A new work is released, focusing on a weak heroine who lost her mother when she was young. Her father married a new love and almost died. Her life fell into the abyss and she was unwilling to give up. She hid her obsession to save herself. When she was young, she unexpectedly performed a kind act and her lover stayed with her for the rest of her life. Welcome to Tomato Novel to read my work. I hope you like it. Your attention is the motivation for my writing. I will try my best to tell every story!
Reader comments
Two stars for your hard work...
Overall, there are no events happening, and there is no sense of refreshment for the readers, nor is there any sense of expectation. All the descriptions are about trivial matters in life. Generally, no one likes to read about trivial matters in life. After all, people outside experience these trivial matters every day, right?
What the author writes is very much like a composition or a diary, and there is no sense of immersion. I hope the author can make more progress and improve.
The paragraph is also too lengthy, so I recommend breaking it up into paragraphs.
If you write too detailed a description of a character's appearance, the reader will not be able to remember it. On the contrary, if you describe a person's characteristics and temperament, it will be easier to remember that person.
Two stars for your hard work... Overall, there are no events happening, and there is no sense of refreshment for the readers, nor is there any sense of expectation. All the descriptions are about trivial matters in life. Generally, no one likes to read about trivial matters in life. After all, people outside experience these trivial matters every day, right? What the author writes is very much like a composition or a diary, and there is no sense of immersion. I hope the author can make more progress and improve. The paragraph is also too lengthy, so I recommend breaking it up into paragraphs. If you write too detailed a description of a character's appearance, the reader will not be able to remember it. On the contrary, if you describe a person's characteristics and temperament, it will be easier to remember that person.