I Wanted to Be a Pillar, but I Became a String

First of all, as a system text, it's still not satisfying enough. After all, I started fifth in the game. The original protagonist group developed too fast, and the protagonist seemed a bit slow in comparison. It gave me the feeling that a wave of big ones were developed in the early stage, they were bad in the middle stage, and they were invincible in the later stage. This kind of development rhythm is a little bit chaotic. If it is a development story, the system should help the protagonist reach invincibility as early as possible. If it is a combat story, it should make breakthroughs and insights in the battle, instead of the opponent bursting out in the battle, but the protagonist keeps giving the opponent a chance, and then runs away if there is no other way. Secondly, I personally think that the protagonist is not decisive enough (it is a matter of development after all. Whoever is invincible will be shot to death if he is unhappy). The more decisive and calm the protagonist is, the more likable he is (of course, the funny guy is also good [laughs][laughs]). Finally, I feel like the emotional line could be written a little more delicately. No matter how much battles are written in a book, a little bit of daily life is necessary. The rhythm must have ups and downs. It would be a bit rushed to add it after the ending, right? At the end, it's still very interesting, otherwise I wouldn't have finished reading it in one night [Send my heart] [Send my heart] It's the first time I've written it like this and it's already great [Send my heart]

It's so good, even if you give me five stars, this is the only one that's better this year. The author keeps sending you razor blades [angry]

It's very exciting, and the feeling of fighting can be imagined directly by reading the text. Finally, there is a novel that is continuously updated and the main character is serious about being a ghost.

Wow, it looks great. I finally found one who is not from Zhu's side. I like that the protagonist is the villain. It's so interesting (this is purely my personal opinion. I really hope that Wu Mei and the protagonist Jin Yu will form CP [smirk])

I'll give it a serious review. The author is very attentive in portraying the protagonist. The plot line is very smooth and not too big. The protagonist's strength is gradually getting stronger without the feeling of being cheated all of a sudden. I like this type of novels. As I read it, I consciously entered the perspective of the protagonist. I just feel like the protagonist's harem has a lot of men and women.

I really want to cry, woo woo woo. Jin Yu and Shinobu really made me cry to death. From the beginning when Jin Yu almost died to now, Jin Yu has really taken one step at a time and made a lot of efforts for the final plan. Wow woo woo. The system disappears and the last half of the ending made me burst into tears... I have watched it all in one go since I saw it in the morning and now I will cry to death! It is worth spending so much time to watch it. The combat part is also very well written. π_π I'm done (don't) finish it! Woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo, yeah, right thing, oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo approach. Why are only three hours of comments shown? Is it because I was scrolling through Douyin and switching to other novels while reading? (Angry

The writing is good, but I feel that the pace is too fast. We need to outline the three major chapters and then add other elements, such as the Mugen Train chapter. Since the map has been mentioned before, we will first decide on a hundred or more chapters, and then conceive of Mugen Train's other forces. Join in, etc., So that the fanfic feels more novel, and the Infinite City chapter also includes other forces. The original villain does not have to die in battle, and the protagonist can save other powers if he doesn't want to, etc. I just have these ideas, and I still envy the author's writing skills to express his thoughts.

The characters are very vividly drawn, and there are jokes in the sentences to add interest. The battle process is very detailed and makes people excited. The happy ending is also very good. In summary, it is too little, but the structure is perfect, so it is not bad. So, my evaluation is--five stars!

It's average, but it's still worth watching. I give five stars to anything that makes me read it carefully. I hope the author can write better in the future and not be too messy in the later stage. The ending can be more perfect [laughing]

It's good to read. Although I probably guessed the ending from the beginning, it doesn't stop it from being a good book. The author writes the conflicting and darkened psychology of the protagonist very well, but there is a little less description of other characters, like Rain on the Other Side. Very beautiful, recommended

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What can I say? The idea of ​​writing is still good, but the writing style is still a little immature, but it still deserves 5 stars. Who makes me like villains? [Sending my heart] Come on, the author can improve his writing skills.

Although this book has a system, it is not as broken as other novels. The system is not a tool to the protagonist but a family member. The twist at the end scared me to death. At first, when the table of contents didn't appear, I thought the ending was bad, but there were no surprises. This novel is really nice. I hope the author can write a better book!

This is my favorite Demon Slayer fan novel I have read on Tomato, and the composition of the author is very complex [laughing evilly] And how do you manage to hit my XP accurately every time [face covering] It's really hard to justify not giving it five stars.

It's quite interesting, and the author is also... Active.

After reading it, I think it is a good book objectively. Not everyone likes Jin Yu's character, but I want to say that even the most kind-hearted people will have evil thoughts in their hearts. Come on, author! The extra is really good to watch I finished reading it in one day, I'm really a genius

What I have been thinking about is a ghost who can breathe. This author's writing is very consistent with my thoughts. It is very interesting, but it is too short and not enough. I hope the author will continue to write good books.

How can I put it this way? The plot of this book is pretty good, and the author uses a lot of detailed descriptions. The characters' actions are vivid, the imagination is rich, and they are quite individual. However, the writing style is still a bit immature. The article can use Internet words, but not too many. After all, it is a novel, so don't pursue the sense of the times too deliberately. I hope the author can actively make corrections in the future writing process and leave a five-star rating [I understand]

This book is quite good overall, but the pace is a little too fast. The first sixteen chapters of Jin Yu are sealed in memory. The early content is good but a bit incoherent. If you read it quickly, it will be easily broken. (If you read slowly, don't use your brain, otherwise it will be easy to break.) Some small places are very vague in description. If you don't think about it carefully, you may feel that it is not right. All in all, this book is quite good. It's a good book to read after dinner.

This is the first time I have read a whole book on Tomato. This work can be said to be something I couldn't help but read when I had free time. The author writes really well about fighting scenes and other things, including descriptions of daily life. It can be said that it really touched my heart. I hope there will be better works in the future.

It's super good-looking, and the leading actor is very handsome and charismatic! Ah! ! Super pretty! ! !

Super beautiful, a five-star rating

There are some newspaper articles in front of you. If you get used to it, you will think that he is really good-looking. I just feel that the main character is a bit awkward, but the rest is very good and good-looking. It is worth recommending😋

It's so good, I finished it in less than a day

It's a very interesting novel, and the ending is also very good, but it's a bit confusing.

It's so beautiful, my favorite fanfic

It's so beautiful. Looking back at Jin Yu's life, it's simply a legend.

It's very good. The quality of Xiaobai Shuang's articles is relatively high, but it's a bit unreadable, so I probably can't edit it anymore, haha.

It's well written, but it just doesn't feel like it has any passion.

Very good. This is the best Demon Slayer derivative work I have seen so far. The content is logically clear and the protagonist's combat power does not collapse the plot. It is also quite good, but it is a bit stiff in terms of excessiveness. Everything else is fine. I hope the author will work hard to produce better works