The main character is Shining Shimmer, a female, and a unicorn. We are a freshman, and we are nearing the end of the term, so we update irregularly. We mainly fight against the Twilight faction, the Pegasus group, and the rare apples, so those who fight against others such as the book group and Rainbow Forest Capture can leave. Our title is not good. The author of the cover book has drawn it, and the image of the protagonist, an Equestria girl, has been drawn.
Reader comments
It's okay, but there is too much water, and the sentences are not smooth, and there is a lot of nonsense. When the character speaks, the name of the horse is not written in front. You have to think of it by yourself. I suggest you change it. Feel free to re-do the front part. It will be better if you change these.
If it is changed, I will re-grade it. Well, it can be regarded as preparation for the final.
It's okay, but there is too much water, and the sentences are not smooth, and there is a lot of nonsense. When the character speaks, the name of the horse is not written in front. You have to think of it by yourself. I suggest you change it. Feel free to re-do the front part. It will be better if you change these. If it is changed, I will re-grade it. Well, it can be regarded as preparation for the final.