I Am Sick, the Name of the Disease, Longevity

It can be seen in Tomato 1. The longevity essay lacks the unique sense of vicissitudes. This article is a daily essay that intersects with immortality. 2. The writing skills need to be improved, and many scenes are too immature. 3. There is not much description between the orthodox traditions. The forces and world views of each party are revealed along the way with the protagonist. 4. The characters are not realistic and difficult to resonate with. 5. The author can look more at Yu Hua and improve the way he writes the knife. By contrasting the heartwarming scenes with the helpless scenes, he highlights the lack of despair and makes him feel a little more warm. (Personal feelings) It is written that one state protects mortals, while other states do not. This comparison is OK, but the description of other states is too little and does not highlight the uniqueness and greatness of Daozhou, which makes this comparison a bit tasteless. The aliens in the world of immortality are because they are different from other states. It is too straightforward to write directly. The pace obviously accelerated after the protagonist's second great sleep in Daozhou. This may be to highlight the running out of time in the world and thereby highlight the despair. However, this wave of accelerated pace makes the continuous sense of vicissitudes of life in Changshengwen out of touch. The emotional experience of the characters is too ideal, it's a novel, it's not a big problem After more than 100 chapters, it may be because the protagonist has few people with eyesight and almost no wisdom points. There will be problems later. Please pay attention. Generally speaking, it is a combination of daily sweet stories and immortality stories. I don't know if it is a debut novel, but it is a bit neither good nor good. The number of chapters is so small that I can't tell that there will be more. I look forward to the follow-up. (You can put some pictures appropriately, such as tide Tong's feet, Yuan Yao's face, etc., To attract readers. It's just a suggestion. It's definitely not what I want to see [shy] [shy] [smile])

Write well, I don't want to see only regrets in the end. The author can write about the protagonists and stimulate the readers. Now that they are immortal, they will be strong enough to reverse the entire time and space, and reverse all regrets like Emperor Huang Tian. They can reverse the long river of time in reverse order and forcefully enter other time and space to cause trouble. This is both passionate and can write a lot of things. Personally, I prefer you to turn time and space, you are so strong that you can reverse everything, but it still seems like yesterday. This feeling is very comfortable. Happy New Year to the author. I like the layout of Lala's novel world and Chen Dong's style very much, so I can learn from it. Big cheers for the author

The author wrote too quickly. I feel like it could be written in more detail. There are some holes that haven't been filled in yet. It would be nice if the relationship with the heroine could be written in more detail. The article is very well written, I recommend and support it! Five-star praise! [Laugh][Like][Like][Like][Love][Like][Like][Like]

It feels like the main plot is coming to an end. Although I don't care much about the plot, it's not bad [eat melon]. The main thing is this system (barrel tying). I really like it and it's novel. Later, when it was shown that barrel tying is not a system, the screen came up immediately. The other female protagonists and supporting characters are also good, but I hope to give tide Tong a good ending.

The content of this book is really well written [like] [heartfelt]. Unlike other longevity articles I have read, this book is more like a simple dialogue. Unlike other longevity articles, the protagonist has a very clear pursuit of cultivation. The protagonist of this book only cares about the land in his heart and the important people in him. Moreover, the characters in this book are very profound, and even the supporting characters have very three-dimensional images. He Mo, Xia Yu, Dong Ling, Qi Yao, etc. All have their own yearnings and pursuits. (I won't spoil the specific plot for now, it's very interesting to read [laughing evilly]) It's worth mentioning that this book is worth reading. Although there are some small knives in the front, it is filled in at the end, leaving few regrets. Thank you very much @Silingmu. Thank you very much for the extras you wrote. It basically made up for the regrets I had while reading the book.

It's very good, but it's too short. I feel like there are still a lot of things that haven't been written. After reading it, I felt a bit lost and confused [facepalm], and I hope the author will continue to work hard, and it's best to make a 2 that follows the plot of this one, because it's so good, I just gave it an emo after reading it in the past two days [Petrochemical] [Like] Please author, please follow the plot of this one and write a second one [please update][cry][grass has been planted]

It's great. It's different from other longevity articles. It doesn't focus on cultivation and fighting. Instead, it focuses on the sophistication between people. The purpose of the protagonist becoming stronger is not for revenge or invincibility, but just to go home. She's very capable in terms of emotions. It would not be an exaggeration to give a hundred stars in this regard. I hope that this quality can continue to be maintained in the future. Although I also hope to speed up updates, if you have to, don't give up quality for speed. [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart][Send heart] When Uncle Fang Si passed away, I was really close... That paragraph was really great, especially "That guy said he would definitely come, but he didn't even tell me..." As soon as this sentence came out, I almost couldn't hold back [crying]

Passed over, sad, sad (protagonist) The more I watch, the more I love watching, and I still want to watch (me) More and more updates, gradually slower, not enough to watch (Author) Q: What is dissatisfying about this book? Answer: The update is too slow, the article is too short, and it is not bearable to read [OK]

I read the commentary from Chang Sheng Manga, it's pretty good.

