Transformation: Raising a Young Lady Husband Sees Something Wrong with Me

I hope the author will stick to it, and don't stop updating twice a day if the requirements are not high. [Shy] This book shows the author's progress. The first volume of the Immortal Realm chapter is a bit abrupt and discouraging, which is not suitable for writing in Tomato. The beginning of the second volume looks a bit like a pseudo-saint. It must be that the author has read a lot of Nissei's Bianwen, and the author has lost his own ideas. By the fourth volume, it really has its own style, and the story plot is getting more and more interesting. To put it simply, it is a love story between a tsundere and an idiot and an innocent boy. It looks good. If you like it, write it quickly! ! ! Why not update twice a day? ! !

I really like this novel, the plot and plot are well connected. It's just that I haven't played galgame very much, so I didn't understand some parts, so I skipped it. Anyway, I read it quickly, so update soon! ! It's not enough. The author will update it quickly. I finished it after a few days [crying]

There's not much to say, it's great, I love it, I'm giving it a gift, bro, keep updating, keep at it, there will be more people [Working on it] [Working on it] [Working on it] [Working on it]

Mader, the last time I saw a story about changing marriages with such smooth writing, a little bit of depth, smooth and interesting plot and non-toxic plot was almost 4 years ago. Author, if you cut it off or just unfinish it, I really won't let you go. The male and female protagonists also have a good CP feel. You know how to write🤤

The multiple writing perspectives of Japanese-style light novels are a matter of opinion, so I won't comment too much. I have read some Japanese light novels and I think I accepted them well. The motivations and logic of the protagonist in the early stage are a bit far-fetched, but they will be supplemented later. The author is too obsessed with expressing the gameplay, resulting in the plot being too dependent on the settings and not complementing each other as it should. I guess the author also wants to make it unique, but after all, this is a novel and not a real game. I evaluate this from the perspective of a reader. The story is still very good, telling the growth and redemption of the protagonist. As for the brain-burning mentioned by the author, it is actually due to the complexity caused by the author's frequent switching of perspectives, and the reason why the progress bar is too fast in the later stage. If you have experience in watching multi-line narrative works, you can basically figure it out as long as you remember the sister line and the future line. The writing was too hasty in the later stages. Many storylines and settings were not fully developed, and many foreshadowings were not taken back and their whereabouts were stated. It felt like a hasty ending. I believe it would be better if the length could be increased.

Although I think it is very interesting, I still want to ask a weak question - can I keep books?

After a blind guess, the protagonist will pull the strings and get himself involved [laughing][laughing]

Give me five stars to show my respect. For some reason, I felt a little uncomfortable with this book. I always felt uncomfortable somewhere, but I couldn't tell where it was. I guess I couldn't stand it anymore, so that's it.

In fact, it is a good book, and the story is very interesting, but as a novel, although I understand your feeling of wanting to write a galgame, the excessive repetition will inevitably make people upset and irritating, and the consequences will be obvious, and the results will be poor. If this story can be written as a serious novel, I believe that the score will not be bad, and it will not be only 7.9 Points. Can you do some sweet extras? !

Not bad, really good, and the author-chan, let's open a modifier and secretly make the ending better. If you dare to mess up the ending... We can only kill you!

The disadvantage is that the plot in the later volumes is too fast and will be finished after just a hundred chapters. In fact, there are still many things to write about, such as writing more about daily life and slower emotional lines; and the plots of other female protagonists (the five female protagonists are all well portrayed); and a lot of content such as the battle between Tao and demons, the demon clan, the fairy world, etc. That can be written as the main plot have been almost skipped. But the flaws are not concealed. I think this book's status in Tomato is equivalent to the God of Tomato Marriage. Why can't I give ten stars? [Pout] Advantage 1, galgame's CG perspective is very interesting Advantage 2: The logic of the whole book is normal, the writing is fluent, and occasionally even a few golden sentences are skipped Advantage three: the plot is fascinating and has well-completed foreshadowing, although it is a bit rushed in the later stages. Advantage 4: The emotional line is well written, there is no abrupt inflection, nor is it just hs. Advantage 5: The characters have distinct personalities and the portrayal of the heroine is really, really, really good.

