Bai Yueguang's HP Was Criticized Wildly and the White and Black People's Guide

In view of the performance of this book, I make the following criticisms: President: Author, your writing is so good, I'm dying. Points: 1. The characters are all full-bodied and the overall concept is very clear. 2. Try to stick to the original work as much as possible, without any special character changes. 3. The plot is very fresh, many of which are original plots that I have never seen before. 4. The author is also very active and will reply to every comment. This kind of author is really rare, why don't you cherish it as soon as possible. Strong criticism: Author Baozi, you update too little in one day. As a reader, I simply can't read enough. I hope the author will continue to work hard, Special approval 2023.10.14 .22.09 (OS: The format may not be quite right, please just make do with it) (ｏ_)ノ"(ノ_＜.)

I like the heroine's character very much. I feel that Riddle's emotional line is the best later. She likes the madman the most. I like it very much. I will urge you later.

The heroine is super good-looking, the setting is interesting, and her personality suits my taste. Many of the people who entered the Eagle Courtyard for the first time were entering the Snake Courtyard, Badger Courtyard, and Lion Courtyard. Otome loves the heroine, even the famous handsome guys. The most important thing is that there is Tom Riddle and Voldemort's line. I really like this kind of yandere and crazy person. There are very few good Riddle lines. If you don't dismantle Luo Xmin, he will retaliate if he is not angry if he is found troublesome.

Kitty saw a Ravenclaw heroine for the first time!

All I can say is that the author's writing of the heroine is really awesome. I really love to see typical Chinese female images in the HP world. They are gentle, beautiful, powerful and mysterious. They are tolerant and love the world but will not stop for anyone. Emotional line: Very touching, very touching, very touching! ! ! And the most important thing is that she gives people a very low sense of deliberate strategy. It is that the heroine is trying her best to make up for the shortcomings in her HP while working hard for her main career of returning home. It is not a nanny story. She makes up for the shortcomings, but she is only adequate. Her attitude is not humble, not flattering, and does not deliberately attract other people's attention. She has her own three views. Some people may think that she has a high attitude, but I think this is exactly the charm of oriental women. She has her own goals and will not be distracted by other things. I can sympathize, comfort, and pity. But it is absolutely impossible to love you alone. The heroine is not a nymphomaniac. I have never seen one love another. Instead, she often treats the male protagonists coldly and treats her tenderly. In fact, there is a limit. The emotional line with Snape is handled very well. It is a family line. I have seen many rescues of Snape dressed as Lily. It is really awkward. Snape's biggest and greatest charm lies in his love for Lily. If even this love must be mixed with the heroine's deliberate strategy, it will be really awkward. This is the family line. Very warm When treating women, as long as they are not malicious (Pan Xi, etc.), They are treated with kindness. I also make up lessons for my classmates. I have worked tirelessly to prepare my best friend for five years... Three years... I understand everything. It is painful hahahahahahaha. The author's pen really shows the image of the "only pure white" Oriental woman with Bai Yueguang.

This novel is so good, and there are so many fanfics like this. Some of them are really bad in outlook, but I like the character of the heroine in this one very much *▽*, maybe my personal preferences are different. Come on, I've been waiting for your novel!

It's a really great book. The female protagonist is strong and calm and won't give in to any man. The male protagonists may be crazy or gentle, but they all love Ling wholeheartedly. The storyline is very detailed. It's really super good-looking, yy ds! What really shocked me was that Gemini didn't really care whether they were together with Ling. They couldn't share Ling with others, but they could share Ling with each other and have Ling. Moreover, the pure love among the male protagonists is really touching. Voldemort took advantage of Ling many times, which is very disgusting. If you think about his character carefully, it feels like he should have done this in the first place. What a contradiction! I hope Ling can finally realize his wish and go home! Or change your mind, stay in this world, and devote yourself to your career (because I feel that Ling will not fall in love with others, so I really don't want to have a male protagonist, a female protagonist who is beautiful alone, and a male partner who has a one-way crush. Personal opinions, please do not comment!!!!)

This book is so well written that I like it❤️. I almost couldn't stand HP's books, but I accidentally discovered this book. I read it with the intention of trying it out, and found it very interesting. However, I didn't fall asleep until three o'clock after reading it when I had to go to school the next day [face covering]. Moreover, the heroine of this book is completely different from other protagonists who are involved in the main plot. The character of the original character is also very close to the original work. I hope the author will stick to it and support him forever [Sending Hearts]

Good-looking, Lin Ling is so cute. Who among you understands that when I see Shuangzi and Lin Ling together, all I can think about is Shuangzi kissing Lin Ling [shy]

Beautiful, this book, really, the character of the heroine perfectly suits my needs