It is a very interesting book, the plot and character settings are also very interesting, and the logic is there. At the beginning, some parts of the writing felt a little flawed, and the monologues in some places were inappropriate. But it's harmless. The relationship between the male and female protagonists is also well grasped, and it won't be too sweet for now. Of course, I personally don't like the two female protagonists very much, but I have to say that the author's emotional control is pretty good. Another point is that there are a lot of knives. Of course, good immortality essays rely on knives, but to be honest, I feel that the author's knife is not sharp enough. Sometimes he cuts it once, and then does not write in depth, just skips it quickly. Sometimes he cuts it once, and then pulls out the knife and directly sutures the wound (simply put, it means not using the knife, but after a few strokes, or not using the knife, it will not take long to revive). To be honest, it is not painful enough [eat melon] [eat melon] [eat melon] And to be honest, the protagonist is set to be a genius, but his physique is a bit incompetent. Fortunately, it is basically only the protagonist's incompetence, which actually doesn't have much impact. But writing this way, the current combat power ceiling feels not enough for the protagonist to play, and the improvement is too fast. Also, I felt that Muzi was a little anxious later on, and the pace felt a little faster. I don't know if it was my imagination. But it's really good to watch and quite impressive. I stayed up all night watching 3/4 of it. It's almost 8 o'clock in the morning and I'm just getting ready to go to bed. I finally read the latest chapter. For me, the main problem is the two female protagonists. After the encounter, the protagonist and Xitong's intimate behavior was hard for me to watch. It felt like a cuckold. Anyway, I just skipped this plot. I still can't accept the setting of two heroines. Everything else is written very well.

After watching it, I would classify it as a fairy tale + romance + disaster movie. The plot is smooth and smooth, and the logic is smooth, but it is a bit confusing in some places. Although the character creation is relatively simple, it is not broken. Because some parts are written in a more streamlined manner, my personal opinion is around 8 points. However, because there will inevitably be mishaps in the longevity novel, the overall evaluation can be given to 9 points, rounded to 5 stars.

Leisurely with a touch of knife, knife with sweetness, sweet but not greasy

It must be praised, it broke my impression of having read the Immortal Essay before. Moreover, the author has a very good attitude. If you comment, you will praise it, if you make mistakes, you will correct them, and if you have doubts, you will reply. Such a good author makes me cry to death [cry] [admiration]

The fact that I could read it all without ending is proof that this is a good novel. The characters are well-developed, and the cute and cute system (Xitong) is my favorite. The writing is also very good, and it can attract readers' interest in reading, but it is a bit lacking. It only took me two days to finish reading this novel. I have read many novels but rarely write book reviews, but I really like the lively, cute and kind-hearted Muzi so much that I must give it a five-star review.

It's a really good book. It's a little different from others. I feel that the descriptions in this book are more delicate and the protagonist's image is also very prominent. There is nothing like other books where you fall in love with the protagonist when you see the protagonist. It's worth reading carefully [laughs][laughs] But I just have a little question for the author Why does the protagonist take pictures of a mountain every time he breaks through? It feels like all the nearby mountains will be taken away [face covering] [face covering] Finally, please give the author a big boost (❁´◡`❁)*✲ﾟ*!

The writing is average and the plot is okay. It is a rare masterpiece on Tomato. However, the world view is not grand enough and some of the emotional descriptions are still a little green. Overall, it is okay. Come on!

It's not an assembly line, it's not popular, it's not AI. Although it has some common settings, it is written with great care and detail. I like it very much, and it looks great! ! I don't like dual heroines at first, but I can accept this book. It's warm and refreshing, and the pace is good. It's very beautiful! It's been a long time since I read a book so seriously!

