(No System, and not invincible. No cultivation or leveling up, just a fast-paced plot. A passionate urban story in the "chasing your husband to the crematorium" series. You'll need to use your head a little.)
Zheng Lingyun is nineteen. He has a younger sister and a house, and both his parents are dead.
Because of a deceased friend's will, he has kept looking after his childhood sweetheart, who's a year younger than him.
What? You're telling me Jiang Xuechu has entered her rebellious phase?
What? You want to kick me off the team, too?
Wait, can't you tell the difference between an outsider and family?
Who else out there would treat you this well?
What? Since Jiang Xuechu is still the school belle, she's got plenty of guys after her, and you're asking me to stop clinging to her and bothering her?!
Oh, please. If it weren't for Aunt Jiang's dying request, I would've stopped looking after her ages ago.
Stay away from me, you useless pretty face. I'd rather watch beefy guys wrestle than waste my time taking care of a woman like you!
The writing style is okay, the reading and feeling is very comfortable, the writing is fluent, and the three views are very correct. As for the giant baby Qingmei, it seems unlikely that she will be a perfect female supporting role.
After seeing everyone's feedback (even the positive ones said I was bad at the front), there will probably be a major revision in the future. So can anyone hxd tell me, will there be any impact on revising the book during the debut?
Thumbs up to the author. I came here from the pit next door. The author's writing is superb. Take your time and you will become a god sooner or later.
Come on, support you, don't care about other people's opinions, some people can't find a sense of existence in reality, and want all kinds of fun in the virtual world. Follow your own ideas. You can only refer to readers' comments. People's opinions are different. If you change them according to readers, it will only become nondescript in the end.
After watching the pursuit of the second senior brother, it was really good to watch. Except for the plot being a bit fast and the lines being a bit awkward, there was basically nothing wrong with it. Surprisingly fascinating article.
Author, I am optimistic about you, come on
I like the characters very much, and the plot is also well written. Although you can probably guess the rest of the story from some foreshadowing, the flaws are not hidden, the writing is smooth, and it feels like a light novel at the moment. The character shown in the first hundred photos of the male protagonist also has some intersections with the supporting characters. He is a cannon fodder meal replacement in a TV series I have watched. The only meal replacement I found. Unfortunately, the replacement was no longer included, and I didn't like the emotional line very much. It's a pity that I couldn't see it until the end. I give five stars to encourage the author💕 Moreover, the male protagonist is kind (I don't want to use the word "Madonna" to define the male protagonist. Madonna was originally a complimentary word, but then it changed its meaning. As the author said, the male protagonist has the ability to support his own kindness, which is different from those online definitions of Madonna (who has no ability and calls others to save people. I personally don't think it is called "Madonna"). Nowadays, novels write protagonists and plots, and many like to write egoistic protagonists. Just like what I saw in a topic, "Killing innocent people is regarded as cool, and being wolf-hearted and dog-eating is regarded as cool." No matter what the reality is, in novels, I personally yearn for truth, goodness and beauty, so I prefer the kind of righteous senior brother who is glorious and glorious, who takes helping the world as his own responsibility, and who takes benevolence and righteousness as the road. This protagonist has that feeling) I hope the author can continue to write such a male protagonist [currently in progress] Talking about the heroine, I actually came in from the husband-chasing crematorium. When I first watched it, I thought Jiang would be the heroine (Jiang in the early stages of PS was indeed a bit strange, but because I thought she was the heroine, I looked at her with a filter), but I didn't expect it to be Helian (now that I think about it, it was Helian who was chosen by the author in the outline, so there was no way she could be the heroine when I wrote Jiang at the beginning), but what I saw was that... The original wife made the mistress feel superior (a metaphor, which may not be appropriate), so she accepted her incompetence and gave up (I personally like tsundere-type heroines) Originally, the meal replacement I was looking for was that the heroine was a pampered young lady (Jiang is a bit arrogant and ignorant, which is more or less the same. When I see the weird things, I can comfort myself and be weird in the plot🤦) and the male protagonist is the kind of person who is very stable, has no way to deal with the heroine, and loves the heroine silently (Xiao Zhengguo and Yu Xiaowan in The Jingzhe, but there are very few meal replacements with the same person) (Zheng gave me that feeling, and the author also wrote it very well)
Worth looking forward to
You can do your best, author.
The "adopted daughter" and her best friend in the previous part made many people unhappy and probably would have discouraged the impatient ones. It would have been nice if they were not mentioned in the second part (it can be regarded as a victory of perseverance).