I like how the heroine is gentle and strong, saves everyone and tolerates everyone! Pansy is really unpleasant in the first half of this book. Besides, I like all the characters. Even Voldemort has his own unique charm. Every couple had a great time kissing each other. It's such a pity that we don't play with Si Jiao. We don't even have Si Jiao in the extras. Mrs. Qiuqiu can give her a family-oriented extra. It's the first time I've seen Heiha. I like it. Heiha is also very tense. The Gemini characters are both restrained and flamboyant, and they are well portrayed. The characteristics of each character are well mastered! Very memorable, Mrs. Kua Kua The twins, the principal, Snape, etc. Deviated from their fate and survived. It was so touching. I cried at many points in the middle. Worth recommending! Will watch it again! Finally, I hope there will be a special episode belonging to Snape to express my feelings to my wife. I almost forgot to cue our little dragon, he is so arrogant and cute Xiaoduo is perfect for the charming villain in the extra story Blaise's character is also very distinct Sirius's sense of loyalty as a dog To sum up, my wife is great! Sirius has a side story, so does our family's teaching also... [Note]

Oh my god, it's so beautiful. Why is it not available all of a sudden? The heroine is so cute and has a really great personality. She likes the heroine in the cat form the most. But who is the hero? Each one has a face

So beautiful! It's not enough to watch at all! Draco, Cedric, the Weasley twins, I want to see them and Ling! The most important thing is with Voldemort! I love paranoia so much [admiration]

Looks good! It's been a long time since I poked fun at my HP fanfic. The female protagonist is very strong and belongs to the career category (she doesn't get the love of the male protagonists at all ~ bushi). I love every one of the male protagonists. I hope the ending is all in the bag! ! It's just that this author is a bit slow in updating (dog head protection), give me liver like crazy! ! ! ! ! It's uncomfortable waiting for the update 555555

First of all, I would like to praise the author's writing style. The author's writing style is really beautiful. You can see the scenes in the article just by looking at the words. It is not childish at all. Secondly, the heroine has a good design. If this kind of otome is not written well, the image of the heroine and the hero will be very greasy, but this article has a good grasp of the character design, and the character design of the heroine who saves all living beings is also so beautiful [Adore] [Adoration] [Adoration] There are very few female protagonists of Takain in hp stories, and Ling's performance is also very consistent with Takain's wisdom and wisdom. Then the author is really good at shaping characters. Each character has captured the highlights and has its own characteristics. The characters are very three-dimensional, and the personality changes of each character are also very natural. It can be seen that the author has carefully arranged the plot and the overall story will not give people an awkward feeling. Let me tell you more, I really like the heroine, she is smart, beautiful, and has great love, and she is not a virgin at all. I really like this kind of female Bodhisattva character [crying] Finally, I praise the author for writing such a good article. In fact, it can be seen from the text that the author has also poured his own feelings into it, and he has definitely studied the original work of HP carefully, and he has a good grasp of character creation [learned] It is not a loss to invest in I must focus on praising Riddle's line. I personally think it is the best line. The author has grasped the image of the Dark Lord very well. The whole book looks sadistic. With the blessing of the author's writing, I personally think it is among the top three of Riddle's lines in my mind.

To be honest, it's pretty good. The plot is delicately thought out and paired with a classic plot, giving it a post-millennium style. A glance at the return of the white moonlight. But! The characters all have yandere attributes and dark sides. It can be read in one sitting if the word count is less than 300,000. Now, with this word count, you have to take a break at any time, and it will become fragmented when you read it again. The separation between the real world and the novel world, the separation between readers and the core of the characters. Because the character creation is unfolding (horizontal development, characteristics gradually increase), which is different from the ordinary gradual type (vertical depth, characteristics gradually deepen), so when you pick up the book to read, you will unconsciously criticize the characters. In short, it is a drama. What's more, the original HP work is very long (the short one is the translated simplified version for children). Even if the plot of the original work is simplified, it still seems too long in this slightly depressing atmosphere. But! Blessed are those who like yandere, or those who like this style must really love it. After all, I, who can't stand a bit of abuse (I can't abuse anyone), think it's good.

This is one of the best fanfics I have ever read. I hope there will be more.

It's very interesting. The characters of each male protagonist are well controlled but not very OOC. The emotional line is okay and the plot is not bad. The only bad point is that there are too many descriptions of the female protagonist's appearance. The description is repeated and has a general meaning: "The female protagonist is like a cat, with a white moonlight temperament" and almost every subsequent chapter has to describe it this way. I don't think it's necessary to go to such great lengths. After all, the people who clicked in to watch it were all here for the male protagonist and his love story, not the female protagonist. It would be better if there were less descriptions of the heroine, such as her appearance.

This book is very beautiful, the characters are all very detailed, the plot has ups and downs, and the author's writing is very good, even if you haven't read the original work, you can read it. The heroine baby is also relatively sober. She is like a living person. It can be said that she is very vivid. Moreover, the heroine baby is also a great beauty. She has no ill intentions towards the people around her. At the beginning, she just wanted to go home. She is very determined and lovable. And this book is a heart-throb. If you want to get into the trap, I highly recommend those who pass by to read this HP fanfic. After all, the rice is really delicious. So, recommended, super recommended, don't miss it if you pass by!