The article depicts three-dimensional characters. It is very interesting. I finished it in three days. There is a paragraph in the middle that is a bit repetitive and redundant. But it doesn't matter. The world view of the article. However, the protagonist's rescue is always too coincidental and a bit repetitive. The rest is very good. What impressed me the most is the portrayal of Liu Yuan and Yu. It is really expressive and clever. There is no road through the world and there are real immortals outside the realm. The unique system makes it unforgettable for readers. The design of various catastrophes is very clever and puts readers at risk. However, the common problem of longevity literature is that the timeline is too fast, which is the same as many immortal literature. This article has a different feeling. It's very good. I hope to create more excellent works [Love]

Little sweetness and little knives gradually accumulate, becoming sweeter and sweeter, and knives more and more sharply. Time is passing slowly, and Xunnan is feeling helpless. A very refreshing novel, worthy of a female author, very smooth.

Looks good, come on! Also, the author is very cute [laughs evilly]

It is not as complicated as some novels about cultivating immortals, where you only need to write dozens or even hundreds of chapters just to introduce the characters and the plot. Haokan (The knife is really cruel, just do it, emo has been around for a long time)

It's great. Some people say that its positioning is not bad, but I think it is very good. First of all, the emotions are very delicate, and then despair and hope are also described very wonderfully. I can give it five stars. Then some people say that the grand scenes are not well written, but I think it is completely enough, because this book is mainly about feelings.

As a work by a new author, this work can be said to be quite amazing. This work contains a large part of the author's own thoughts, which is relatively new among longevity essays (ง •̀_•́)ง Keep up the good work No time keeping when offline⊙▽⊙

This book has a grand world view and is not poisonous. It is very good. It is one of the outstanding ones among the Tomato longevity novels. I hope it does not become a eunuch.

I have read half of it (more than 130 chapters), and the overall emotional line is very good. I have a few problems. The first is that the combat power system is a little vague. This may be the reason why I haven't finished it yet. The second is that the male protagonist is a bit too humble in some parts of the relationship with the system. It is no longer normal respect. It is already humble, but there is not much plot. Fortunately, the third time is when the male protagonist wakes up from his third slumber. He clearly knows the location of his second slumber and it only takes a long time to return to his sister, but the male protagonist chooses not to post a newspaper there to find Nancheng. This is a bit speechless. If his childhood sweetheart is not strong enough, he will die as a coward. It is estimated that the relatives he will meet later will never be found again after sleeping. Overall, it's very interesting. The author's descriptions are quite daily and heartwarming. The writing style is okay. I'd rate it around 9 points.

The life of cultivating immortals is dull and tender, and the eternal life is long, helpless and gloomy, but there is always the "system" to accompany you, and there is always Qingmei to pursue. Sadness blends into peaceful words, just like the joys and sorrows of life intertwined. The first article I read is generally a peaceful yet disturbing longevity article. I highly recommend it.

It's a female-channeled fantasy novel, but it's quite interesting and can be read and played. The details of the plot are not worthy of deep recommendation, and the emotional line is also strange. Just getting off the crowded seats, the most unforgettable thing for me here is Luozong. Although some people may think it is a poisonous spot, this virtual state is really good.

In fact, words cannot lie. The author's words are often warm and sunny, but also often sad and sad. So I think the author probably looks like a sunny person in front of others and sad at the end in real life. In addition, this book has a very good idea. Under the influence of the author's unique writing style and sometimes simple and sometimes fantastic stories, this book has become the book I read most often in recent days. All in all, this book is very well written. The only drawback is that there are some revealing human nature and very twisted tragic plots. Although these plots are not very "cut", they will still be very uncomfortable if you read them too much. It is a kind of discomfort that comes from the bottom of my heart. At least it will make me lose my appetite (so I have wanted to give up this book several times. If I didn't stay at home and really have nothing to do, I probably would really give up). If these were removed, it would be flawless. (The above are all personal opinions. Reading interests vary from person to person. Please do not regard my opinions as "truth") Also, regarding plot flaws I don't think they matter. After all, this is Tomato, and the author doesn't seem to be very experienced, so I just ignored the plot issues. After all, reading novels on Tomato is a joy in itself, and the flaws in the plot don't matter to me.

Super good-looking, the relationship between the male protagonist and tide Tong is so sweet [Send my heart][Send my heart] I am a [strong] man and I can't help but laugh when I see it [smirk] I don't know why I feel like I'm snickering [heartfelt] Just one thing, when looking for Nancheng, shouldn't the male protagonist add what kind of power Nancheng has? The return of the Turtle King is a drama [smirk][sneer laugh][sneak laugh][sneak laugh][sneak laugh]

The novel I followed after watching the animation was very novel, but a bit too sharp. Fortunately, the ending is a good ending. I didn't feel much about the two heroines at first. It was indeed a bit strange later on, but I think it is indeed a very good novel.