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Not bad, but don't you want to take anything from Kirishima? You don't have to follow the rhythm of the original work all the time. Also, is there a female protagonist? Single or multiple? I recommend it more. After all, it's a cosmic background and there are so many girls. It won't work until the end of the writing. It's very different from the original work. You have to know that you are writing fan fiction. There is no point in writing like this. It's better to read the original work when you write like this. People who read fan fiction may not have read the original novel, you understand? Fan fiction should have some fun, conflict, change, etc. It's been boring since Kirishima. I wanted to see if there were any changes later. Withdrawal, not my type

To be honest, it's good, good, come on, don't stop [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly]

Yes, it's much better than Tomato's other Devouring films. The character descriptions are outstanding, and there's no systematic way to steal the protagonist's opportunity and women every second. Make some suggestions: 1. Don't get too close to the main plot and protagonist, otherwise the pace will be too fast and the content you can write will be almost the same as the animation, which will reduce your interest in watching. 2. Create more original content of your own. After all, there are some time periods in the middle that jump. You can take advantage of it and write about opportunities you may encounter or what the strong left behind. In short, open your mind and use your imagination (refer to other novels or animations) 3. The main plot can be expanded appropriately, changed appropriately, or added people or objects. For example, a golden horn appears, but there was a more powerful one hidden a long time ago for the protagonist to conquer. 4. You can also add some characters and background appropriately to give the protagonist a support and relationship description. 5. In short, writing original content of novels is the most important, and it is more attractive to read. You can set up a book club group, where everyone can discuss or make suggestions and start brainstorming [snickering] [smirking] I hope the quality of this novel can be maintained until the end.

It's beautiful. I'll buy more books like this.

Come on, I've read a lot of fics and this one is really good.

It's a very good book. Different from the other devouring books in the previous ratings, the plot is too cliche, and it also steals the opportunity of the protagonist. In fact, many readers still hate the opportunity of stealing the protagonist. The author's writing is very good. I hope it can keep it up.

All the good books are gone. Where is the author reading now?

Why has this book been taken off the shelves?

Who is the heroine? Approximately which chapter does it appear?

Wuhu, it's nice to look at, it's nice to see it take off.

The writing is quite good, why has it been removed from the shelves?

Such a good book, why has it been taken off the shelves?

It's the best among the Tomato Devouring fanfics, not bad.

Why has it been removed from the shelves?,, There have been very few fanfics of Swallowing Starry Sky, but the ones that are about the same have been removed from the shelves again.

Good job, author, keep up the good work [laughing]

Not bad, not bad, reasonable, the author, cheers, cheers [smile][smile][smile][smile][love][love][love][love]

Yes, this book written by the author is the best one in the Swallowing Starry Sky series that I have read. The protagonist's strength does not improve that quickly. There won't be any weird benefits. And it's not sentimental either. The most important thing is to unify the earth. [Shy] And it's still China. I love so much.

170,000 Authors. I'm waiting for your update. Who can read your three updates a day? The writing is very good, unlike some novels that just grab the chance to be the protagonist of the original work. It must be given a five-star rating! ! !

Come on, this is so exciting. Oh my God, I also want such an awesome sworn brother. The author will give me more updates.

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Woohoo, it's a very good book. I'm still waiting to read the follow-up. But the author didn't finish it and the book was removed from the shelves.

It's beautiful, but it's a pity it was removed from the shelves.

I still like to watch The Peak of Devouring Stars. Come on, I'm waiting for the update. If that doesn't work, rewrite a book about the stars. I hope the author can reply to me.

Who is the heroine? ? It's been dozens of chapters and it still hasn't appeared.

It didn't meet my expectations, but I am a fan of the book I like, so I encourage you.

I just finished reading it this afternoon, and now I've posted four more chapters

What a pity! It's hard to find good-looking fans of Swallowing Starry Sky

666 Looks good, when will the heroine be released?

Although the language in this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, with rich and true emotions, making it enjoyable to read. The author writes well👍, come on💪, work harder💪, and update more

It's okay, come on, keep an eye on you.