It's very good-looking. I personally like the Slytherin heroine, so I read it with the mentality of giving it a try at first. But the more I read, the more I got into it. The author really portrayed the characters very delicately. Bai Yue's Ling is not a little white flower. She will be strong and work hard. She doesn't rely on other people. The early characters of other male protagonists are very consistent with the characters. I also like it when he goes crazy later. There are just a few extra plots. Can the author write more tvt. And after watching it, it's a bit boring to look for anything else to watch, and I seem to be addicted to it. I really recommend reading it and must give it good reviews. I like to read HP Otome's strong recommendation.

Ling should go home! Everything she does is based on the situation back home. She is gentle and willing to save them and help them. This is because she is a very good person and I really hope that she can eventually return to the place she wants to go based on her own wishes, so I only watched the single line and I didn't watch the rest. To be honest, I want to see something a bit more Be like! But I felt that the last one was actually okay, not too cruel. I feel this book is very well written. Ling is really a gentle and kind person. So I think he needs respect even more! Although forced love is fun to watch, I always feel that love is mutual, but overall it is very good-looking. However, the single line is a bit short, but there are many all-in-one moments in the back (in fact, I want to see how they regret after Ling leaves! Personal opinion, personal opinion). And I think 30% is a very good number. It is not too much, and it can perfectly maintain your gentleness and kindness, but it also implies a bit of alienation. Okay, actually I thought the author would write about Ling returning to real life... And the friendship line in it is also very good, Daisy! ! (She was the last reminder that girls are the most beautiful creatures in the world!!) There are also family lines! Snape! ! Dumbledore is also very good! ! Generally speaking, there are few shortcomings. For me, it is the point of forced love that can be ignored. After all, there are single lines and all-directional ones. And compared to these male protagonists, I like Ling's character better. Her tenacity, her kindness, her unyielding, all her compassion are very, very good (and love is not a reason to trap a person). The author is great, great! ! Finally, I hope Ling can live a peaceful and happy life forever! ! You are a very, very good person, Ling!

The plot description is delicate, and the transformation of psychological activities is natural and not sloppy. It perfectly shows that the young and ignorant love between the protagonists has turned into a quite emotional and abnormal attachment relationship. Lin Ling's setting is great. Although it has the characteristics of "white moonlight" in the traditional sense, it is very cleverly grasped: it is difficult to get close to but truly illuminates everyone. It is beautiful and holy enough to fascinate everyone. The only thing that worries me is that this lily is not very good (after all, the bg line is so good, and if the gl line is more good, I guess Ling Lingzi will really be unable to escape). If possible, please give me some extra short stories during your lifetime [shy]

Lin Ling is really like the moon in the sky. The moonlight shines quietly on everyone. She is an existence that is out of reach of everyone. Everyone yearns for her to stay for themselves and wants to have her. She is so beautiful, gentle, patient, calm and has her own goals, everyone can't help but be attracted to her. The author's writing style is also very good, and the characters are well created. I hope more people will read this book. It is really beautiful. After reading it, I felt empty and couldn't help but read it again. I still can't get out of it a month after reading it (╥╯╰╥)ง

I have also read another book by the author, and the writing is very good. I am really happy to have such a meal in the HP circle. The author's writing style is also very delicate, but the fly in the ointment is that I feel that sometimes the description of the heroine is a little It makes me uncomfortable, but I can ignore it and continue watching. The most satisfying point for me is that in the Triwizard Tournament, the author finally set up a special identity for the heroine to participate, instead of adding one more place to the Triwizard Tournament. All in all, it's a good piece of work. Because she is labeled as an otome and a heartthrob, some plots are acceptable. If you want to see this type of treasure, go ahead!

Really good looking. Mr. Haohao turned out to be a black heart sesame glutinous rice dumpling, which is really interesting! Come on Seid! [Shy][Shy] Besides, Theo is also very cute [Shy] My Theo... Chasing the moon even if it doesn't belong to him [I'm about to cry]

You must watch it until the end. It's really good. It's all white and black [Love] [Love] and the writing is very good. But I don't know why the rating is so low, but I really must watch it until the end! ! ! The setting of the heroine is also very good, basically there is no breakdown. There are Harry, Draco, Theodore, Blaise, and Tom (the version with a nose), Cedry [blowing kiss] [blowing kiss] are all quite perverted, I like it very much 😍

Love it. Actually, I want to see the sweet story between the seven of them and Ling. It's so cool that the seven of them have to be jealous every day. . . Ps I hold the banner for Riddle and Xiaoduo.

Very beautiful, I love the hostess design! ! ! ! ! ! I feel like this ending is pretty good. But what I want more is that the heroine likes Harry! ! ! ! ! I hope the author will publish a new book soon. 😘😘😘😘😘😍😍😍😍😍

It's beautiful, I love watching it, I watch it every day, I finished it all in one day, five stars is the highest tomato rating, not the highest rating in my heart (Invincible is super beautiful) [Sending Hearts] [Blowing Kisses] [Blowing Kisses]

Nice! This book is also called "Ling and Her Vicious Dogs" Very touching, very touching I feel like the only shortcoming is that the extras at the back are too short and not enough to watch. And I really want everything to end if Ling chooses to stay. I'm a native dog and I like to watch Highly recommended to watch