They didn't come together a hundred years ago due to conspiracy. Can they come together a hundred years later? He is both a disciple and a lover, step by step towards the huge abyss of conspiracy, betrayal, sacrifice, rescue, willing to give up everything for him. It was my first time writing, so I gave up reluctantly. When I read it, I read it from the perspective of comics or anime. After all, I haven't finished reading more than 5 novels!
Reader comments
I'm not going to be too bad for a new author, but I'm going to make a bit of a sharp sound next. The performance is too stiff, to be honest. Everyone is there to speak, no priority.
Moreover, there is a lack of description for some scenes, and more dialogue is used to promote the plot (at least in the early stage), which makes your novel look like a script. At least the script also has narration and other things to assist us.
Also, your pacing is too messy and lacks foreshadowing, and because of some of your shortcomings, I can't understand what you're trying to write in your plot at all.
In conclusion, I can only say that it is indeed the work of a newbie, and even the mistakes made are so new. But it's not that I can't read it. I can only say that I hope the author writes better and better.
I'm not going to be too bad for a new author, but I'm going to make a bit of a sharp sound next. The performance is too stiff, to be honest. Everyone is there to speak, no priority. Moreover, there is a lack of description for some scenes, and more dialogue is used to promote the plot (at least in the early stage), which makes your novel look like a script. At least the script also has narration and other things to assist us. Also, your pacing is too messy and lacks foreshadowing, and because of some of your shortcomings, I can't understand what you're trying to write in your plot at all. In conclusion, I can only say that it is indeed the work of a newbie, and even the mistakes made are so new. But it's not that I can't read it. I can only say that I hope the author writes better and better.