The Era of Immortal Cultivation in the World

It's non-toxic and reads smoothly. The new concept of the interstellar cultivator, the finalist, is also good.

The writing style is excellent, and it can even be said that it doesn't match Tomato. The interstellar cultivator, which is a bit vulgar, is very well written.

It's still very good. The combination of technology and immortality is simple but the sense of drama is not strong. The author can take a look at Forty Thousand Years of Cultivation and Super Mechanic, which will probably be helpful to your writing. I would like to make a small suggestion. I suggest the author arrange the growth of the protagonist as soon as possible. Because there is a small disadvantage at the beginning, that is, the difference between immortals and mortals is that the protagonist running around in the interstellar with an uncultivated pet like a small mechanical dog is understandable if he feels nostalgic. Later, it seems that the protagonist is too stupid to spend most of his savings and even go to the more dangerous Red Crow World to do missions just to save the puppy. After all, you can still live for more than ten years without any protection. It is reasonable to live for decades if you preserve it. After several decades, even if your novel has a relatively long time span, the protagonist has reached the golden elixir, so it is more reasonable to save it. If it was to push the protagonist to go out on adventures, the reason should actually be more solid. For example, this task is a requirement of the master, but it is true that there will be some remedies later.

Very good, hope it becomes popular Come on [what] [what]

Come on, the settings are pretty good. Just maintain the setting and tell the story well.