Fairy Tail: Hatching Patamon from the Start

So far, the writing is pretty good, but I would like to give you some suggestions from the author. First, the portrayal of the protagonist is too childish. It was said before that the protagonist was in his 30s before time travel, but this seems a bit too childish. He is easily moved and is really unnecessary. Second, there is no need for those Digimon to cause a sensation at every turn. The rare monsters and talking cute ones in the original work have also appeared, such as Harpy, the chicken and the protoss in the movie version, etc., So there is really no need for them to cause a sensation in the whole city at every turn, and even the train cannot be ridden. In the original book, Hapi and the others can sit down, so there's nothing they can't do. What's more, they still belong to the age of magic, and they will definitely accept new things very quickly. The third point is the identity of the protagonist. There is really no need to hide it deliberately, just don't say it. The characters in Fairy Tail in the original work are not the kind who want to know the truth, but the kind that everyone has secrets. If you want us to know, you will tell us. Lucy's identity is exposed. It doesn't matter, so there is no need to deliberately hide it, just don't say it.

Let me tell everyone who is going to watch it a poisonous point about the invincible Blood Mother. I saw chapter 60. The author spent nearly 20 chapters writing about the protagonist dealing with Deliora. At the beginning, the system even advised the protagonist that he was too incompetent and should not get involved in this incident. Then the protagonist is extremely confident, prepares a meal, and determines in advance that the world has no correction power. Then the group started, and Deliola was left with a lot of work. Then! Then! The world has been corrected! The way you deserve to die, the way you deserve to live, and the way you die have not changed! Author, tell me what you are doing! Ah? ! If you don't lie down and follow the group, I will relive the classics. If you don't drastically change the character's trajectory, I will make up for the regrets. Are you fucking asking me to have fun with you? ! Even if you let Deliora destroy the protagonist, and then the protagonist "I am too weak and have no strength", I will not say anything about growing up. You say you have no correction power, and then you correct it, I just feel disgusted! Disgusting! Did you write it in for yourself? Confused about writing? In your novel, you are the way of heaven, aren't you the world when you return? Boundary! Build! Just! ! [Anger]. Ah? Bastard! Look directly at me!

I have seen more than 60 pictures, and there is almost nothing except the birth of the protagonist. The reason why the plot has changed is that there is a mysterious force behind the scenes to control the protagonist and constantly test the bottom line of the mysterious power. Now, the mysterious power may refer to gods or taboo-like existences. The author himself may be talking about a single female protagonist, but the male protagonist in more than 60 photos is now twelve or thirteen years old. His mansion looks like a new generation guild dormitory.

The author and this book have a childlike beauty that has not been read many books.

Chapter 50, Digimon has no combat power at all and has not evolved. You are the prince of a country with so many resources, but it does not evolve. If you don't evolve and have no combat power, what is the point of writing about it? As a pet dog, dogs will bite. If you just beat two gangsters, forget it. I didn't say it. You keep saying that you need to protect the country while not giving Digimon access. Transformation, I read later that it was said that evolution will cause hindrances. The author also said that it was to appear real. This is too real. If I know that my country will be destroyed, I will definitely evolve crazily, instead of using five Digimon as mascots like you and following you for more than 10 years. The protagonists of the Digimon anime are getting married. Maybe there is no evolution at all. What's the point of raising a dog then?

I don't understand what the point of writing your book is. The protagonist has never thought about how to become stronger. He spent 60 to 70 million origins to change to a basic space magic just for the convenience of returning home. What is your purpose of joining Fairy Tail? Will joining this union help you in any way? Moreover, the author has been suppressing the protagonist's combat power. I can understand the degradation of Digimon after evolution. The evolution value can be deducted as a negative number and requires money to increase. It is completely incomprehensible.

What kind of evil did I do to get such a weirdo, forcibly weakening the protagonist, no matter what I do, I just say that the world correction will bring him back, and I want to save people. The next chapter will be directly corrected by the world correction. Damn it, if you don't want to write that he is alive, you just write that you don't know how long it will take and the end will be over. Writing like this is purely disgusting! It gave me hope, but TM gave me despair. I thought you could do something big with this subject, but you ended up giving me a big one! After so many years of reading, this is the first time I have written such a long review!

The plot is a bit bland, and then the progress of the Digimon is a bit delayed. I'm not sure how you want to write it... Digimon have not evolved steadily, they are all short-term super evolutions. In the original book, only the selected children have always used the Digicomputer to evolve. The other Digimon are permanently evolved into the Complete or Ultimate form. Your protagonist's Digimon have not been touched for a long time in the maturity or growth stage and have always used the DigiDevice to evolve... Then it is a bit funny that you spent a lot of training resources and that training value, and then the combat power is a little bit The feeling of collapse (after all, there are dragons, unknown enemies, gods, etc.), And then there is the feeling of suppressing the realm... If it is too much, the combat power is not equal... If it is forcibly raised, it will be even more collapsed... And seeing that the current novel is very different from your introduction, the role of Digimon is really not that big. The complete body is almost considered to be in the A-level range. It depends on your fighting description... You also have S, ss, sss, dragons and gods, etc... In the future, Digimon may be dispensable. After all, now that Digimon cannot stand alone, they all rely on numbers to complete...

It's a bit rubbish, as if it wouldn't be written without adding fairies. The plot is still the same, nothing new.

The first thirty chapters were just mediocre and the more they were written, the worse they became. Let me verify this. Limiting myself to this limit makes me look like an orphanage director. I'm really stupid.