Big Work************

The subject matter and pacing of this book are good, but the plot is rubbish and your protagonist is very pretentious. He obviously has no ability and no confidence, but he is very pretending. Even when he is tied to the prison, he has to rely on others to rescue him, and in the end he is still pretending. From the first chapter to the latest chapter, there has been nothing exciting. The protagonist is completely He has no ability to save his life, but he is still a traveler from the ancestral planet Earth. You can give him a setting where the traveler's force increases every day, but the protagonist in your novel has no ability except a mouth. If you continue writing like this, this book will really be bad. Most of the stories written by other people are in which the important person ends up personally. For example, the empress personally comes to listen to the book. Someone wants to harm the protagonist, but they are killed before they start harming them. This is called pleasure. You, the protagonist, have been tied up in prison and whipped. How can there be any pleasure at all? Your writing style is terrible.

I feel that there are too few storytelling plots. It's not like the main plot. It's a mess. The protagonist is calm and confident in talking about how good the storytelling system is. It's all about making money. You need to be a member to listen to the storytelling. It's completely different from the kind of story telling that the protagonist pretends to be.

What a licking dog

It's well written, with good control over human relationships and sophistication, without being overly intellectual.

It's well written, don't cut it.

Too wordy, too messy

Text expression is okay