Pokémon: Steel Master? I Don't Do It Right!

I strengthened and weakened the family lineage at the beginning, then strengthened and weakened the system, and then weakened the initial Pokémon, which was a bit too harsh.

I can only say that it is a miracle that it became popular after being restricted by the system and dissuading most of the readers.

Just average. He said he didn't want the family elves. After changing hands, Daigo sent me a Flash Zoroa. I want to write an Ash Ketchum with a strong background. Just don't bring good elves with you. It would be great if the commoner elves can directly become champions. Start with a disabled turkey. Next comes Flash Zoroa. Speechless

Don't have too many heroines, just have two at most. Secondly, the progress may be a bit fast, and the pace of Pokémon is a bit slow. I mean, it's better to add some travel elements, which is equivalent to daily Pokémon training, and don't push the plot too much. Secondly, don't directly pas for Steel Pokémon. You can say that you don't want to become stronger through family relationships, but you want to become stronger through the bond between yourself and Pokémon. After all, the quasi-god's family has given it to you. In fact, most people will not be able to stand this point. After all, they want to watch it for fun. However, if Pokémon is too cool, it is no longer Pokémon. Therefore, my opinion is relatively neutral. Secondly, the system should not be too powerful. The system can be used as an auxiliary. For example, making energy cubes through the system. I believe you can write well. Come on, author. You can still watch it. However, author, your data will not be good at the moment. Then, if you change the introduction, it will look stupid. I think it is okay. Tong Tao's help is too invincible. Later, you can write that you go to Chang Xin Forest to obtain the power of Chang Xin. After all, if you don't plan to write about Lucario, in fact, I don't think the bond of Wave Guide is that big, so I think the author needs to change it. Then, try not to write about the help of the system. There are not many points to see, and there are many people to criticize. After all, if you write the system so awesome, you might as well just go straight to the mythical beast. Then, the lottery and the mythical beast can also be dumb. In the past, I felt that this system felt like forcing you to become stronger. I think your writing method is a bit like Teacher Lu. It is better to just write a fruit vending machine. I think it is better. It can be warm and interesting, and the plot can be advanced. Come on, author. If, according to my opinion, you may need to revise the previous content, and then set up the subsequent outline, it is best to lay a good foundation. You haven't written too many 100,000 words yet and make small changes to make the plot reasonable. It is not difficult. Come on, author.

The story has some twists and turns, and the protagonist's behavior is also weak and bearish. Coupled with the author's confusing operation, it is impossible to sink into it.

Author, do you want to write something different? But the result is not good. It is better to write according to the template of the young master of the Zivucci family. Alas, it is too expensive.

The system setting is just thief Kun. It's disgusting. Leave Metagross alone and don't want it. Go get the Fire Chicken

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Come on, I hope you won't be like other authors who stop writing in the middle of writing. Even if you don't write, please tell me why. Thanks

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I've seen a little bit so far, but it's pretty good and not toxic.

It's good to watch, I'm looking forward to the plot behind it [note][note]

It looks good, please keep writing.

The author's last book was great