Personally like it! I even listened to this book until midnight for several days before falling asleep... The only drawback is that the updates are too slow! The author has put in a lot of effort! [Cultivation of Immortality + No System + Change of Marriage (Micro) + Identity + Savior + Male Protagonist's Early-stage Straightforward and Warm Man + Female Protagonist Little Angel] This book is a very novel attempt, and the author is able to master this writing method very well. There is no need to worry about the quality at all. Like [like] The routine of the female protagonist saving the male protagonist is very common, but not many can write this routine well. Coincidentally, this book is one of them, with good reviews [like] I highly recommend readers and friends to embrace this book and give it a few free gifts. Believe me, it will definitely be amazing [Like] I admit that I wrote so many words above to keep up with the word count, but the above praises are all true. In short, for those who like this type of novel, this is definitely a work that has been buried under the ratings! Finally, let me say it again, the rating of 🍅 is not the only criterion to measure the quality of the work. More exciting things need to be explored by yourself. Young man, let's take actionヾ(❀╹◡╹)ﾉﾞ❀~

Not bad, but it feels a bit confusing when you read it without thinking. Come on, author.

Great book! What a great book!

Come on, author, I'm optimistic about you [laughing evilly]

I wish you in the new year: Happy New Year, lots of money, all the best, successful career, happiness, happiness, happiness, Pepsi-Cola, good luck, good things, good fortune, longevity and health, health and beauty, happy family, great achievements, a blockbuster, a bright future (a bright future, a promising future), and learning to take it to the next level.

Really, this is one of the best books about changing marriages. It is one of my favorite books about changing marriages.

The plot ends with a knife! Still sugar! [Laughing awkwardly]?

I like this very much and hope the author will continue to do more₍˄·͈༝·͈˄*₎◞ ̑̑ At this stage, we won't finish all 300,000 words, right? (*´I`*)

It's really beautiful, but I've never played galgame before, so it feels a bit awkward – so if you want to play it, do you have any recommendations?

Not bad, come on, come on

I hope the ending will be smooth

Come on, write it, it looks good! !!

9.6 It feels very similar to "The False Saint", both in and out of nooks and crannies, with a protagonist who has low self-esteem and a narrative ending. But if I have to say, this book has a better look and feel than The Fake Saint. Firstly, the writing style of the online version is far better than the translation, and The Fake is really short. Secondly, The Fake has many immature points () 25.12.14 FBBR

It's good to watch. If this plot continues, there will definitely be a twisted plot later. My palms are already starting to itch.

The culture is so low that I don't know how to describe it, but it's very good-looking. [Like] The protagonist is very cute. Also, this book is a multi-line narrative, half third person and half first person, and there are also small interactions. Very good [Like] After reading it, I immediately felt very empty, and I was short of another good book. [Petrified]

This type is quite nice [Blowing Kiss] I hope the author doesn't use eunuchs [Please update]

The writing is very good. It has the perspective of the female protagonist and the male protagonist, and readers participate in branch option voting. It does feel like a galgame, but I suggest the author to do something similar in the future. After voting, add the options you posted to the author in the article, at least so that later readers will not be confused "What option, where is the option, what are the other options?". Other than that, this is a very good work [adoration][adoration][adoration]

The fortieth book review, Sofa. It's very interesting and the writing is good. It's just the second time I've read this format of retelling other content. I haven't gotten used to it after reading it for two days. In short, as long as there are no interruptions, too long interruptions, casual fooling of readers, sudden changes in writing, etc., I will not abandon the book. (Let me tell the author the truth. I have abandoned nearly twenty books in the past two months because of these things. I hope the author will update normally. Five stars.)

It feels like a knife. Come on, author.