Star Dome Railway, the Plot Collapsed Again?

The identity of the protagonist🈶YiDianDianPoison

It's so beautiful, but no one is looking at it, so I have to push it up for him. Big cheers for the author, it's super cool.

The author, here is the first step. I saw that this book has more than 100,000 words. There is no sign of the end of the book. I will say it based on the current level. First of all, the problem in the early stage is not big. Sometimes there are some sudden situations. The preface does not match the follower. But in the middle stage, the problem has obviously improved. The middle stage is also the most enjoyable time for me to read. The plot is also very good, but in the later stage, Ningbei's strength has skyrocketed. At that time, the combat power, plot, and logic began to collapse, which made the senses in the later period become a bit bad, especially the desire to read. There was no excitement in the middle period, only mediocrity. Currently, I saw the battle scenes written by the author in the latest chapter were not as good as in the early stage. The middle period was more of a crushing posture, but the author did not grasp this crushing posture well, so it did not feel as exciting as other cool articles, but was boring and all kinds of other things. The plot is a bit draggy and the main plot is not promoted well. This may be the reason why the author did not master his own rhythm and the plot collapsed a bit. So here are some suggestions for the author, which is to speed up the progress of the main plot to get back to the previous state. As for the activities in the game, you can intersperse the activities in the main plot when the main plot is promoted. It is like playing a game with a stuck level. You need to upgrade your liver activities so that you can practice the activities and the main plot. It won't ruin the rhythm too much so that the reading won't be too bad. Also, the protagonist's combat power has collapsed a bit now. I don't want to reduce the protagonist's strength, but I can write more fighting scenes instead of the current "bang" sound. The battle ends and the protagonist wins. It will be very annoying to read too much.òᆺóThe above are my own opinions. I hope it can help the author, and I hope the author can bring better works. @The wind blew through the southwest corner

Although there are many personal items, OOC, and no inventory at all, it suits my taste.

Very good, the content is funny, the character is not stable and collapsed After rewatching it, I realized why I quit. It was full of poisonous points. It's okay to be funny, but the protagonist was too awkward when talking about his love. He said that kind of lines, which was similar to the lines I used to watch in anime when I was a child. It was so embarrassing that I wanted to quit. It's better to write less about the friendship between friends. It made me uncomfortable to death. Those places where you play tricks are quite fun. I feel embarrassed to death when talking about "let's go on a date together, friends," etc., I don't understand. Why is the relationship between the protagonist and his companions so awkward to write? Well, it's okay for the protagonist to make jokes, but don't put too much emphasis on emotional lines. For example, what you wrote is like a line in the anime you watched when you were a child, partners, I will not give up on you. This makes me feel awkward

It can be said that it is more funny at the moment, and it can be regarded as commendable. There are many flaws, but this is a tomato🍅. It would be better if the author can add more.

It's so funny that no one has given him five stars yet.

Very well written. But I still want to say that the destiny in the game has nothing to do with the destiny in the game world. For example, Jing Yuanyuan, he is a hunting commander, but in the game it is an intellectual destiny. Clara is an ordinary person with no power, but her destiny is ruined.

I think it's good, it's so much fun

@ In the southwest corner of the dark wind, the author Ningbei is not the same, right! ! !

What does this book say? I felt very confused at first, and then I felt like I had seen something in my hand. I would call it cyberpunk.

Support newcomers and wait for the book to become popular

When do we have to eat in Laobei? [Laughing evilly] [laughing evilly] Author, hurry up and open your harem teeth [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly]

I laughed so hard hahahaha, it's so interesting, so good-looking, the plot, the characters, the memes, it's awesome, okay?

How to say it? Overall, it's pretty good. It feels like finding your childhood in fan fiction. The protagonist is like the protagonist in the cartoons I watched when I was a child, from weak to strong, from immature to mature. Personally I feel it's okay.

I can only say it's not bad [face covering] [OK] It's very good. I love watching it. The protagonist is a little blue girl. But I can't understand the feelings the protagonist has towards the three Honkai Impact characters. I just had a lot of feelings in my heart when I played it. What did the protagonist say? It's like actually getting to know the characters.

Some of the funny parts are still not grasped well.

After reading it for so long, I found a question. Author, you don't know how to engage in Yingying and Qianjie CP. @ Southwest Corner, I have smoked Yinfeng. Please answer. Thank you. Mainly in the beginning, he hugged Sakura, and there was also a plot where he teased the protagonist about liking Sakura. Although it was just a joke, I think even if he is not the heroine, he would not have his CP. Then the part where Sakura hugs the protagonist in Qianjie burned the lottery. When I first watched it, I didn't see anything and thought it was just a comrade or something. But I recently read a comment saying that Sakurajie's CP, so I'm asking if it's really CP. @ Southwest Corner The author is asking for answers. I'm a little afraid to watch it.

Is there a female protagonist? @The wind blew through the southwest corner

Good-looking, love to watch, watch more

I went crazy watching it😃😃

Did the author change later?

I was embarrassed in the front and bumped in the back, so I came here for the tokusatsu role here.

It's quite funny after losing the brain

Everyone's story deserves respect [Chigua]

The front is a little bit poisonous, but fortunately I am Shennong

Well, come on, author, this is okay, okay, okay

We found a small amount of fiction content among a large number of memes

It felt very interesting. I almost got caught by my boss when I laughed out loud while fishing at work.

Okay, if nothing else, it's really a lot of fun [laughs evilly]