[Battles] [A Reasonable Harem] [No Mindless Plot] [Female Characters Aren’t Just Window Dressing] [No Unmotivated Handouts] [Villains Aren’t Mindless] [Not a Power Fantasy] [First time writing, please give it a read.]
Iloria faced a threat from a mysterious energy from the Abyss. It had invaded and begun corrupting the surface, forcing the gods to summon a Hero whose talents could be used to fight the threat. Lin Tian, an ordinary young man from Blue Star, was suddenly summoned to this other world.
The Elf Goddess appears after Chapter 24. The ogre girl appears in Chapter 32, and they officially get together in Chapter 72.
The second Hero appears in Chapter 43.
I think it's okay for a new author, but I have to keep some distance from the line about Mollica, which always gives me a sense of crisis when reading (when I take on the role of the protagonist, I subconsciously don't like her), and then it is very important to handle the emotional line well. If there are some special things (such as the protagonist's inner fluctuations), try to let Alia comfort her, because overall she is the heroine, and she feels the most suitable. If you are not sure, try to reduce the space occupied by other women, otherwise it will look like the heroine has been bullied. The next difficult thing to deal with is the new brave line. I feel that this line is easy to collapse. I hope I can control it well.
I just saw it from the recommendation yesterday, and the author is very encouraged.
Already updated. ₍˄·͈༝·͈˄*₎◞ ̑̑
I feel like the author has a bright future. (˵¯͒¯͒˵)
After reading more than 30 chapters, I felt it was okay and quite in line with my taste. It's not Long Aotian or anything like that. It probably won't be the case later either. I haven't seen the back yet. Nowadays, there are too many kinds of Long Aotian, and I feel tired.
It's well written, but I wonder if the vampire and the female warrior from before are a harem
I think it's okay for a new author, but I have to keep some distance from the line about Mollica, which always gives me a sense of crisis when reading (when I take on the role of the protagonist, I subconsciously don't like her), and then it is very important to handle the emotional line well. If there are some special things (such as the protagonist's inner fluctuations), try to let Alia comfort her, because overall she is the heroine, and she feels the most suitable. If you are not sure, try to reduce the space occupied by other women, otherwise it will look like the heroine has been bullied. The next difficult thing to deal with is the new brave line. I feel that this line is easy to collapse. I hope I can control it well. I just saw it from the recommendation yesterday, and the author is very encouraged. Already updated. ₍˄·͈༝·͈˄*₎◞ ̑̑ I feel like the author has a bright future. (˵¯͒¯͒˵)
After reading more than 30 chapters, I felt it was okay and quite in line with my taste. It's not Long Aotian or anything like that. It probably won't be the case later either. I haven't seen the back yet. Nowadays, there are too many kinds of Long Aotian, and I feel tired.
It's well written, but I wonder if the vampire and the female warrior from before are a harem
The details are written very clearly.