The Mortal’s Path to Immortality in the City

I have just started reading, and the author has just started writing. It is a good start. I would like to make a few suggestions: 1. According to the author's structure of the novel, the number of words in the city, cultivation world, fairy world, god world, holy world and other realms and interface chapters should be balanced. You cannot write too much about the city, and each plane must have a beginning and an end, and explain it clearly. 2. The protagonist must be a genius, with the best skills, good opportunities, promotions cannot be too slow, and the level must not always be lower than that of geniuses of the same age. 3. In urban descriptions, trivial matters such as not being able to go to the toilet, eating, shopping, or going shopping always happen, which is too long-winded and too priceless. 4. Since he is a cultivator, the protagonist must be decisive in killing, not laughing and joking, not being holy, and not leaving any disaster behind. 5. Don't write the protagonist as a lecherous person. When you see a woman unable to move, you should be upright. Don't always use women to drive the plot. You can have more female protagonists, but preferably no more than 8. And you can't always write plots that mainly revolve around women, and you are always in the process of saving women. 6. All plots must revolve around the protagonist, and don't write too many plots about supporting characters. 7. The language must not be wordy or wordy. If you can write a plot or a fight in one chapter, you should never write it into the second chapter, let alone write three or four chapters just for the sake of word count. 8. The most important thing is not to listen to those who say that crossing too many boundaries is too exaggerated. That is bullshit. Since the protagonist must cross a new level and fight, otherwise the novel will never have a climax. It is too boring. The protagonist is either running away or on the way to escape or be rescued. The protagonist can face anything he encounters. Even if he is defeated, bad things can turn into good things.

Author, are you sure you are writing a book about cultivation and not a book about fantasy? There are nine realms in cultivation, and the realm of fantasy is customized by the author. There are all kinds of realms. Many readers are confused by this kind of book. Most readers of the realm of cultivation know that Qi training, foundation building, golden elixir, Nascent Soul, transformation of gods, separation of voids, and integration of Mahayana. There are nine realms of transcending tribulations. Each major realm has nine small realms. After ninety-nine returns, one becomes the great road. After transcending tribulations and ascending, there is the fairy world. The nine realms of the fairy world are human immortals, mysterious immortals, earth immortals, heavenly immortals, true immortals, golden immortals, Daluo golden immortals, and quasi-sages. Saints, Sanqing, the Two Saints of the West, Bodhi, and Ancestor Hongyun are all in the realm of saints. There are four people who have transcended the realm of saints, Hongjun, Nuwa, Kunpeng, and Lu Ya. They are the creation spiritual masters, have longevity in the world of cultivation, have practiced Qi for two hundred years, built foundations for four hundred years, and have eight golden elixirs. One hundred, two thousand souls, six thousand gods, fifteen thousand points, thirty thousand combinations, sixty thousand Mahayana, one hundred and twenty-five thousand transcending tribulations. In an entire era, the fairy world is already the highest realm. This reader has some popularizations about the author to save you from making things up.

It is well written, and the author very successfully portrays the mood of a 22-year-old young man. Unlike many urban immortality novels, the protagonist pretends to be aloof, cool and cool, and kills people at every turn. This book has a good grasp of the scale of this plot, and the author continues to work hard.

I read the first 50 chapters in one go. It's very good. The concept is delicate. The author is creating a protagonist who gradually grows up. There are many redundancies in the chapters, which should be solved in the subsequent plot! Generally speaking, the plot is very good, and there is no plot like "the grandfather brings his granddaughter out and gives him a luxury car and a villa".

It's not bad. It's the type I like to read. I just want to ask the author if he can write one chapter a day? Can he add more chapters or bursts of new chapters [Chigua]

Good, good, come on, come on

Relatively speaking, it's still okay.

The writing is pretty good, the main plot is relatively clear, the male protagonist is a bit of a ruffian, decisive in killing, and humorous, overall it's okay.

Well written,

Well written, good, good, good, good, good, good, good