin.

Great book, cheers to the author!

The joy of riding a horse. You are such a genius!

Write quickly, even though I haven't played for many years

The author has collapsed at the door of Bwanga and seems unable to get up.

There's nothing toxic about it at the moment, I recommend checking it out.

It's so nice and I like to read the author's ten pictures every day

Not bad! At least so far, I've seen a dozen or so and it's pretty good, but it lacks a sense of adventure. What's the protagonist's next plan? Didn't write it either.

Is it possible for all five female magicians to change their professions [Thinking]

I've read Chapter 32 and the protagonist still has no fighting power.

Can you give me more [thinking] Is it gone? [Eating melon]

I miss my youth,

Not bad, good, keep up the good work

I love watching Chuang fandoms the most

I don't like chasing books, so I'll give it five stars first.