He Is Weak and Can't Take Care of Himself, and He Hits Something Weird with One Punch

After reading a few chapters, the first picture contains a bit too much description of the main character's name. There is no need to add the protagonist's name in every paragraph, it's okay to omit it appropriately. My overall feeling from the end was that there weren't enough details, the description of the environment was a bit sparse, and the pace was a little fast. I suggest the author describe it more and pace it a little slower. Finally: What I show here has not been rated by anyone before me! Feeling a little bit honored! Finally caught a newly released book! ! The above are my very serious opinions! Most of the writers who started out were fast-paced and not very detailed, but things got better over time. I wish your writing will get better and better!

The form of this weird world is based on a game. The setting is very clear, but the chance of being selected is too random! If this were true in real life, it would be exciting.

I was attracted by the title of the book. The male protagonist Jin Lin is really good at talking. There is a saying: "Speak human words when you see people, and tell ghosts when you see ghosts." Oh, no, the correct answer is "high emotional intelligence". However, if the second chapter becomes the first chapter, more people will read it!

When Zhu Yu took the initiative to find Jin Lin and asked him if he wanted to join his team, he sighed that his strength was really his stepping stone!

I thought it was a male author, but it turns out it's a male video written by a female author. It's amazing [Like]

Yes, come on, author

I really like Jin Lin's decision to help Yun Jue, it fills his personality

The sense of detail is great, and you can see that the author put a lot of thought into it. Come on!

The author is awesome, I like this writing style. Decisively collect and follow, looking forward to looking forward to ing.

The male protagonist is really brave and a very talented person, and he is very bold. In the campus dungeon, he was the principal without any fear.

It's not bad. Although it's not a refreshing article or a brain-burning article, as someone who likes to relax by reading, it's the most suitable one.

The hero's ability is so special. After entering the dungeon, the dungeon will disappear! This is so interesting and beautiful! Ps. I like the way each story (copy) unfolds😍.