Immortal Cultivators Come to the World of Super-Powered Heroes

It's a bit nonsensical. I think the idea is good. The subject matter attracts me, but the article seems strange and awkward in many places. If you want to create an emotional line, you have to at least take your time. It's weird that there is no emotional foreshadowing. Also, the gentle look in the eyes during the rescue in the first few pictures can be changed, otherwise it will be too weird. Seeing teammates being bullied Shouldn't there be some anger? You let him go so easily. And why did Mu Zhiyan trust the protagonist so easily in the coma scene? You should be a little wary. This girl also speaks a bit strangely. It makes no sense to say that you become good friends with others. You just say this when you don't even know the person. When you write, you can look back and see that some things really don't work, for no reason.

A piece of shit.

A lump, a big lump

A lump💩 💩💩

A bit short, but very good