The Outcast: Opening a Martial Arts School on Mount Longhu, Shocking the Old Celestial Master

Come on, write. There were 11 updates a day before. Why are there two updates a day now? Come on✊, don't be a mess, don't be a eunuch.

Overall, it's good, but the main character has no emotional line? The rules of Internet writing are: if you don't accept it, don't be ambiguous; if you accept it, don't give it away. The article describes at large lengths how sexy and beautiful the female disciples are, and how intimate and ambiguous they are with the protagonist. As a result, not a single one of the more than 50 chapters has been confiscated, which is very disappointing. If there is no female protagonist in the game, please write it clearly in advance. If you don't accept a female protagonist, don't create so many ambiguous scenes.

At present, it seems that I can only say that the idea is okay, but the routine is cliché. There is absolutely no need to have a senior brother. The main characters are so outrageous. If you really write it according to the happy content, you can just go out and beat up everyone who doesn't like it. Don't talk about identity issues. Even if you don't like it, just kill one person. But I guess the rest of it will probably be a cliche plot again, so I can only say I wish you better, and I'm leaving.

Accepting female apprentices as harem and male apprentices as thugs [Thoughts]

This book is good and very interesting. Why are there so many updates? There are more than 300 people, but how many have commented? Less than one-thirtieth are reviewed, and even fewer are chapter reviews.

The writing is okay, but you need to analyze your rank clearly. 10,000 Times critical hit, this is all you can explode. How can you beat the Celestial Master with more than ten years of skill? This doesn't work. You need to modify it.

OK! Keep up the good work!

To be honest, the male protagonist is a bit pretentious. If he doesn't care about the female protagonist so much, it would be fair and reasonable to just make a male and female apprentice, or write a few male supporting characters and send the female protagonist away. They are all singles anyway, so why not give the apprentices a happy life?

I can't stand it when I see a fictional senior brother in vest. Isn't it interesting to hide his head and hide his tail? I don't ask you to be like the old master, but you have to ignite it. Sure enough, there is a reason why it is called the old man's hot-blooded fan. Even the humanities can't be ignited.

The author is great, 24 hours a day, you spend one hour eating, drinking, sleeping, and five hours. There are still 18 hours left to code and update quickly, 😄😄[Working on the manuscript][Working on the manuscript][Working on the manuscript]