Myriad Realms: It All Begins with Fenglingyueying

I originally wanted to give it two stars, but the author is writing a book for the first time and has not seen any reviews, so the author cannot be discouraged. Then let me talk about the shortcomings I see! Hope it helps the author. The first point is that the protagonist of the book "I" is in the first person. This is better if you have read "Crazy Lich". You must know that there were a lot of people criticizing "Crazy Lich" when it came out. It is best for the author to write a book in the third person for the first time. The second point is that it is too open. Even the invincible text has limitations. The most important thing is that there is no transition. It can also be said that there is not enough transition and insufficient details. The third point is that I have played cyberpunk but have not watched the anime, but I can't tell where the opening scene of the protagonist is in Night City, and then there is the woman in cyberpunk. You must be rich, domineering enough, or have that kind of energy, otherwise it is impossible to attract the huntress of cyberpunk. The fourth point is that the pace is too fast. Where is the location, who are the characters, what are their personalities, what is the background, what happens in the story, and what conflicts they (she) have. If you write these well and don't go crazy in the middle, it will be a good book.

It slipped away, the first few pictures were fine, but the sudden change to first person is a bit unbearable.

Feeling pretty good Is the author still in school or has he just graduated a year or two 🍉

Spray lightly, it's too poisonous. Goodbye