The Paradise of a Collapsing World

There is no doubt that this is a good book, but there are a few things to note [eating melon] Regarding the characters, to be honest, Ellie's personality is a bit broken [petrified]. Generally speaking, it can be regarded as a personality that is more in line with Ellie's "lover". Regarding the content, it looks a bit confusing [something], and some readers may not understand it. So I give the author some tips As follows [note]: 1. You can add a little summary of the protagonist's background when writing, so that you won't be unable to understand it. 2. Write more about other characters, otherwise it will be too monotonous to only write about the protagonist and Ellie. Enrich the overall integrity of the novel. 3. The style of writing is a bit too convoluted, so it's easy to get lost when reading it, so I'll simplify the style. Because of the above points, I gave it 4 stars (not because I am afraid of the author being proud [laughing]) ps. These three points are my personal suggestions (don't criticize if you don't like them). The author can adopt them or not, but I also hope that this novel will be 🔥, come on! ! ! [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart] Based on my re-reading of this novel, I would like to give readers some things to pay attention to when reading: 1. Although this book only has tens of thousands of words, the writing style is still good, but this book is too fast-paced (personal opinion, I hope the author will not say I [send my heart]). Readers who like slow-paced books can try to read it. 2. This is a purely second-generation work (it seems that we can't say it too absolutely, we still have to see how the author writes it). 3. Readers who like Alicia can read it, because Ali in this book has a strong self-awareness (in layman's terms, she is like an ordinary little girl), and there are also parts of Ali's peach blossoms in full bloom, which you can savor [eating melon]

Excellent work, it's a pity to see it so late. Personally, I like this very much. Although the update frequency is a bit slow, as long as it can be completed normally, I will be satisfied. Come on, author, I will always support you

Just think of the protagonist as our Kizaru-sama [face covering] [OK]

Why does it feel so familiar?

This book is pretty good among Tomato fanfics. Why are there so few people [smile]

It's good to watch. I've watched it for a long time. The plot is quite good.

Good looking, good luck to the author

Come on, the story is okay

It's a pity that Alicia is still dead....(As can be seen from the extra)

I think it's okay, it's pretty good, at least I like it

Why do I always feel like I've heard it somewhere? ? ? ?

It's very interesting. I hope the author can write this book completely.

Not bad, give some support to new authors [sending heartfelt wishes]

It's well written, and it's the kind of book that's very enjoyable to read. If there are any mistakes, the author will correct them in a timely manner, and he often interacts with readers.

Good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking, good looking

Fresh knives are coming soonヾ(≧O≦)Ouch~

Eat them all, no one can escape the huge mouth

Very good, very beautiful

Very good book, very interesting. I feel that the author's plot is very similar to "The Fire-Chasing Herrscher of the Collapsed World" in the starting point

Not bad and good-looking authentic

I can't write, but the book is very good. I hope it won't be a eunuch.

It's beautiful, but I just don't know why the rating can't go up.

The setting is very interesting, and the interaction with Ellie is also good. When will it be updated?