Honghuang: If You Don't Care, What's Going on with Fengzu?

Not bad. Keep working hard.

It was okay at the beginning, but it stopped working around Chapter 20. There was no disguise when grabbing treasures, there was no escape route during the racial war, and people recognized the treasures. It was also written that the protagonist forgot that someone saw him taking the treasures, just to force the plot, limit the protagonist's magical power, limit the protagonist's IQ, the protagonist gave the treasure to a beautiful woman to kill the enemy. After seeing this, I tried my best to hold back and read on. Who knows that the beauty just ran out of strength, and the enemy's spirit escaped. In order to promote the plot, can't you come up with a reasonable reason? The plot is pushed forward so hard, and the protagonist is made to look stupid. The inability to disguise can be explained by prehistoric strength. Being recognized can be written about having to go to the battlefield. Did you forget to write about the protagonist? It just looks stupid. The protagonist has no fire and cannot use magical powers? Don't have time to save some kindling when you're on the road? How overwhelming is this prehistoric skill? You might as well write that the other party has learned the skills to chase or locate people since the protagonist escaped last time. The beauty just used up all her strength, and the enemy Yuanshen escaped. What a coincidence that I just used all my strength! Isn't it good to write about being rescued? Although eradicating the roots is the most correct way to write it, when I saw you letting the enemy spirit escape, I knew that this enemy would cause a lot of plots in the future. Creating all kinds of coincidences to advance the plot is too forceful. Just force it. It's not unacceptable. The main reason is that these coincidences make the protagonist feel aggrieved and stupid.

Nature and nurture, I can't tell the difference

This prehistoric period is written like martial arts. Daluo Jinxian's magical power can only travel one million miles with a shield, and it can only travel ten thousand miles at the beginning. This is also called magical power. It takes a thousand years to practice a weapon. Forget this minor problem, I can accept it. I can't see the small world at the back. The small world also wants to pull the enemy in and use the power of the world inside to fight against the enemy. Author, are you laughing at the manuscript? You are writing a piece of shit about the ancient world. This setting is so unreasonable. Is your inner world higher than the ancient world? If you can't defeat him, can you still drag the enemy in and use the power of the small world to fight against the enemy? This is the era when golden immortals are not as good as dogs. They can fight against enemies in a small world. There are so many magic weapons in the ancient world that can form their own worlds. There is no such thing as an awesome person who can take it in and use the power of the inner world to fight against the enemy. He can take in an immortal and destroy the inner world in minutes. ,

The protagonist's realm has been improved too slowly. The ferocious beasts robbed the dragon and Han the tribulations before he was promoted from a true immortal to a golden immortal. His cultivation level is low and he still dares to wander.

The Hongmeng Heavenly Measurement Ruler is the most precious treasure of acquired merit.

It looks good, but could the main character be stronger? He's a bit weak.

Good👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻

It's ok, come on, author

Personally I think it's good, keep up the good work

No wonder I have written so many books but this one is almost useless. Doesn't this book have an outline? How can the day after tomorrow come if the sky is not broken? Apart from other things, you wrote that the heels and feet of a phoenix were like sparrows, which made me laugh.

Continue to continue to follow up

It looks better.

No highlights. I feel like the protagonist is pretty useless even if he has a golden finger.

What kind of rubbish is this? I have read so many ancient books, but I have never seen such rubbish.

The sensory system is redundant. The key is still so wasteful

Author, stop writing. Your setting is a big problem. Every major catastrophe, the protagonist you write has a lower than average cultivation level. So let's look at it as a hammer? Feeling good but not so good

If you have a good relationship with the protagonist, you will die. This is too cheating.

How can you accept the Phoenix Princesses who have been written to death by you?

It's rubbish. The protagonist is a sinkhole. Whenever he encounters danger, someone will resist him. He will either die or be half-dead.

What do you want to write about? I don't understand, and I can't help but want to be stubborn. If you have a wife, you need a knife. If you don't understand, just ask. The author must be envious of the protagonist and someone likes him, right?

It's not good, I don't recommend it.

The word "gou" is not highlighted

Lots of mistakes,

Very good👌🏻Come on

Too low-level, Jinxian?