Genshin Impact: Yae Miko and Ei? I've Already Won Them Over!

It would be bad if there was no harem

If my brother has such an attitude, it would be better not to update it at all. It would appear that I am being unreasonable and making trouble... That's all. My brother is usually so free and easy, but it's just a pain for my sister-in-law. I should be satisfied with one chapter in a few days, lest my brother say that I am a little bit angry again.

It's not bad, keep it up. To be honest, your book needs to be refined in other directions. There are still many ways to write fan fiction. Being too restrictive will reduce the beauty, but you can jump out appropriately. To be honest, I have read quite a lot of Genshin Impact fan fiction, but I have been looking to marry Ellie. Alice's text, but it's a pity that I only found two of them, which is a pity (Alice is my personal favorite [shy], don't mind, wouldn't it be nice to turn Keli into a biological daughter? Isn't there really a beast who has thoughts about Keli [awkward laugh] If so, then it's really not about martial ethics)

It's quite normal. For this protagonist, some things should not be too obvious, otherwise it is easy to be blocked. You can write a little bit funny, but don't be too funny, otherwise it will not be true.

I keep talking about the plot, what about it?

In my personal opinion, if you remove the "ah" in the narration, it will feel better when listening to the book. Otherwise, it will be very strange. The tone of a declarative sentence rises inexplicably. Of course, it may be my personal reason, but the book is still good [full]

There is too little written now, so I need to keep my mentality stable. I think the author's mentality is not very good. Anyway, keep working hard. I hope it won't stop updating. The writing is okay, but the original plot is maintained. There may be a point in not making changes. There is also a protagonist who is clearly said to be powerful, but it is hard to see where he is strong.

I can read it, the writing is okay, generally better

Just help the author directly. How can such a beautiful book be buried under @each other's wings?

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