Developing a Portal to the Myriad Worlds with Cheats in Love Apartment

I would like to give you some suggestions. Author, you'd better think carefully about how you can fill their psychological space later. And take out various things anytime and anywhere. The iPartment TV series is often nonsensical, but as a novel, you must have some basis. If you continue to be nonsensical, your novel will not last long. Maybe you can write that they have some other abilities. You can also write that this world itself is not an ordinary world, but the protagonist has never been exposed to it before, and your main line is too slow to enter. I've written more than 20 pieces, but I haven't started yet. I see that you don't care about the plot so much, so you probably plan to travel as a group, because then you don't have to care too much about the plot in the real world, just a little bit is fine. If it is a personal time travel, then your time point is completely wrong and you should start from 1. For groups, you also need to consider the number of people, who should be included and who should not be included? Detachment is absolutely undesirable, absolutely absolutely undesirable. It must be streamlined to a certain number of 8 or 10 people, and the CP must be solved. The protagonist's CP can wait, but other people's CP cannot. Regardless of whether they are together or not, if you choose Xiaoxian, you will have Yifei, and if you choose Ziqiao, you will have Meijia. This is my little suggestion. The most important thing is to look at your own thoughts

It made me feel annoyed and I deducted two stars. Why? Firstly, it's because of Zhuge Dali. This is so annoying. He has crazy curiosity and research. I'm really speechless. He has no emotional intelligence. Secondly, too many people wrote that Zhuge Dali is the heroine. I'm tired of reading it.

Personally I think it's well written. But who is the heroine? Zhuge Longnu? I just can't stand creating my own heroine. There is no reference at all. If Zhuge Dali is the reference, wouldn't you just choose Zhuge Dali? Also, I'm particularly curious about why novels nowadays tend to write about particularly strong female protagonists? All kinds of crushing and ravaging of the male protagonist. Then give the male protagonist various tasks to complete. Then all kinds of inappropriateness and so on. Do you have to hang yourself from a tree? And shouldn't most men like gentler women?

Reading the synopsis, it feels like you are traveling around the world with everyone in the love apartment, but in Chapter 37, you only see the protagonist. . . When will you take everyone to the world together?

The writing is quite good, but the opening time is not very good. I love the beginning immediately, and all the women are taken. Isn't it more beautiful to take the protagonist group to open the Myriad Realms dungeon? Cut in at this time, and the day lily is cold.

I don't know why, but the writing is stiff, and the whole text has the feeling of being objective and didactic, without a sense of substitution. The narrative is like a running account, and it talks about other people's affairs. The protagonist will only do one thing forever, and it's a sitcom that is abruptly straightened out, making the plot boring and not immersive at all. I always feel like I am a life coach. Give me some decent advice, whether you have it or not.

The book collapsed. When I saw the latest chapter 62/63, I only had one thought in my mind, this book completely collapsed! When writing about the small world consciousness, there are signs of writing collapse. You can regard iPartment as the main copy world, and then slowly integrate other worlds. A world like this that directly focuses on love apartments is too niche and too limited.

The setting is very strange, the protagonist is like a puppet, and he inexplicably transformed a time-travel door. In order to match the book's title, which is far-fetched, you can just travel with a time-travel door🍉 Otherwise, it will be like a ghost. Unconscious, you can't remember the situation after it's over.

The writing is very good, but when typesetting, there could be more natural paragraphs. There is no need to arrange it so tightly. Some dialogues have too many words, and it is really uncomfortable to read them densely. Also, can the upgrade behind the time and space gate fix some worlds to travel through, some farming worlds, or like Monster Hunter, which can be developed sustainably, or food-based worlds like Prisoners of Food, which can be fixed and traveled through It seems to be very good so far, keep going!

First of all, I am very tired from reading. The layout of your article is a bit tight, making it difficult to read quickly. There is a lot of content in one paragraph, which is tiring to read. At the same time, it is a bit verbose, which makes it more laborious to express it. Secondly, it is very slow to get started. I only traveled through the world once within 36 chapters of the Ten Thousand Realms content, and other people's time travel is even more unreasonable. No poisonous spots found, good, come on Finally, and most importantly, I want to be strong, I want to be strong, I want to be strong, I want to be strong, I want to be strong, I want to be strong